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Trixie Senpai FOREVER!!! Ship Trixie with anyone and you'll make your fic 500% cooler/awesome! Also remember to give the golden mares some love! Mayor Mare, Cherry Jubilee, and Harshwhinny!
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The Akira is the best starship ever.
5365082 Wow, I never thought anyone would know what that was. You surprise me friend. I guess you're a star trek fan to some degree? Or an Akira fan more likely.
5365089 I'm a Star Trek fan on the side, but only so that I get to see the Akira Class. I have it as my ship in Star Trek Online.
5365092 Nice! I want to play Star Trek Online but my EVE account takes priority for now along with minecraft. Anyway hope you like the story hope to hear from you again! Fans are temporary Friends are forever!
5365105 Would you want to do a story trade? I read one of yours and you read one of mine?
5365109 Sure what you got in mind? This is actually my fifth story but third I submitted. Which do you want me to read?
5365112 Well, you could read a finished Slice of Life, or any one of my plethora of unfinished action clopfics.
5365119 OK!
Cutie mark crusader clop readers away! After work tomorrow. I actually have to get up at 8am Calif time. So I'll read some of them tomorrow and I'll provide you with some feedback and criticism. 
If you want you can read any of my three I currently have. I'm working on a challenge to ship Trixie with as many ponies as possible before the end of the year.
I don´t know if it is going to be as calm as it looks right now, but i like what i have read tonight.
Mayor Mare is maybe not my favourite Pony, but she is somewhere in the middle and i think it is an interessting Pairing.
If i can ask for a Pairing, i think i would like to try a TrixieXPinkie Pie (Just because it seems akward and interessting a bit, TrixieXFluttershy, (i am not that sure about Trixie X Applejack, but i could maybe like TrixeXRarity), but i have seen enough TrixieXRainbow Dash or TrixieXTwilight.
I really like TwilightXTrixie, but i think i would like to read something different.
I would like TrixieZecora or TrixieX.......Cadance? too, i just want to see something different too. I think it would be something new if Cadance would brake up with Shining and start to date Trixie.
Long story short, i think i start to like this story already and if they are not to short storys then i would like to try the other ones too.
Just to be sure, someone said i sound like it would like and hate a story at the same time in every comment i make, is it really that bad?
I mean i just try to say what i like and if i am not sure about something then i can´t change it. I think that everyone can decide for themself what they want to hear, if they want to hear only bad things, then they only hear bad things, but i think i can´t be always really that bad.
5366897 No you sound fine! You just voice your opinion and that's OK.
I'm glad you like the story so far. Unlike Wonderbolt my Heart there will be little to no action in the actual story. It'll make sense in the next chapter or so while Trixie is working. I can see why people say you sound like a love and hate, but to me you sound like you want to read more before you make a final call on whether you like something or dislike it. at least a few chapters. Am I right in that assumption?
Not to sound mean but it could also be because you're German and I'm assuming English is a second or possibly a third language for you too. To others it may seem that way but I'm fine with how you say things.
I wasn't expecting you to rad this one though. Most people don't like Mayor Mare as she's called in the show, I like to call her Mary. 
Aside from Trixie she's actually my second favorite character in the show. I always wanted to pair/ship these two together.
I agree there is enough Twilightxtrixie but RainbowxTrixie I've only seen a few. Cadence... hmm... I'll make one just for you as part of my challenge to ship Trixie with as many ponies as possible by the end of the year! It'll be a short story but I'll make it just for you!
Cutie Mark Crusader Shippers Away!
5366926 I think it is safe to say that you pretty much, understand how i try to do my comments most of the time. And yes sometimes i think it is, because i don´t know how to write it better, but most of the time i don´t want to hate a story to early.
I think it would be not fair to hate something with only one or two chapters, in which usually don´t much happen, that is why i say what i like and what i would not like.
Good enough of that, it seems you understand me and i am fine with that.
, even if she is not one of my top ten, but i still like her more than Shining armor Cadance and some other characters.
