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Bluegrass Brooke


Gonna try this whole writing thing again.

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Written by Nerf Stranger and myself. We work on all the chapters together as a team.

After his reformation, Discord had finally warmed up to the idea of having friends, but friendship without trust and mutual understanding means nothing. His latest attempt to gain Twilight’s ends in a magical catastrophe. Injured and left without his god-like powers, Discord has to work with the obstinate alicorn to find a solution.

It soon becomes apparent that a misguided spell isn’t the only wedge driving the pair apart. When those wedges are removed, it’s up to Discord and Twilight to repair the damage. They never imagined it would go further than that . . .


Dark tag for emotional dark scenes, not for grimdark.


This is a stand alone novel. It is NOT a sequel or branch story to my completed work, This Cruel and Random World.


Amazing cover art a gift from Nerf's friend, Madelee. Thanks so much! It's amazing! :pinkiehappy:

Editing for the first chapter courtesy of my buddy Nomad_Sigma.

Chapters (8)
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Comments ( 220 )

6010419 Eeeyup. ^.^ It came late as it needed to be edited first.

Interesting twist for a story. I can't wait to read what happens next. Good luck.

and successfully traumatized Spike by apparating in his bed.

Pfft. :rainbowlaugh: If you've seen the episode 'Make new friends but keep discord', I think you know exactly what I'm picturing.


6010473

I can't to read what happens next. Good luck.

Can't wait to read what happens next.

Anyway, awesome story, I didn't see any errors, so either this is a perfect chapter, or my 3 hours of sleep hasn't done me any favors. I'll go with the former.

Discord has been reduced to basically having the same amount of power as a regular unicorn. Awesome.

Whoo hoo more twicord! Twicord is best discord ship nuff said :pinkiehappy:

lolwut? She can’t have missed the fact that he intended to drain her — it’s not difficult to discern the fact that the spell he was intending on hitting her with left him like this and that she would be magicless right now if it were not for own reflection spell. She knows there’s no counterspell just right now so what he was intending was irreversible until one was found and since depriving her of her magic could have left the elements powerless for all she knows this could have been a decapitation strike. Twilight should be apoplectic, not apologetic.

6010582 :raricry: :pinkiesad: Someone thumbs down my comment. Wh....Wh....Why? :pinkiesad: I-I I don't believe I said anything worth a thumbs down.

6010930 :fluttercry: I saw that too. Soooo sad. Q_Q I still love you, Templar.

6010935 Thank you, it means a lot coming from the Donkey Queen.

Does this take place after TCARW? Or is this timeline completely different?

6010951 [facepalm] Points to description. This is an entirely separate story. :twilightsheepish:

6010959
:twilightsheepish: Yah, I didn't read that until a bit earlier. Sorry.

6010959 :rainbowsmirk: nitpick time

Points to description.

That is an action, and thus, needs to be italics.

6010973 XD My little proof-reader's at it again. I'm so proud. :rainbowkiss:

6010979 giant smile Well, when you don't need my proofreadingness in the story, I need to find my amusement elsewhere.

6010677 Honestly, as much as I know Bluegrass, she knows this and is keeping Twi in character, worrying for Discord's safety first, then once she knows he's alright she will analyze the situation and realize this. That, or AJ (as the calm one of the group) will say something when Twi tells the group what happened.

Dropping a like, hoping it fuels your desire to write more. Lately many stories have been suffering from the curse of oblivion

6012682 Nothing too explicit, but yes. I will put a warning at the top of the chapter with it in it so folks are aware of and can avoid it if they choose.

Yes, new Twicord story! :heart: "putting this in my favorites"

ヽ༼ຈل͜ຈ༽ノ Clop or riot ヽ༼ຈل͜ຈ༽ノ

I want to read it because your work is amazing, and the way you write Twicord is fantabulous...but the 'mature' rating. :pinkiegasp: I wana reeeaaaaad it

Do you think it is wrong for a Middle Schooler to read it, Bluegrass?

6015120 I will mark the chapters with sex scenes in the beginning of those chapters. If you'd like, I can PM you a non-mature version for those chapters in question. The mature tag is mostly for that, but it is also for cursing, more touchy subjects and a little bit of gore later on. I'll leave it up to you, but I think you should be fine as long as you pay attention to my warnings in the beginning of the chapter. Though, it comes down to what you (and you're parents/guardians) are comfortable with in terms of reading . . .

I will be starting work on TCARW's sequel soon, so it shouldn't be too much longer of a wait.

6016146 Okay. ^^ You don't have to go to the trouble of PMing me, I'll just read the ones that aren't tagged. That's really helpful of you.

And I am super excited for the TCARW sequel! :raritystarry:

Interesting start. I'll see where this goes.

6015120 Wrong? I was reading adult length novels when I was only 8 and knew what sex was by the time I was 11 lol. You see alot worse on regular TV then clopfics on this site.

6018607 I don't really watch TV aside from My Little Pony, and occassionally other harmless cartoons like Young Justice. I also wasn't aware of what sex was until I was ten years old, and I honestly didn't need to know because it wasn't part of my life and I wasn't mature enough to be told about such things. When it was explained to me, it was treated with calm respect, and my mother made sure to tell me that it was not something to be done outside marriage nor was something so adult and serious meant to be read or watched casually for pleasure. :unsuresweetie:

Powerless (at least, relatively) Discord? Huh, don't think I've read anything quite like this before. Thumbed up and tracking, this looks like it's going to be epic.

Comment posted by NerfStranger deleted May 27th, 2015

6022241 well that's disappointing. You could have removed the mature tag then, downgrade it to teen and that way have better exposure for the story

Another excellent chapter. Keep up the amazing work.

Well, he isn't stressing out yet. I'd have thought he'd be panicking a touch by now.

6022478 Oh, it's coming. :pinkiecrazy: *Ahem*


6022336

If a character only makes reference to having sex, that would typically be fine with a ‘Teen’ rating. If characters in the story actually have sex, that would require a ‘Mature’ rating.

From fimfiction's own guide. By fimfic's official standards, this is a mature story.

He's a part of Twilight's family and needs to be treated as such.

And thank you for that.

Not writing him in would be like... not giving Apple Bloom a part in your AppleFlim story. Except Big Mac and Granny Smith didn't exist, so she wouldn't be spending any family time with them instead. She only had Applejack.

I'm glad that Discord has at least a relatively healthy attitude: this is a prank that backfired on him, and he's not really... grousing about it.

I mean... come on, Twilight. If you let him cast it then he would've stripped your magic instead. I guess that might be better to you, because of fetteredness, but all in all... it's not really better.

6022486 Yes, then why don't just have the reference and expand your audience? This way you are losing 2 major audiences

6022498 It may not seem like it, but I'm using this story as a way to fine-tune stylistic details and the like for my personal writing. I need practice with such scenes i.e. I want to write a mature fanfic. That and there will be some more mature topics touched upon that I wouldn't want younger audiences to read. I have a teen rated Twicord series (with 3 books planned), so I get plenty of views there.

Comment posted by NerfStranger deleted May 27th, 2015

I'm liking where the story is going

I'm liking this. Do go on.

Dude, sex scenes are clop. I think it would be more accurate to say you're going to write good clop. :pinkiehappy:

Good job with this story. You are doing a great job. Good luck with the next chapter.

For a bookshelf to do this . . . It did not bode well, not in the least. - Those bookshelves murder ponies when their backs are turned. Watch out for them.

“Of course they will. I know our friends already do, and Celestia spoke so highly of you at the Gala. And the others will come around, you’ll see.” - Episode 7 was amazing xD

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