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I'm older than your average brony, but then I've always enjoyed cartoons. I'm an experienced reviewer, EqD pre-reader, and occasional author.


Star Shine is quite a rare colt. In fact, some ponies believe him to be cursed, based on an old mares' tale. Detective Gumshoe doesn't believe a word of it, and if it's the last thing he does, he'll serve the city and the Princesses he loves by finding out what's really been terrorizing the neighborhood.

Tied for 7th place in the /fic/ write off "Cutting Ties."

Featured on Equestria Daily!

Many thanks to Uma for critique and character analysis.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 15 )

Woah! Awesome! A shame that you did not publish it until today.

7112559 It needed a lot of revision from the original, and I just now got around to it. As you can see between the total word count (which doesn't update properly) and the chapter word count, it's gotten almost twice as long.

7113268 Objection!!!

Hold it!

I was I bounced between "Golden Shield was the killer" and "Star Shine did it" for most of the story (sadly, AA games have made me automatically suspect the "victim" as the perp) , but then you gave astonishingly logical reasons for why "person A-Z" wouldn't be the killer. It was a roller coaster of expectations - I even thought it was TIREK at one point.

This needs more views. Take my like.

This is why I kill all albinos!

They're in league with DEMONS!!



I've seen this sort of thing too often to be surprised... not that I didn't guess it the very first time I ever encountered something like it in the old "Twilight Zone".

But basically, any time a kid/person's involved in suspicious circumstances and has some bizarre/rare physical appearance and people disappear/die It's ALWAYS some kind of demon the kid/person made a deal with. I was hoping for a little twist at least, otherwise it was just scrolling along to get to the reveal.

What a good story. Would love to see Gumshoe handle more cases in the future; perhaps asked to look into something by Celestia herself?

Not bad! I liked it!

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Man, this has really come a long way. :D

Found this, though:

But the rest of force

This was excellent! Have a like and a fave :pinkiehappy:

Thank you for your review!

Nice story I got Beyond Two Souls vibes for it.

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