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Pony fan inspired by great writers such as Pen Stroke and Conner Cogwork


This is an alternative narrative based around the storyline of season 2 episodes 25-26 A Canterlot Wedding.

When Shining Armor banished Twilight from his wedding, she returned distraught to Ponyville, but she soon got to hear about the changeling invasion of Canterlot.

With the help of some unexpected allies, she returns to try and put everything right.

*** featured at #4 12/6/19 - 12/7/17 - thank you all! ***

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 55 )

“N … no, Zecora” she said bringing her forehooves up to massage her head, “It’s the strangest feeling; like a number of ponies all reaching out to me at once. I’ve never felt anything like it before.”


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This is the worst possible timeline


Well, consider this the first one, courtesy of me...

Guilty as charged!


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This needs a epiloge where Twilight sees her friends again, bakes the pirs, and Shining Armor learns what happened.

That was, abrupt. The ending was rather anti-climatic. Howver, credit where credit is due in doing something interesting and new with the Canterlot Wedding formula.

Ok after the first chapter I can see one thing Chryissi did that could lead to complications further along. The grubs bonding with Cadance from exclusively feeding on her, she is the princess of love, feeding from her could "corrupt" the grubs making them more empathetic and able to share love. From the story length doesn't look like it will come up but still Cadance might find in a future a number of changelings looking at her as their "real" mom.

Yea now I'm sure of it, when throws defects all of Shining's changeling children will come with him, if the "love wave" even sent them away. Their might be a nursery full of little changeling grubs waiting for "pink mommy" to come back. Certainly would complicate things and anger Chrissyi if a bunch of new newly hatched changelings are raised by ponies and become Skittle colored lover bugs.

So... It's over?

“Your idea is sound and clever
We could take turns at being the driver”

*wince!* :twilightoops:

Okay, maybe you got that from a find-a-rhyme website somewhere? I know I've seen them do stuff like that based solely on letters without consideration of sound.

Because "-ver" is the unstressed syllable in both words, rhyming clever and driver together is just... audibly terrible.

In place of "being the driver" you could maybe instead use "working the lever"? I truly believe it would sound better. :fluttershysad:

(unless you pronounce it with a UK accent, where they sometimes say it like "lee-ver", in which case... "better" is a better near-rhyme for clever than driver, too? :twilightsheepish: )

“It is too much coincidence
To guess that they are anything less”
Zecora agreed.

That extra line break threw me for a loop for a moment, too. But you were clearly rhyming less with guess, not coincidence... you just got betrayed by a stray pinkie finger tapping enter when it shouldn't. :rainbowwild:

*reads on*


Building her dialogue as couplets like you're doing is a decent strategy for planning, but I'm a little iffy on the idea of leaving it that way on publishing. It's dialogue in prose; I'd recommend you put it in line like the rest of the dialogue. It keeps taking me out of the narrative. That's fine if you're J.R.R. Tolkein and want the reader to be pulled out of the narrative for a rousing rendition of "That's What Bilbo Baggins Hates!" but when you're simply writing dialogue for a character who speaks in rhyme, you break the scene when you break the prose.

That... was a very sudden ending.

Not even going to click the link - that's the Obi-Wan quote when Alderaan's obliterated, isn't it?

it’s my guess that they can impersonate creatures of the same size,

Considering Thorax has been shown changing into inanimate objects, even things that are smaller or heavier than he is (e.g. a vase and a rock, from vague memory), I don't think your weight hypothesis holds fruit - a light rock or a strangely-heavy ornament would give him away, and he wasn't at all a special changeling until he helped defeat Chrysalis.

then you make us apple pies yourself

Does Twilight even know how to cook? Spike's the one in the kitchen almost all the time, and Applejack's the apple expert; I don't think you want a Twilight apple pie.


Agreed. This needs an epilogue dealing with Twilight's friends.

Them, Celestia, and Shining Armor should apologize for abandoning her as well.


Or at the very least, that needs to be addressed.

“What was that all about?” Shining Armor enquired, looking stunned.
“Just roll with it, bbbff” said Twilight with a smile

I felt like this retelling of the story had little more to offer. Honestly I've done some retellings but this doesn't offer much. There's no different ending.
Actually I'm suprised this even got featured. Tbh this is not the correct timeline indeed.

I disliked this.

Feels like we're missing a final chapter to wrap things up

Well... that was an abrupt end to it. But then again that entire last chapter felt rushed and it ended with a bunch of things un-resolved.
Over all i enjoyed it, i expected a few things to go a bit differently but thats with any story.

Nice but the ending is a touch to abrupt in my opinion. At minimum it would be nice to see the post fight comradery with the Buffalo.


I hope that there's more too it after this. Hopefully with an apology.

I’m morbidly curious why we have a new chapter dedicated to this guy, interesting though he may be.

well this story was updated while the status said "completed", so i can only assume that this story will have more updates in the future. maybe the author forgot to change the status to "incomplete"

“My faithful student” said Celestia happily, “I knew I could count on you.”

LIAR!! :flutterrage:

She got thrown out the moment after "Cadence" started up her crocodile tears and you did nothing but pour salt on her wound. AND NOW YOU HAVE THE GALL TO BE ALL LIKE:

~"Yep! All Part of my master plan!:trollestia:"~


“Princess!” exclaimed Twilight happily prancing to her hooves and giving her mentor the most heartfelt hug, her tightly shut eyes being no defence for holding back the tears of relief running freely down her muzzle.

I was kinda hoping Twilight's reaction to Celestia would be a little more like this:

Oh well, I guess.

I imagine once the post victory high wears off Twilight will begin to think on the events that proceeded this.