I don´t know, i somehow like Mayor Mare or Mary
PS: you don´t have to do Cadance,(but i would still read it)
< it was just a suggestion, i think i would rather like to see something about Pinkie, because i am always curious how she would act towards a possible special somepony which isn´t like herself (Cheese Sandwich).
I don´t want to call Chesse Sandwich and Pinkie a bad Pairing, but for me it is a bit boring because they are the same somehow.
Well i maybe even start to read your old story too, i don´t know about that StarGate theme, but it is about Tixie and, i like your storys, and i have not much to read at the moment.
5368516 Oh you must mean my story Adventures Across Space. Yeah that's a star Trek Enterprise crossover I put on hold in favor of Wonderbolt my Heart and others first. That one is a side side project I work on when I feel like it actually.
Don't worry I'll get to something new soon. I like that you are always around so keep commenting!
i know you have you challenge, but i guess you should take your time if you think you can´t write as good as if you feel well again.
It is a bit strange for me to see Mayor Mare and old Pony together with Trixie, but every time i remember she is not as old as Granny Smith, then i am more than okay with it.
Mayor Mare is probably around 40-50 i think, that way she has still many years and i don´t have to think of her as weak and to old for anything i suppose.
yeah i like it, but sometimes i get thougts like that.
5373736 I know it's a bit odd to think like that, but actually she's the same age as Cheeliee. To me for my story that's only a few years older that Twilight and her friends. it's like a 22 year old with a 30 year old thing.
Okay. Three chapters in. I have to say, the pacing isn't too bad...for now. The mayor might be a bit lonely, as also sees something in Trixie. Trixie has somepony that believes in her and is willing to give her a chance. I just hope the feelings they have for each other are genuine, once they DO become an official couple. So, tomorrow Trixie starts her community service at Sweet Apple Acres. I expect that first day to be grueling, especially if she is late her first day. I wonder if Platinum Spoon is Silver Spoon's mother or something? I also wonder what problem Filthy Rich could possibly need Trixie's help on? His daughter, perhaps?
Anyway, take care of yourself. We, the readers, can wait a little bit for chapters to come out.
5375169 Thanks glad you like it!
Honestly I think most people know this from the info provided but the story will be over the course of a week relative to the tv series as I'm sure you'll find out in the later chapters as you read.
Spoilers: Platinum Spoon is related to Silver but I won't reveal it till a bit later. As for Filthy- I mean MR. RICH, lol you'll have to wait and find out!
I still want a Maud icon.
Hope you like the story as it progresses!
PS. Good choices on your always go back to read list! Yukito writes great Trixie fics!
It looks like the story is going to be a bit faster as the other one, but it is somehow nice. I mean chapters like this are what i like to read if i have not much time and well want something to lift my mood a bit. (I hope i got this saying right, but well i don´t change it for now)
I am happy to see my favourite mean Filly, being the sister of an OC i started to like. I am not sure if i can already say that i understand Platinum, but i like her personality.
5377430 So you like Platinum?
I tried to make her the reasonable older sibling that reasons with the younger sibling. Fun fact. I actually based it off a conversation I had with my sister years ago when I use to get into fights at school. So this plot point isn't as original as some might think.I have big plans for Silver and Trixie in the next chapter!
Not literally everything, just the reasons you bully others part. I didn't work as a minor obviously.
Stay tuned!
I'm still going to stick with my original thought. Filthy Rich needs help with his daughter and Trixie is more than qualified due to where she is now. Just like I feel that Trixie is going to help Silver Spoon. Even though, it looks like Trixie will be late for work.
5379596 Don't worry. You got the right idea. What did you think of Vinyl and Octavia? I'm surprised no one has complained or down thumbed me yet because of that.
5380358 I have seen so many variations of Vinyl and Octavia that hardly anything surprises me. Hell, I read one story where they were sisters and more alike than not. So, you aren't going to get a downvote from me for that.
So, something happened to make Derpy forget she had a relationship with the mayor. Yet, Dinky still remembers. It also seems that Platinum may want to be more than Trixie's friend. I hope Trixie will be able to help Diamond like she helped Silver. I also noticed that the mayor forgot to bring up housing for Trixie to Twilight (which was why I thought Twilight was there for in the first place.) I'm glad that Trixie and Mary made up, but it looks like they may still need to have another talk. I can't wait to see how Trixie's trip to the market is going to be, even though I don't expect a lot to be open at this time of the evening.
