Out the Rabbit Hole

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Fluttershy hoped to spend a lovely, eventful evening with Discord. A cruise and a chance to come across animals of her wildest dreams? It sounded wonderful.

Too bad Angel had other plans...

Co-writer: Nailah

Editor: Dreams of Ponies

Cover art provided by: The Sleepless Beholder

Breezie gift for: QueenChrysalisForever for Jinglemas 2023

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Nailah

Nailah #1 · Dec 29th, 2023 · 3 · ·

I helped with this. I get headpats, right?
Seriously, I am honored I could help with this, and I hope Chryssy loves it. <3

Dreams of Ponies

Dreams of Ponies #2 · Dec 29th, 2023 · 2 · ·

You know, I signed up to be a breezy this year, but as this at least the third story I've edited for Jinglemas, I feel like I've done my part

Good story, would snuggle both pones.

Flamewarrior02

Flamewarrior02 #3 · Dec 29th, 2023 · 4 · ·

I don’t think I’ve seen a cross generation romance before. Congrats on being the first.

Would like to see more, especially since the ending feels like there’s more to come.

QueenChrysalisForever

QueenChrysalisForever #4 · Dec 29th, 2023 · 3 · ·

Ahhhhh I simply loved this!!

The waves of the water splashed against the bottom haul of the very large, overly comical ship with a gigantic water slide with at least four different twirling slides that another Discord was using while laughing and shouting.

Oh yes, what boat owned by Discord would be complete without some water slides?

She was all sprawled out on one of her favorite floral beach towels, but in his realm, the flowers became real, and could even talk to her if she desired a conservation.

I bet those are some fragrantly amazing conversations!

Angel bunny opened one eye as Fluttershy went back to reading her book. He grinned seeing she was distracted, then hopped off away from the spot he’d been laying.

Tsk, tsk, naughty bunny. Don't be getting any ideas! :P

Two other clones could be seen re-acting one of Fluttershy’s many tea parties.
“Oh yes, darling, I would simply love another cup of tea,” Discord said holding out the tiny frog-shaped cup.

Frog! Of course, gotta have those adorable little amphibians. Such a cute cup.

“I'm privy to your little schemes, Angel bun bun. After all, who do you think came up with the concept?” He smirked, popping his deflatable self at the helm with a needle, the Discord crumpling to the ground and then unceremoniously floating off with the wind.

Of course, should have seen that coming Angel. Can't fool Discord like that! heh I love the imagery of discord being a blow up inflatable toy. (Well his clone that is.)

They all paused, screamed and turned into pins just as the rolling ball of Discord struck them. Strike!

*chuckles* Oh my, I am sure loving this chase scene!

Fluttershy gasped. “ANGEL!” she shrieked, before flying through after him.

Huuzah! here we gooo!

Zipp zipped in, hooves outstretched as Fluttershy flopped and flailed. With a final mighty flap, Zipp managed to wrap her hooves around her, wings spreading wide to help them glide down.

Are you an angel? Because you've fallen from the heavens and landed right in my hooves.

Zipp spread out her wings to full span, and smirked. “Yeah, they’re pretty epic, right?”

They really are lovely wings, she is right to be proud of them.

“Nawh, nothing like that here at all,” Zipp replied.

Poor Zipp. Not being able to live up to your full potential sucks.

Zipp shook her head. “Sorry, my head was in the clouds,” Zipp lied.

The clouds of floofy pegasi mane and fluffy wings! hehe

“Hot off the press! Princess seen holding hooves with a butterscotch pegasi with silky smooth pink mane and tail, cutie-mark of three butterflies on her flank, but on both sides! Who is this exotic beauty and what does Princess Zipp’s mother think?”

Heh ponies are always going to talk Zipp. Holding hooves with another mare? *gasp* Hold the presses, this is a big story! 👀

“It’s all over my Pippsqueak’s tab. Apparently, my sister finally caught her own looooove bird,” she teased, jabbing Zipp in the side.

They do make sure things get seen quickly! Hard part of modern tech. Flutters does make an adorable looove bird. Such a cute couple.

“Mhmm,” Fluttershy said, mostly lying through her teeth.

Way to stand up for your new friend Flutters! Marefriend even? *giggles*

“You’re blushing~” Pipp sang, snapping another photo for good measure as she danced around them. With a hoof, she edited and posted, focusing mostly on the blushing part.

Gotta love Pipp, such a silly pony. You've got her characterization down very well here!

Safe in the comforts of her own room, Zipp buried her head into the pillow, and shouted words of incoherent and possibly profane nature.
“Oh my, such language,” Fluttershy said. “I’m sure your sister means well.”

Yes, she is quite peeved about eveything, isn't she Flutters?

“I have to be honest with you,” Fluttershy began, tilting her head up towards Zipp. “I think you are cute when you’re flustered.”

*cackles* Atta girl, Flutters! You go get your mare! heheh

She wrapped her wings around Fluttershy to try to hide this new angel in the safety of her embrace.

Dawww

I really loved this story. You guys did a great job with the silly prompt I gave. Characterization was totally on par here, excellent job on everypony! (Angel and Discord too.) The creativity to cross the two gens together was beautiful and inspiring.
Aaaaand now I want to see what happens next,
A Hare's Chance- The Search for Angel!
Thanks so much for this wonderful story!

Aklinstar