An amalgamation of nice and spice. Controversial in every sense of the word. Wonderbolts enjoyer.
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Lightning Dust is upset that she didn't make the Wonderbolts. Anon is upset he is unable to get back home.
The two unexpectedly meet in Cloudsdale in the middle of the night. This is their story.
Inspired by Amenra's A Solitary Reign, particularly the closing three minutes.
Art by rrd-artist.
Pre-read by Rikkity (again).
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This fic got me like...
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First thing that comes to mind that came to mind after I pre-read this fic.
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The second thing:
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Honestly, the story of a diamond dog in Cloudsdale is interesting enough in its own right.
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You are certainly on to something there... I might write this right now.
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Your brain is just full of Dark Souls memes. This is facts.
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Instead of a tier list using the brain meme, you should describe each fic with an album cover.
Would love to see a continuation of tthis
This story really resonated with me.
She sure as hell shouldn't have had to worry about the safety of random civilians who had entered Wonderbolt airspace without permission. Especially considering that Spitfire seemed to be more or less okay with the tornado until Rainbow Dash explained the situation with said civilians.
This story is amazing. I especially loved that last line, fumny as heck
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That's not true. She should've been prepared for the unexpected. Because even though they shouldn't have been in that airspace, it doesn't change the fact that they unexpectedly were. And if they got hurt or worse it would've at least partly been her fault. If you are doing something like stunt flying, or you join the military, or something entirely different, you should always be aware of your surroundings. Otherwise one of these days you could end up hurting yourself or others. You should always assume that somepony else isn't going to be paying attention. That's my 2¢.
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Then that should have been part of their training - the fact that Spitfire didn't disapprove of her behavior until Rainbow Dash explained the situation implies that it wasn't, or at least not adequately emphasized.
Very nice stuff! I love your Lightning Dust.
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Thank you, Odd. Glad to see you around man! Hope you're doing well.
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Thank you! Thought it was a perfect way to end the fic.
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Both of these are valid takes, I had the whole safety aspect be in the forefront here as Anon was trying to get her to see that it's not about just her. The 'everypony else' portion emphasized this take that I went with. This might be something to explore in the future as Anon even mentions that it could be possible for her to address it in the future. Although, season eight's Washout ep didn't really make it possible. If I had to explore this, I'd probably need to tag that as Alt Universe. Regardless, I like when this type of conversation occurs, so thank you both!
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Thanks to the other commenters, there definitely might be one. Thanks for reading the fic!
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Thank you, Nailah. It means a lot, especially with what you said in voice chat. I really appreciate you reading this one!
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True. The only thing I can think is maybe Spitfire didn't know just how close to being a disaster it had been until Best Pony said something??
Now I want to watch that episode again lol.
Any plans for a full-blown sequel story for this one? Could start of with Lightning Dust after a week meeting Anon and returning to the academy and begging Spitfire for a second shot.
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That is definitely something I had in mind if I had to write a sequel to this, but I'm not sure when I'll be able to tackle it. Will definitely update people when I do.
Thank you for reading the fic, I hope you enjoyed it!
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except for the fact it doesn't matter if they were or weren't supposed to be the, the fact is Lightening Dust was actively endangering other people around her constantly.
Go watch the Military Bronies React to the episode and they all point out that being thrown out of the Wonderbolts, who clearly model themselves after the military, is not what would happen in a real military, she would have been arrested and thrown in the brig for half the things she did due to endangering her fellow recruits and the second the "civilians", one of which was in fact a ruler of the nation and thus not only in charge of the the Wonderbolts but also some one who doesn't need their permission to enter one of her own militaries bases, the second she endangered them she would have been arrested and sent to prison for her actions.
Nice Lil motivator ya got here ✌️
Awww
I am part of team lightning dust!
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???: the fact she did that?
Makes me wanna remind Spitfire WHY THE SPITFIRE IS RETIRED NOW!
And rainbow? how can she be MY REPLACEMENT?
her loyalty is a lie
Kindness should have shown through here
she abandoned her friends doing that
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I hope!
Lightning needs a chance
Enjoyed this, despite the odd rough spots.
Err, what does this mean:
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Thank you for the feedback and I'm happy you enjoyed the fic despite its roughness. To answer your question:
It's a play on Lightning Dust's name (A strike [Lightning] that drifted in the wind [Dust]), but I didn't add lightning in front of strike because I had already written it so many times. Probably should've added that though so that line would've made more sense.
Another solid story, but I see a pattern you developed writing these AiE fics.