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LightningSword


Me. Take it or leave it.

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Some say he is just an urban legend. Others call him a ghost. Others still call him a heartless monster, living on nothing but rage, fear, and isolation.

But what is the real story behind "the Phantom Pony of Everfree"?

Fluttershy accidentally wanders into the territory of the pony everyone fears, and she is a witness to his cold, frightening fury. Scared to tears, Fluttershy is determined never to cross him again. But later, she witnesses something thought to be impossible, and deduces for herself that this "Phantom" is really a gentle, kind pony who merely suffers from the pain of loneliness. She then strives to learn the secrets behind this menace of a pony: who he is, why he lives in the woods, and why he is so angry.

The Phantom Pony, Nocturne, wants nothing to do with Fluttershy, and wants to avoid her at all costs. But his feelings toward her, and her friends, fluctuate over time, and he finds his mind and heart slowly changing. Whether for better or for worse, he is unsure, and he finds himself helpless against the kind light of a mare who may just know him better than he knows himself.


A rewrite of "Kind Light - A Gentle Dark Supplemental", combined with the rewrite of Chapter 1 of "The Gentle Dark".

Special thanks to the amazing Spirit Shift, a man far more talented than I, for the incredible artwork of the title character.

Featured on 3/17/2016!

Chapters (27)
Comments ( 325 )

Somepony get him some ice! He needs to chill!
more please!

6171331 Yes, more on the way. :pinkiehappy: And thanks for the fave!

6171344 its a good start and i wish to see where it leads. :pinkiehappy:

Somepony's grumpy
Cannot wait to see more

6171506 And so there shall be. :pinkiehappy: Thanks for the favorite!

Lightning sword i quite enjoyed this even if it was a small snip of writing you still did a marvelous job :raritystarry: :heart:
Cant wait to see more!!!

6171745 Oh, don't you worry. There's more to come! :pinkiehappy: And thanks for the favorite!

What an awesome way to start this story off. I'm loving it so far.

6173930 Ask, and you shall receive. :raritywink:


6174127 I appreciate that, and thanks for the fave! :pinkiehappy:

Does pinkie know nocturne? Hmm... this could lead to some interesting conclusions.
more please!

6174783 Its Pinkie Pie don't question it. We will never know on how she works. Ever.

I NEED MOAR!!! Whenever you have the time of coarse.

6174783 Actually, no. Nopony really knows Nocturne. She just thought it was weird to give him a name aside from "the Phantom Pony". :twilightsmile:


6175658 Worry not. There will be more. :pinkiesmile:

Dat ghost busters reference. I love the story so far! its really great!

6176538 Thanks, and thanks for the fave. :twilightsmile:

Pinke if there was a 100 foot marshmallow man i bet everyone would see it (and roast him maybe) (nice reference lightning) cant wait for the next one also FREE HUGS *hugs* :pinkiehappy:

6177704 Thanks for reading. *Hugs back*

Kind to animals but despises other ponies as he was outcast by them. :pinkiehappy:
more please!

In the words of poof, More! Good! More!

Nice chapter, That will teach fluttershy to walk in the wrong part of the woods and drop her bag, Hopefully she doesnt have to vist Zecora in awhile! :twilightoops:

6200731 I take it you're not fond of Fluttershy? :fluttershysad:

So many ghostbusters jokes

6201649 I couldn't help it. They just popped in there. :rainbowlaugh:

Thanks for reading. :raritywink:

This is how you introduce a character! Especially one who is supposed to be as creepy as Nocturne. Good job.

It seems I'm a little late to this party but I don't care. On to the next chapter.

6212938 This was supposed to be an improvement in telling Nocturne's origin story. I'm glad to see I was successful. :twilightsmile: Thanks for reading!

Finally got a chance to read this, and very much looking forward to more.

You walked in the wrong part of the woods!
(Fluttershy) oh...shit
(Rainbow dash) Run Bitch run!
XD

So far I have enjoyed this story also love the direction it is going.
SO YEAH THIS BETTER GET EVEN BETTER. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:
~T.CC

6247761 Thanks so much for reading! :pinkiehappy: And thanks for the fave, too!

6247784 No problem dude I just started reading this off my ,none existent, account and finally decided to get an account and stuff.... well anyway so far I think you are doing great with the story keep doing what your doing.
~T.CC

It continues!:pinkiehappy:
now, i predict that nocturne will be highly confused about why fluttershy is being nice to him and aproach her late at night and confront her about it.
more please

6248075 Not a bad idea. :twilightsmile: Thanks again for reading!

And the story just got 120% more awesome.

You know, I think this is one of my favorite story so far! I know I haven't been a member for long, but I really cant find a story this good. I just have one qusiton, how did you come up with this idea, (if you don't mind me asking)

6248934 I aim to please. :raritywink: Thanks for reading! :pinkiehappy:


6248947 Nah, it's okay. :twilightsmile: I actually came up with the character before the story (which is actually frowned upon :twilightoops:), and the backstory I gave him ended up becoming my first fic, "The Gentle Dark". But I rushed his origin story in that fic, so I cut off the first chapter, extended it, and am now posting it chapter by chapter, right here. :scootangel:

Once this story is all posted, I'll re-publish "The Gentle Dark" to continue the story. Keep reading, and thanks for commenting! :pinkiehappy:

And this update earned the upgrade from read later to favorites :D amazing

6249122 Thank you so much. I appreciate that. :pinkiesmile:

FIRST oh I'm going to get so many hate messages for this
good chapter .... but bloody CLIFFHANGER

~T.CC

Awww! Fluttershy is so cute in this chapter! And lets hope Nocturne does like the package.

and the next morning she will find them back in her room when she wakes up with a note saying "i don't want your charity"
more please

She couldn't be sure that Pinkie could keep this a secret

I actually think Pinkie would be a good secret keeper, pinky promise and all.
Also, DUCKY!
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The last part of Nocturne's care package was arguably the most difficult. Having to hide her intentions from Pinkie, Rarity and Spike had been stressful, but doable. But here, even in the comfort of her own cottage, Fluttershy had great difficulty in placing this finishing touch on the gift basket, and the stress seemed to want to seep back into her mind, bit by bit.
“Hmmm . . . bunny, duckie, or teddy? Oh, dear, I just can't decide . . . .”

That made me laugh so hard! I also face palmed a bit. :rainbowlaugh:

“Hmmm . . . bunny, duckie, or teddy? Oh, dear, I just can't decide . . . .”

k i don't know when this chapter was made but i get the feeling this is a reference to a horror game

6318778 I honestly did not see the connection until you pointed it out. My God, subliminal messaging! :pinkiegasp:

But seriously, thanks for the fave, and the follow. Glad you like it! :twilightsmile:

Neat. I was wondering when you would update this. Are you going to do it more frequently now, or will this be less often?

6445188 I just need to get back to writing, that's all. Trouble is, I might not for a while. I was lucky to get this last chapter up. :ajsleepy:

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