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Twilight Best Pony



The two ponies I care for the most, my dear sister and most faithful student, have betrayed me. My most loyal guard says I'm just being paranoid, but what would he know that I don't also? I thought the nightmare was over, but now it's clear it never went away. In fact, it's only gotten stronger and more cunning, as evidenced by how it's turning all that I hold dear against me. Well, it won't succeed, and I'll do whatever it takes to make sure of that. Mark. My. Words.

Co-Written with Razalon
Edited by Razalon
Pre-read by Razalon

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 142 )

So, you finally decide to write a story huh? Good.

This is all I got to say...

took me 3 months to do this!
so much writers block with this.

SO SAD!!:raritydespair:

This looks interesting...

3434163 Funny to think the sun princess herself would find interesting a story where she- *BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP*. It's quite the paradox if you ask me.

It looks good so far! Only one real thing that grabbed at me as an error.
"Little Sister. Twilight. I'm sorry."
I think those periods should be replaced with commas, as it will give it a more natural flow.
Keep on going, all-though I can kinda see where this is going, It'll be interesting to see how it plays out!

3434117 You seem good with semicolons. I can never understand them.


Alright... This looks like it'll be a good one.

Lets see where this goes?

~Skeeter The Lurker

3434845 They would be my doing.

3434878 Is it good or bad that this fic has gained the attention of yourself, he who lurks-a-lot?

It seems to me that Twilight and luna need some time to think about their plan ON THE MOOOOOOOOOOONart.ngfiles.com/images/152/dommshotz_trollestia.jpg

lol that brightened my day again lol.

:pinkiegasp: Oh, this is getting good, and only the first chapter. :pinkiehappy: I think :trollestia: is being just a little bit paranoid and to be honest jealous of the bond Luna and Twilight is forming. Such weakness shown by a princess of Equestria. :ajbemused:

she is going to try to hide it. only gets darker from here. my friend.

Comment posted by TheMyth deleted Nov 3rd, 2013

I found this on my feed alone between two blog posts.. Like... It wanted to be noticed. I mean, think about it. Exactly at that time only one story was uploaded between the time the two blog posts on my feed. It gave me a feeling this would be worth a read.... I was right. Love this, giving it a fave and an upvote :heart:

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new chapter maybe out some time this week. hopefully Monday or Tuesday. Still don't know yet.

3440279 It's coming, don't you worry your pretty little head. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by Razalon The Lizardman deleted Nov 6th, 2013

yeah sorry about that. but its fixed now.

Well, it should be obvious that something bad is going to happen. I'll just be over here with my popcorn.

gonna need more than popcorn bro. bring a buffet!

This is coming along great! I like the whole dark feel this story has, not to mention it's well-written. Excellent work, and keep it coming!

thank you! but its all thanks to razalon for his awesome editing.

Love love love this :heart:

Alright, :trollestia: is just going a little bit too far in jumping to conclusions about what Luna and Twilight were discussing. For shame Princess Celestia. :ajbemused: And I thought you were a pony of high morals. :flutterrage:

You've got me intrigued. Do continue, please.

oh i do intend to continue, just had to re-write chapter 3. dont know when its going to be finished.

I have to admit, the way you did the inner voice of Celestia's worry was interesting. I've never seen it done like that before and it definitely brought out how deep her concern was and showed how it grew from quiet nagging to convinced paranoia...though I would say she was making leaps and bounds to conclusions but still a great chapter!

Buck Celestia, solar tyrant.

I shall pronounce the oriental name dedicated to such developments......

Ho-Lee Schitt!

Celestia needs to see a therapist about that Paranoid Personality Disorder.

For some reason I'm enjoying this. Maybe too much.

twilight doesnt at all.

Five bits says Twilight and Luna were planning a party of some sort for Celestia. :derpytongue2:

“I’ll also be stripping you of your wings . . .”

Ho-LEE SHHHHHI*yay*.... I don't even... Oh GOD.... The blood.. I just imagined it... OH GOD IT IS EVERYWHERE... :pinkiesick:

CELESTIA! :flutterrage: You paranoid freak of a princess! :flutterrage: Now she is just plain down right crazy and psycho! :flutterrage:

no not twilight wing:raritycry:

i liked this chapter i cant wait for more :pinkiehappy:

Fifteen bits says it was on a crush Luna has for her, or even some princest...
But if it was a party, Celestia would lose her mind and banish herself.

Seems awesome so far! I can't wait to read more. They only problem I see is Wall'O'Text, lol

They're so talking about pranking her. This is why communication is key when it comes to over paranoia XD

who said anything about a prank? lol

MOAR!!! :pinkiehappy:

I love this! More!!

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