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Twilight has not slept in almost a week. Luna wants to know why. Twilight wants to go on another light seven mile run.
Spike just wants hot chocolate and Rarity.
Written for Jinglemas 2023, gifted to Ghost Mike based on the prompt of a non-romantic TwiLuna with recently returned resident of the moon and no-winged bookpone.
Art by Skyeypony.
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Shesssh, poor Twilight. The frantic nature of not being able to sleep has caught us all, at some point.
I can see Season 2 sprinkled throughout, the one thing that caught my eye the most was the Running of the Leaves references, is that why Twilight decided to take herself more laid back during the actual episode? lolz
Luna, she decided to fly when she could've just teleported right to Twilight.
I like the choice to have her go there physically. It shows how much Twilight means to her. Luna has always felt like she isn't like most other ponies, but Twilight and her they have a strong bond. It is very nice story.
Last, but not least. I did not need the picture of Twilight's swell legs in my head. SO, thanks for putting that there.
There is something wholly appropriate about Twilight being so caught up in assignments and busying oneself to keep off the assignment for a week and not sleeping.
Considering that, in reality, Twilight would be rather unfit physically (give or take a spell that can literally make one fit without the work), least until she gains earth pony magic from becoming an alicorn, the idea of her working herself extra physically hard is even more bizarre. Funny bizarre.
There's a couple odd headscratchers. We never get an inkling of what assignment of Celestia's Twilight is dodging that drives the whole plot, Luna's sleeping potion is just assumed to be dangerous and not worth using even when Twilight is like this, Spike never noticed the condition of Twilight's legs. Among others.
But the main thrust of this, Luna's appreciation and admiration for Twilight after the events of "Luna Eclipsed", is front and centre, and thus the main takeaway. She feels suitably earnest and more in control after that episode as regards interacting with Twilight, but not perfectly so, and it's an unstressed element, not called to, but is just there. 
On the other end, I really liked how Twilight is naive, anxious and nervy in an early Season way. Not just the more extreme thing of not sleeping for a week, but the way she interacts with Luna feels so her (the Princess being the one to say dropping the title is fine was a great character moment for them both).
Lastly, Spike is done well in his small role, and I'm glad that was light comic margins and didn't drift into Sparity even slightly. 
I'm not sure what to make of the ending getting almost quasi-romantic (especially with that cover art, even cropped: though it is framed well to make Twilight look like she's just sleep-deprived as opposed to the actual art of lusting after Luna
), but Luna and Twilight watching the light snow from Twilight's balcony is a sweet send off to this light tale of a friend helping out another. Hard to imagine a more thematically appropriate thing for Jinglemas! Thanks for this. 
This was really funny and nice! Twilight is very coherent for someone that hasn't slept in forever
So she hasn't slept in 5 days? Hah, amateur's, that's nothing! One time I stayed awake for 13 days, for some reason i didn't feel tired, I don't know why I didn't feel like sleeping but atleast I got something to brag about. :)
Twilight is just like me fr. Except for the exercise part.
You teased me with that cover art
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Twilight is plenty fit in canon. Remember she placed fifth in the Running of the Leaves in a town full of highly physically active Earth Pony farmers and weather Pegasi. She also had no issues with prolonged physical activity in any of her adventures. Being a lot more nuanced than many "stereotypical nerds," in fiction is why so many people loved her.
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Yes, that’s why I said “in reality”. Because of the needs of the show for adventures, especially in the early seasons where just about every other episode seemed to have a lot of running (the Parasprites, the Running of the Leaves, etc.), she doesn’t tire, despite us never seeing her to be into physical activities for the sake of it, even though an equivalent human that studies as much as she does without an equivalent balance absolutely would.
This wasn’t something I was holding against the show at all: it is a cartoon, and the adventures are good stuff. Plus, horses are always running. And Twilight being more than a typical kids’ show nerd is a big part of why she was beloved, this is true. And it evokes Rule of Funny to great effect in the Running of the Leaves. This was more just something to chuckle about when the topic pops up in a fic like this.
First off, thank you everyone for taking the time to read this fic. Had a lot of fun with it, and I'm super happy a lot of people enjoyed this fic too. I take the time to respond to comments after a bit of time has passed so it doesn't look like I'm dominating the comments section.
Anyway:
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You're welcome for the swollen legs imagery, not that you wanted that. Also Twilight's sleeping schedule in this fic is totally me. 100%.
Spot on about the Luna flying decision--I was really thinking about having her teleport as a sense of urgency for a friend, but decided against it as it would seem too out of place. Besides, deep down, Luna wanted to give her one more shot to correct the issue, but maybe she had too much faith in Twilight?
I had to re-watch some of Season 2 admittedly, since I wanted to pinpoint the canonical spot for this fic. I ended up with somewhere after Luna Eclipsed, because that episode set Luna on course to redemption. Had to show that here, and the Running of the Leaves references are totally for more grounding in canon (had to make it feel more Season 2-esque.)
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I'm glad that you enjoyed the fic, Ghost Mike! First off, that cover art is probably the best one I could find that loosely matches the fic. I swear I spent so long trying to find one with them in the library and just couldn't find one that would be eye-grabbing enough.
I am happy that you enjoyed my random comedy elements (both situational and not), along with how I wrote each character in the fic. I really love writing Twilight and Luna, so seeing this as my prompt felt natural to write, the only thing that wasn't natural was having to pull from the canon-toolbox to challenge myself to write Season 2-esque Luna and Twilight. Happy that I nailed that side of the prompt. I always try to challenge myself, so thank you for the challenging prompt!
As for the things you highlighted that I missed, I felt identifying the assignment would be more of a distraction, as the primary focus was Luna's concern for Twilight not possibly sleeping at all. As for the other two you mentioned, those are pretty fair, probably should have added more elaboration as to why. Will chalk this up as making sure I have all my loose ends tied up with my next project. Thank you for the lengthy critique!
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Happy you enjoyed the fic!
She's done all nighters before, but Luna doesn't know.
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HOW? Thirteen days? I would be reeling if I were in your shoes.
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Guilty. Guilty as charged.
These types of stories only reinforce why Luna is the best princess (imo). Awesome story!
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Thank you, I really appreciate your comment! Princess Luna is my favorite princess too. :)
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That immediately deserves a follow! I look forward to reading the rest of your stories.
Non romantic TwiLuna makes a good story.
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Very true. Happy I was able to write this as it allowed me to explore their friendship more. I'm also happy that you enjoyed the fic, and thank you for the follow!
Great story. Twilight and Luna's friendship is so cute in this.
Although rather odd choice for art in a story that isn't intended to be shipping.