5392966 it will be an interesting night for the both of them that's for sure!
AS for Derpy, something did happen. Depending how long the next chapter is you may find out next or the next next one. I admit I have no clear plan yet since I changed my mind about the last chapter four times.
Hope you like the next one! Lots more drama to come!
darn, now i want Trixie and Platinum to be together, sometimes i don´t want a certain Character to be sad, now i know why you asked me if i like her
Sooo this is a good chapter, and i really like Silver Spoon, but i think i said it already. I like Diamond to, well sometimes, like in a romance fanfiction with Scootaloo.
I want to be honest, i like it if the storys are sometimes a bit sad and i get the feeling you maybe going to do a great job in this story, but i hope it isn´t to bad or that after every sad moment is coming a nice moment
I like to watch sad movies and such, but i always have to wait if something really bad happends and i am going to start to feel bad for the Characters.
....I can´t decide, pleas make a really sad chapter, i can endure it, i don´t know where to draw the line, but i really like sad scenes because there is always something good that follow after it and then it is even better.
5394212 I'm kin of the same way. I like tragedies even when they make me mad or sad, in a good way. Platinum was suppose to be a likable character. More reasonable than I feel many characters are in the show.
If you want sad just wait till I get the next ones out. You'll love it then. Speaking of like, I'm surprised no ones given a thumb down yet.
This story is doing so well i almost feel bad for my other ones! It makes me so happy this ones doing so well! Thanks for commenting again!
5396747 So right now it is afternoon and i have more concentration then in the night, yes i like sad storys, but not if they are only sad. I mean i need something good to happen after every really bad thing, and if it was really really sad, then i like it always if the characters have some happines befor the next scary thing happens.
I know i said it already, but sometimes i feel like i have to be more exact, because i don´t have a good concenration that late at Night.
I think if i could choose it, you would be one of my favourite writers at the moment, i mean i still have to read the space story, but after two chapters i think that it is good enough, even if i don´t understand everything yet. I never watched Star Track, at least i don´t remember it.
I don´t know what to think about it. How long does Derpy remember her? Right now i think it was maybe even right, and really nice of her to allow Derpy to go after Trixie with her new found feelings. On the other Hand, if she should remember her befor she thought that Mary could maybe love Trixie, then i would have asked why she didn´t wanted to love her again.
Oh i thought the Mayor would maybe even hit Applejack for something like that, that looks like a religious Applejack again or something like that
I don´t know if you want the Mayor to have an unlucky love life, or if you want her to be reunited with Derpy in the end, but even if i think that Platinum and Trixie probably don´t be together forever, it is already sad if i know they have to break up probably.
Good Chapter.
Mary is really having a rough night, isn't she? And what is Applejack's problem? I hope Granny Smith and Big MacIntosh didn't raise her like that. Or is Applejack in denial 'cause she loves some mare? I like the idea of Trixie x Platinum, but that's not why I started to read this. I hope Mary and Trixie can get on the same page at least. I expect Trixie's first day at the farm is going to be full of tension.
5400906 Oh yeah, Mary is going to continue to have a bad day too. I was actually going to originally have Mary in a relationship with Twilight Sparkle and have conflicting feeling for Trixie and vice versa. I decided not to do that though.
I wasn't sure if anyone else would feel it was the same old thing so I made Trixie like someone else. Applejack was raised in a family based on tradition but that's not what started this. Don't worry it gets better.
5400397 Well Derpy is a nice mare and mother. Mary will go after Trixie but how is up in the air. If yo udidn't catch, Mary is prone to jealousy.
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Oh i know, she is angry right now right?
Well this was at least my first reaction, right now i am eager to read more
Incoming review!
Let me first say that, although the list of faults I found is quite extensive, I would not have gone through all the trouble of compiling it if I thought that the story was rubbish. I like the idea, and I think it can be executed better than it currently is. This humble little text is my attempt of helping with that.