Or better yet what if Twi brought Spyro and Cynder, Sonic and his friends, and tones of Pokémon to help them. That would make the Changelings yell in horror as alien dragons and creatures are attacking them.

One chapter is missing from this story: An apology chapter where Celestia, Shining Armor, Twilight's friends and Spike apologize to Twilight for what they did to her at the rehearsal!

When she saw who it was, her heart sank; it was the same doppelganger returning to gloat, holding Court in the very caves that imprisoned the pink alicorn. She had brought an entourage of three mares to accompany her; one light blue, one cream and another mint green, all of whom stood line abreast providing a defensive barrier protecting her from the weakened Princess of Love.

Oh no minuette twinkleshine and lyra I forgot that Queen Chrysalis can hypnotize other ponies and creatures

“Or perhaps you wouldn’t attack those who are weak and defenceless?” asked the doppelganger as her horn flashed again and the yaks turned into the Cutie Mark Crusaders.
“Princess Cadance, Princess Cadance” pleaded the white filly, “You wouldn’t hurt us, would you?”

Now that's just cruel right there 😡

“You see” cooed Chrysalis softly, “I have been laying the eggs for weeks already, and now the first ones are beginning to hatch, I have decided that you will act as their wet nurse. They will bear a passing resemblance to your fiancé, so looking after them will be a labour of love, wouldn’t you say, Princess? ”

Oh God now that is torture right now dang Chrysalis

As she brought the next hatchling alongside to feed off her, she was reminded of her dream and hated herself. She wouldn’t, no, she couldn’t take such action against one so young; it wasn’t their choice to have been born, nor was it their fault what type of creature they had been born to be.

I know Princess Cadence you would never do something that horrible to a kid like that even though what they're doing to you you're good Pony just hang in there

Ok dang what a way to start your story and it's pretty hard to read it and it's not because it's bad it's just really heart-wrenching so apparently this is during season 2 Chrysalis captured Princess Cadence disguised herself as her but it looks like we got the chance to say what she does to her and my God it's just horrible she even using her love power to feed a whole baby changelings there's even times that Cadence wants to put an end to them but she can't they're just kids and she doesn't want to hurt them even though they are hurting her and Chrysalis knows that she even try to torture her about how things are going with shining armor basically mentally torturing her just try to hang in there Cadence Twilight will figure this thing out I don't know when

She had experienced a feeling of weightlessness as her brother had deserted her with those words that had cut so deeply, “And you can forget about being my best mare. In fact, if I were you, I wouldn't show up to the wedding at all.”

I know he's not thinking straight but it's just painful what he says

Then she had been abandoned by her friends. Even Spike. Even Celestia .

Yeah basically just keep knocking her down while they're at it

Twilight scanned the night sky looking for evidence of Luna’s latest artistry, but found none; it was like everypony was wrapped up in the wedding preparations. Everypony except for her. She felt herself tear up again and took no action as rivulets of salty tears tracked down her muzzle. She had lost her brother, her friends and her mentor in one go, just because she had imagined Cadance to be acting oddly.

It's even worse when she almost lost them due to Discord turn her friends against her and basically losing them in the process

So basically this is a different turn instead of waiting for " Princess Cadence " to show up even though she didn't wait for anybody she just showed up but instead she just ran away basically just going back to the train and heading back from Ponyville which for her it was a bad idea so instead he had for the everfree forest where the castle of the two sister is and basically just stay there until she can think of what else she can do it is really sad and very painful that this happened so what is she going to do

“N … no, Zecora” she said bringing her forehooves up to massage her head, “It’s the strangest feeling; like a number of ponies all reaching out to me at once. I’ve never felt anything like it before.”

You know that would be very interesting that unicorns can sense trouble by the magic oh and one more thing

Ok so it looks like Twilight still didn't want it to return to Ponyville too much memories there so basically she was still stay at the Forest but then Zecora came to her and asking her why is he here and what makes her upset Twilight explain about what happened of yesterday and Zecora felt bad for her and I do say I do like how good their interaction with each other she even talks about her Homeland which we saw that in the season 10 comic but apparently Twilight senses trouble and it looks like her feeling is right because the changelings are attacking and they need to get to Canterlot the only question is how in the world are they going to stop this

Pushing a branch cautiously out of the way, Twilight gasped at what she saw; there seemed to be some kind of altercation going on. It looked like a large herd of buffalo was being harassed by a dozen of the much smaller black creatures that had just flown overhead. It was clear that the avians didn’t want to tangle directly with the much larger buffalo, but were still intent on trying to drive them off.

Very nice to see the buffalos again specially after hearing why did not appear again due to controversy sigh :facehoof:

“But if they are changelings, then surely they can change into buffalo?” Chief Thunderhooves queried. “But they didn’t” Twilight affirmed, ”And I think I know why; it’s my guess that they can impersonate creatures of the same size, but if they made themselves into anything as big as you, they would still only weigh the same as a small pony.” “Ha! Then we could easily push them out of our way!” “That’s why I think they didn’t change into buffalo earlier, and why I think we can pull this off!” cheered Twilight.

Huh that's kind of weird if I remember correctly I saw Queen Chrysalis thorax pharynx and Ocellus change into a bigger creatures bigger than a buffalo or a yak so that doesn't make any sense

Twilight wanted to giggle because it tickled her cheeks, but she knew what an honour it was to be included in their ritual, and maintained a solemn expression as he completed his request for protection from the sprits of buffalo leaders in days gone by. As soon as she was considered ready, Zecora stepped forward and bowed, presenting herself for the same treatment.

That's actually kind of cool being part of the rituals before a battle

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