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Titanium Dragon


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Long ago, before the ponies came to this land, the buffalo roamed free across the hills and plains, and the stampedes could run from mountain to sea without fear.

In those days, a buffalo brave, Falling Rocks, became legend. Come, listen to the tale of how he saved his people.

A story of buffalo mythology.

As seen on Equestria Daily.

Entry for the Outside Insight Equestria Daily Summer Fanfic Contest.

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 79 )

Well, hello, there! This is quite an interesting story so far. I'm really loving how you truly captured the tone and voice of a tribal story. Damn find job, there.

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I spent some time reading Native American myths online before I wrote this story. As most Native American myths were for a very long time transmitted orally, I tried to capture the sort of transitions that people use while telling such stories out loud.

I'm glad it worked for you. :twilightsmile:

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:heart:

I also have to admit a certain fondness for Just So stories.

I shall continue to watch for Falling Rocks, for your incredible stories of the buffalo brave have tought me of him.

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This is good. All our people should know of his deeds.

You . . . you sly dog, you. That was brilliant. You did a damn fine job with this.

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This story is ultimately based on an ancient Native American legend, as told to me by my father while sitting around a campfire. I really don't remember most of it, but as is the case with all deep truths, the story is not important, it is the ending that matters.

You can guess what kind of person my father is.

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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I also have to admit a certain fondness for Just So stories.

I was thinking of the Just So stories, and Kipling in general, while reading this. This has got the same mature-yet-child-like style, telling stories which are best understood with a juvenile logic. Which seems very appropriate for pony-fiction. The last line was a nice touch.
I feel it's missing a prologue, which would set the scene, maybe with a group of familiar characters sitting around a campfire... Or just a few more words from the narrator...

As soon as I read the title I knew that joke would appear at least once.

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I decided to write this after realizing that many people were unaware of the Legend of Falling Rocks. It is a very important tale to share, as I'm sure you can agree. :moustache:

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I actually considered doing this, and indeed, writing the legends more conversationally, as they are sometimes told, but I decided to go with this format because I felt like it would be more direct.

I'm glad to see I'm not the only one familiar with Just So stories, and I've always enjoyed etiological myths, so writing one was fun.

4856314 Yes, your work spans generations of camp counselors tales of similar heroism

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[1] My dad was the one who introduced me to Falling Rocks.

Camp counselors, scoutmasters, dads[1], Native Americans who keep getting pestered for the story of their people...

Yes, Falling Rocks comes from a long and venerable tradition, where each retelling only makes the legend greater.

Very interesting. This feels like the kind of mythological backstory we need in the series.

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I'm glad you think so. I certainly enjoyed writing it. :twilightsmile:

Awesome story!!! Works like these are my favorite finds on this site. It would fit in well with the

Equestrian Historical Society
&
Worldbuilding Alliance

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I had forgotten either of those groups existed. I shall add it to them forthwith.

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Thanks to RazgrisS57, all I could think of while reading was this.

Good story, though! Always love mythology.

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Yes, those darn Buffalo buffalo, buffaloing Buffalo buffalo. They're real jerks.

I'm glad you liked it. It was fun writing mythology.

I have no idea whether editing is appropriate after the deadline, but:

Falling Rocks [was] cold, and he was tired.

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Thanks for noticing. I have no idea either, so I asked.

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According to Couch, it is cool to fix it. So I did. :moustache:

I can't believe I didn't see that coming. :facehoof: I will, indeed, watch for Falling Rocks if ever I find myself on an Equestrian mountainside.

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Everyone must, for the sake of our people. :moustache:

That was the longest setup I have ever seen, brava.

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The longer it goes on, the more likely the audience is to forget that there is an odd premise and get involved in the story.

So my father has taught me.

Though, I did intend for the actual myths to be "authentic". Of course, how authentic each legend is is up to the reader; does the storyteller truly believe these legends, or is he messing with his son or some pony who was foolish enough to ask him of the legend? Or was it once a dad story, that has since become enshrined mythology? I've always wondered how many myths are stories fathers told their children that their children did not understand were jokes, and how many were jokes being played on the people transcribing oral myths. It would explain why there are so many "stories" about male genitalia.

I love this type of story. Whether or not it is true, it feels as though it should be.

My father told me the tale of Falling Rocks, and I have had the pleasure of passing on the legend to a younger generation. I salute you for telling the story so earnestly, as it deserves to be.

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The earnestness of the telling is very important, or else the true impact of Falling Rocks may be lost. :moustache:

Interesting premise. Can't say I agree with how the other races were generally portrayed (Although how the founder ponies were portrayed was a nice touch) but I won't fault you that. I give it a 7 out of 10 for style.

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Haha oh yes this is great.

The one thing I'm noticing, and I'm not sure if this is just an oversight on your part, is a lack of the number four. You've got two buffalo talking before Falling Rocks steps up, and only three parts of his body complaining. Native American traditions (inasmuch as they can be lumped into a single thing) tended to do things in fours, when Westerners prefer to do them in threes. Just a thought.

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Oh you didn't.

Honestly, if not for the pun at the end, I could see this being something you could add to in the future. Seeing various historical tales from the buffaloes' perspective is just great. Thank you for ending this contest on a high note for me. :D

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I was not aware of the Native Americans using a rule of four in the place of a rule of three; I had never heard of that. Admittedly I'm not hugely familiar with Native American legend in general; we studied some in school, and I've read a few since, but I don't really know their narrative rules.

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I have a soft spot for "Just So" stories other stories of this nature, and I liked the idea of making one up.

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How else could the Legend of Falling Rocks end? :ajsmug:

I'm glad I ended the contest on a high note for you. This story wasn't even originally written for the contest; I just happened to write it in the timeframe of the contest and people pointed out that I could totally enter.

Writing faux mythology is actually really fun, but I seldom try my hand at it. I've actually always wanted to write a faux Genesis narrative, in the style of the KJV, but I don't know if I could actually pull it off.

Did you read every contest entry for the outside insight competition? :twilightoops:

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Admittedly, it's a fairly obscure thing to know unless you've studied the traditions. I myself have studied... just enough to know that particual iota and little else. c.c

Did you read every contest entry for the outside insight competition?

You better believe it. Massive journal coming tomorrow.

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Wow. That's... a lot of pony words. Or I suppose, not pony words in this case.

Shine on you crazy diamond.

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It's basically an entire Fallout: Equestria. :B Just over one, in fact. 675k to 620k if I'm not mistaken.

That was hilarious and terrible and hilarious.

Also, pretty good bits of mythology.

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I'm glad you enjoyed! It was good to pass on to more people.

Remember the legend of Falling Rocks if you ever have kids; it is the perfect campfire story. :ajsmug:

Man, this was so good, but then that final pun... ugh... just... why?

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This story was originally told to me by my father; not in this exact way, but, well, as he always taught me, the real key to telling a story like this was the journey, not the destination.

Or because I'm a monster who likes feghoots.

Falling Rocks and nobody died? My disappointment is immense. However, you did manage to nail the particular narrative style, and the stories were entertaining, so I suppose I can leave this here:
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Nice alternate take on Hearths’ Warming. Also a reference to the Battle of Hastings, like the reference to The Dark Crystal in You Can’t Turn Back Time.

i really loved this and it inspired me to keep working on a project of mine that i had not completed.

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