Also, I will try to keep this short, but this hasn't ever worked before in my reviews, so it will probably be much-too-long, as always
Thus, let's start! Please refer to Ezn's writing guide here on the site for any unknown terms (or Wikipedia for the grammar terms).
Grammar and Spelling
- There are a few missing commas. Or a few dozen. Or, rather, 184 (as of the last count; I'm pretty sure I missed a few). In this chapter alone. Here's a example paragraph with all the comma errors corrected. Most stem from incorrect usage of dialogue punctuation, run-on/fused sentences and wrongly punctuated participle phrases (more on that later).
If you want the complete list, shoot me a PM or something. It's a bit long to put into a comment.
- "Mayor," used as a substitute for a name, as you do here, is never capitalized (except if other grammatical rules demand it, of course).
- You repeat words and phrases a lot, often in the same paragraph or even sentence. Look at the first two sentences, for example:
The word "desk" is repeated twice.
- There is a overabundance of participle phrases. That is, phrases starting with the -ing form of a verb. Example:
Problem is, aside from the danger of accidentially introducing dangling modifiers, participle phrases not only muddle the sequence of events when multiple are used in a single sentence, but they also weaken verbs, which makes the writing less crisp and interesting. An example of a muddled sequence of events due to participle phrases:
Aside from the order they appear in, these actions may as well all happen simultaneously, nothing is ordering them. Also, that sentence has a bit too much action crammed into it.
Furthermore, like in this example, participle phrases must be set off with commas (except for the case that they directly follow the modified noun and end the sentence). A lot of the missing commas come from this.
- Make sure to always capitalize the first word after a period. Especially after dialogue.
- You have some ambiguous references. Example:
The last "her" refers to the major, but the subject of the sentence is Trixie, which is confusing.
- Also, some miscellaneous mistakes:
Should be "four-sided."
Should be "inkwell."
Should be "here." Also, better end the sentence there and don't capitalize "domain."
Should be "nonetheless."
Add a "had" before "made."
Should be "who."
Add a "was" after "voice" (otherwise there is no predicate in the sentence).
Delete "awaiting."
Add "had" before "expression." Also, don't capitalize "mayor," as mentioned before.
Should be "when."
Should be "Gabby" (capitalized).
Should be "pen" (not capitalized).
Should (probably?) be "a nopony."
Should be "revealing" and "built-in."
Should be "family-oriented."
Should be "they."
Should be "to."
Should be "Unfortunately" (capitalized and added "ly." Also, add a comma after that).
Should be "aback."
Should be "week-long" or "weeklong."
Add a "that" after "them" and use "yourself."
Should be "into."
Delete (probably?)
Should be "The."
Style
- We have lavender unicorn syndrome in some places. It's not that bad, but it's there.
- There's a lot of telling where showing should be used instead. Also, pertaining to that point, there are quite a lot of needless adverbs.
- "Talking heads syndrome" is quite prominently featured. Meaning, most of the chapter consists of Trixie's and Mary's dialogue and their individual thoughts. Their surroundings are hardly ever described. Also, if we do get some descriptions, we only get visual ones (as opposed to using all five senses).
- We have at least one info dump. The part where Trixie reminices about the Pie family is actually just intended to feed the reader the (possibly necessary?) information they need to have about them. It's considered better form to only introduce such knowledge in tiny bits, only when needed, and inconspiciously. It's not that bad, but worth mentioning.
- The flow is okay. But it could be polished a little more. Also, some sentences could stand to be shortened a bit and some words could be deleted or replaced with more exact ones.
Characters
- Mary forgets the fact that Trixie essentially broke into her office a little too quickly for my tastes.
- She is also a little too lenient on Trixie for, basically, threatening to kill Gabby Gums (considering she's a government official, nevertheless)
- Trixie is a bit too enraged because of the article. I mean, it's slander, ok, but it was a short-lived school newspaper. As is, her motivation for getting "revenge" is shaky at best.
- Mary is a bit quick to forgive Trixie (and to help her, even).
- Mary speaks a bit casually for a politician. For example, the part
reminded me a bit of the way Applejack speaks.
