The Breezie's are just as excited as the ponies are that the night market has opened once again. One in particular, Swift Breeze, feels a connection with the unicorn Onyx. They become fast friends, as Onyx is given a special gift- a key that will let her go anywhere she wants.
As the cold settles in and Winter Wishday and Wishihooves draw near, Onyx feels the pressure of the season and needs a quiet place to write. It is then she remembers-the key!
Other tags: Onyx -poor mare doesn't have her own tag yet!
Preread by: Azure Drache, Nailah , Calypso
Written for hawthornbunny for Jinglemas 2023
Chapters (1)
This was really cute, but aaaaaaa I wanna know where it goes next!
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Will see what my person says about it, then I shall see where to go next.
*chuckles* So do I.
I loved it. Onyx is one of my fave ponies of Gen 5. I call her 'Melodious Beat of my Heart'
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That is such a cute name for her. <3 I agree she is pretty awesome! She totally needs her own tag on fimfic!
Eeeeee flower breezies
Well I guess someone has to be growing the cereal crops for their cornbread :D
It never occurred to me that ponies would be as mythical to the breezies as vice-versa :) I like the idea that the entrance to the market is a portal, which makes perfect sense given the extradimensional nature of the Night Market.
So do I!
Eeeeee Dapple is here too
Awwww Pipp is so nice. She knows that the unicorns aren't great with technology.
Yes! It's always safe to eat unfamiliar berries.
Unless that skater is Izzy.
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I can hear the jazz backing
eeeee that's adorable
As someone who was hammering away at their Jinglemas fic right up to the deadline, I feel you Onyx
You, young fellow, are going to be getting a dose of the jinxies.
Oh my gosh that's adorable
How dang cool is Dapple, right? I love the idea that he and Onyx room together ^^
Also Razzle and Dazzle are great names for a pair of unicorn fillies. I assume their other siblings are Glitz and Glam.
"Yes, well, you see, we heard you like trees, so..."
eeeeeee that's so sweet
Now that's dedication to your art, stepping through a door that might seal forever.
Thank you so much, this was super adorable! I loved your characterization of Onyx, it was spot on and delightful.
She really does need her own tag ^^
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I cannot ask for another gift, but I too would love to see more!
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Yep! Need a little bit of everything. :D
Heh glad you liked! yes indeed, it makes things more interesting, when each of them see equally as amazing?
Yess she is awesome! So smart with the tech too. One day unicorns will catch up, but until then they have awesome ponies like Pipp to help em out.
Gotta live on the wild side, right? ;)
*cackles* Oh yes, silly Izzy, Ice skating is noooot really her thing. XD
Good! I was really hoping that would come across well. Listened to some bongo music while writing it. Especially since poetry isn't my best genre of writing. XD
1000% on this! Was working on this up to early this afternoon. I knew where I wanted to go, but it didn't want to come for me. But then inspiration struck!
A very big dose!
Heh me too, I kind of see them almost like Octavia and Vinyl, only perhaps not in a romantic way? (haven't fully decided on that). Work together, live together and support each other. :3
Someponies parents were obviously fans of some very old media or something. :P
Exactly!
Right? That's how you know a true artist eh?
You are very welcome! I had a lot of fun writing this for you. The breezies were easiest since well- all OC's, since no named breezies in the show (and only 1 named in G4). Onyx was harder though, trying to get her dialogue and characterization down. I'm happy you found it spot on! I was so worried about that. x.x Hopefully writing more stories for her will help her get her own tag someday! You are very welcome.
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hehe I figured you would. ;) Part of why I stopped there was time (I have some idea of what more I want to do, but it would have taken longer than today), part word count (I thought we had a limit of 5k, and knew what else I had to say wouldn't fit in that slot. Now I know it was 8k and welp, that would have possibly worked. XD And lastly... the big secret... I also want to know what happens next! Ha hah... it hasn't entirely come to me yet.
I'll be thinking on it though and trying to work it out. ^.^
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Nice story, good work.
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Thanks XD And rofl that pic. XD
Stories where the author just takes an existing scene from MLP and converts it into text are usually the bane of my existence... but this right here is a rare example of that trope done right. Seeing things from the POV of the Breezies is such novel idea in its own right, but then you give Swift so much personality... and then you made this an Onxy story (arguably the best background pony in the current gen), and I love the odd friendship trope so much...
...and then you ruined it all with a cliff hanger.
except not really
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I agree with you there too, it is rarely done right/well, but the few times it is? Are worth trudging through the ones that don't to find them. I'm so glad you found mine one of those. <3
Awww thanks so much!
Heh I had so much fun writing Swift, she is just adorable. And the Breezies are a treasure trove of opportunity. I've seen very few breezie centered stories. (With them in it sure, but main characters? Not as much. Even more so G5 Breezies.) I hope we see more of them in the future (besides whatever else I write heh.) Yess I agree Onyx is awesome! Totally best background pony for G5. Hopefully if they make another season of Make Your Mark (the Netflix one) she'll have more screentime. The odd friendship trope is one of my favorites! heh can you tell I am excited about your comment? :P
Yeeaaaah that ending... don't worry, I plan on writing a sequel for what happens. Though it might not come out right away. Soon, though.
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Always love stories with the Breezie's in them.
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Right? Breezies are a fun species to work with. I need to write them more. XD
You got to love the technology
Yep that's pretty much every day when you go out to shopping or getting something to eat that's such a pain
This is actually pretty interesting and very cute story and it's always nice to see The Breezies again so a young Breezy named Swift is pretty excited that the border is starting to open to let ponies and maybe creatures coming in to the home for the market and this would be the first time she's starting to see ponies and there are some Breezies we're still trying to invite the other ponies who hasn't seen it yet especially to Swift's curiosity she mad a pony name onyx which they get along pretty well even showing her around the shop and her home and everything but unfortunately the portal is starting to close and she was pretty upset but her grandmother gave Onyx the key that someday she will return and it looks like the holiday is really hectic and she really needs to find a quiet place to do her poetry so she returned back to see the two Breezies that she recognized and she wanted to ask them where to find a quiet place so they found the door and the key activated and Swift really wants to go with her and Onyx accepted it again this was a pretty nice story and I really like it keep out the good work Merry Christmas and Happy New Year
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Right? It is so nice and helpful ^.^
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10000% on that. Oy kids just don't know when to quit.
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Yep pretty much! Thanks so much I'm glad you liked it! Yes indeed, we need more good breezie stories. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year's to you too!