Plot
Some plot holes:
- What was Trixie doing in the major's office, anyway?
- How did adding some articles to the newspaper cover the one about Trixie up? It's not like it disappeared.
- Come to think of it, if they could add articles to the paper, why didn't they just pull the one about Trixie?
Aside from those (and the shaky character motivation), it was not exactly a bad first chapter, plot-wise. We got to know the protagonists, established their current relationship and got some foreshadowing of future conflicts (I hope?). It would, of course, have been nice, if there was some foreshadowing of the protagonist's goals and of the antagonist (there is one, I hope?)
Well, it has the "Slice of life" tag, so I give it more leeway on the tension.
Whelp, that's all I have to say for now. I'm sure as soon as I read through all of that again, I will remember that one thing I forgot to include. Eh, whatever.
Good luck and keep writing,
VoidInfinity
The whole situation with Applejack there, was sure a bad situation, but it was so awesome to read, i really liked that part.
Sooo i guess Trixie is in love with Maud and just noticed, that two other ponies possible like her two right?
I really liked that Chapter and i think the previous Chapter was with Mary and her view of the events right? (is POV the right word?/ I actually wanted to write the sentence different, but i was not sure anymore if POV really meant "point of view").
It is a bit sad if Maud and Trixie should be together, or Trixie just love Maud.
what Game?^^ Happy new Years.
As much as i like it, Why does Trixie went into Mayor Mares Bed?, i don´t remember that they are that good friends official.
When Trixie approached what?
Trixie had a legitimate reason for hating fillyfoolers until the Pies pointed her in the right direction. I wonder what is Applejack's reason? Now, we have Apple Bloom x Sweetie Belle, and Rarity x Rainbow Dash. However, I am confused on who Trixie will end up with. Will it be Mary, Platinum, Maud, a combination of two of them, or all of the above? And have we seen Pinkie Pie or Fluttershy yet? I know Twilight and Spike were at the Mayor's office earlier that day, but do they know about Trixie yet?
5462789 It will all be revealed in time. Pinkie will show up in time. She's central to the plot. Sort of. As for Maud. Let's just say things will get crazier for Trixie than they already are now before the story will end. A lot crazier.
They sure will now that's for sure!
OK I'll level with you. I'm so sick of TwiXTrix I didn't want them to interact yet. This is my lazy way of making it known that Trixie is in town without Twilight being there to talk.
5462647 Yeah POV was right. point of View you got it!
You impressed the Twilight.
Yeah, it was meant to be. It was fun to write, but i was worried about writing it like I did. Even though it s a show most people still don't like child abuse. Neither do I so I thought the chapter might have been much.
I wonder who will win Trixies heart in the end? It's going to be one heck of a party! Yes there will be a Pinkie Party.
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I can't believe I missed that. I need to fix that. Thanks for mentioning this for me.
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I forgot to write something, but it seems you understood what i meant there, that it is sad that Trixie has to decide between so many Ponys, and if she should be together with Maud, that would be only even harder for her.
About the Child abuse,...well i don´t know why it doesn´t felt that bad for me, i guess i just think that Applejack probably has her own weird reason and i got used to her being a bit strange in some fanfictions. I think they probably messed up, while Granny Smith was about to raise Applejack the correct way, or something like that.
(i started to write in the middle of the story, if something isn´t true it is because of that)
I don´t remember how often Twilight met Trixie already, but sometimes i get the feeling even Twilight have to respect privacy, or if someone don´t like her. I now Princes of friendship, but maybe that don´t have to mean that everyone have to like her, some regard for her could be enough as well i think.
Sorry, this is not because of your story, well the first part is about your story, but i wanted to say something about other fanfictions i read.
Let´s just say your story remind me of those things.
Sometimes it is like Cadance or Twilight have to demand from other ponys, that they love each other or be friends, i mean it is not like they would die if somepony don´t make the right choise or want someone as a friend. I am not sure how much of such fanfictions i have read, but sometimes i want to be a bit more realistic about them i think, if i can say it like that. (don´t mind me, i start to search for a reason again, i mean because i am not sure why this is so important for me again.)
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I honestly don´t know why i am happy after the end of that chapter, but i am. Maybe i liked it that Twilight didn´t got what she wanted for once, or at least not that easy. I know your probably not the first one who did that, but it was somehow an interessting situation.
I don´t know how to say this, but i think i would like it if Twilight could not get Applejack as her Marefriend even if she want it.
What i mean is, of course i expect a little disaster about Applejacks hate for Fillyfooler and a fight between her and her friends, but even if Applejack can tolerate the idea, i think she should not suddenly be a Filly fooler as well. I think i want a sad moment, and a happy end with them being friends, i think i never saw how a relationship doesn´t worked out between them.
edit : I forgot what i still wanted to say, but i really like the whole situation with Applejack, it is an interessting point of the story at the moment. I was a bit suprised about karate Trixie, but......yeaaaahhhh my dislike in the first second changed into fascination i guess.
Befor i stop to make any sense, i want to say you that i am as happy as always to have another good and interessting Chapter.
That can't be appetizing.
5516178 You'd be surprised it's actually good. flavored yes but it's actually not that bad. Did you like karate Trixie as Texus called her?
5515853 I think i follow. I never liked that friendships were made so easily either. Discord being the most prominent. I feel a more subtle or heartbreaking approach is more interesting than simply shoving two together. However I admit, I did do that with Trixie and Mary but that's OK once in a while. It's their story after all. I realize I don't put them together too often but I'm changing that next chapter. As for karate Trixie, that's something the Pie family had to do with, or at least somepony in the family.
cough cough maud....
Ironically I wanted Twilight to not get Applejacks hate of fillyfooling but I realized from boast busters, Trixies first major appearance, that she too self conscious of her friends feelings regarding her. So I feel she reacted appropriately to Applejack giving the circumstances.
So, Twilight likes Applejack, but Applejack hates same-sex relationships. I feel bad for Twilight, and really hate Applejack right now. I'm sure Big Mac doesn't feel the same way (hence the glare). I hope Applejack gets some type of wake-up call.
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i have to ask again, because once in a while i am not sure with my understanding from english.
You mean, that you wanted Twilight not to know about Applejacks hate for Filly foolers right? If i am right, then i think i understand the rest as well.
So i guess that would be a spoiler, but i am not sure if that measn that Twilight and Applejack are not a possible shipping here.
even if it isn´t the worst possible thing
, i am glad to know that someone thinks the same thing about one issue.
only to be sure.....i like karate Trixie
Honestly i am happy for everything that helps to let Trixie not look that weak, as some of the ponys may think. Nothing against Twilight, but sometimes the way Twilight have to act in any story, is odd in some ways, but i think we had that talk already
i only start to defend Trixie again, i am curious if she started to be my favourite Pony, maybe even more than Fluttershy.
Yeah from the boast busters episode and one or two storys, i started to think that Trixie just acted in her show like she had to, yes she had overdone it a bit, but if i remember it right, the main six where those, which accepted every Challenge, i thinK Rarity even started her Challenge. Trixie did more or less nothing else than beating them in the challenge.
I am interessted in the fact, that it seems like we could question the lesson Twilight learned in that episode, with the fact that they maybe had to bedevil Trixie in some way. (I am glad if i that sentence made sense, but i think i can stop here, my usual "Trixie is not only bad" talk is over for now.
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Someday. But not today.
LOL perhaps she ill, but maybe she won't. I'm not sure. I don't like stories that are all rainbows and sunshine. Wonderbolt my Heart will be a sad story from beginning to end but maybe I'll make an exception for this one.
I hate bigotry. I hope Big Mac finds out about this and let Applejack have it. I know whoever sees Trixie first (Mary or Platinum) is going to become both worried and pissed.
Big mac should give her an earfull
Dear applejack,
STOP BEING DUMB!
That is all
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OMG what have I done!
I've made AJ into a horrible pony! Hope you guys aren't too mad about it. 
5536525 I wouldn't say she's bad. But she needs to get a reality check eventually.
5536540 OMG I love you avatar character! It's cute!