As Maretime Bay celebrates and Equestria enters the beginning of reunification, Queen Haven of Zephyr Heights wonders if she and her daughters are fugitives, or forgiven.
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Was considering doing an audiobook of this for quick content, but then...
Oh! Incomplete!
How long do you plan to make it?
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Probably not very long. 2-3 chapters, most likely.
Fun start!
Sure to be a nice little story.
Interesting idea for how the royal family of Zephyr Heights might have smoothed things over with the populace.
Neat story idea, and it touches on something I had in my mind about Unicorn Attack!. I'll PM it to you eventually. It's a bit far along compared to where the story is now.
Also, if I'm not mistaken, the crystals are about to build themselves a new brighthouse. (I swear, I have to keep reminding myself that Crystal Brighthouse is a pun on lighthouse, otherwise it'll sound way too much like a Barbie playset type of thing. Which, to be fair, it actually is.)
Unfortunately, the Crystal Brighthouse doesn't come with separate bedrooms. You mares don't mind having a stallion for a roommate, do you?
It's just as well. Hitch has his own place, adjoining the precinct if the Foal Me Once episode of TYT is any indication? Pity though, separate bedrooms might've prevented half of what went down in Nightmare Roommate.
Sigh beaten to making the audiobook again, but since I've started I might as well do my take on it as well.
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Wait, who's making readings of my stuff? I'm flattered, but they're not telling me about it, lol
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Oh, My rival audiobook maker, Straight To The Point Studio.
I try not to cover the same ground he does. I did let you know that I did your first chapter first I thought.
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Ah, I think he did do one of my other stories.
Nothing left to do but upload the video, and leave the rest to fate.
I figure once the video is posted, Pipp will be keeping an eye on Zephyr Height's news feeds and social media to see how well it goes over. Of course, that too requires a decent signal.
When you are making an apology video you shouldn't set conditions to people you're apologizing to. One can only make requests or ask or beg. Demands don't fit with the whole "I wronged you and I'm sorry" thing.
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I just viewed it as Haven taking complete and total responsibility for those under her.
That's not the Queen Haven I remember. But maybe that's what I get for watching the censored version.
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I'd watch the whole film in this version.
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She could have said something along the lines of: "I will accept any punishment Zephyr Heights sees fit to pass down. I only beg you not to blame my daughters or stagehands for their part in deception. They were acting under my orders. The responsibility for that farce lies entirely with me."
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Might make those changes when I get home from work.
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Earlier, Haven was told she'd have a place in Maretime Bay if things didn't go well in Zephyr Heights. What I took from her setting conditions for her penance was that, if the ponies of Zephyr Heights didn't permit her to take full responsibility for the charade, she would simply go into self-exile with her daughters. But yeah, asking her possibly former subjects not to hold her daughters responsible probably works better.
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And done. I'm all for dialogue improvements, thank you!
Well, good to know Pipp won't do it live us a good start.
A sign that Zipp has accepted the magic of friendship.
Huh!
Yep.
Sounds kinda similar to how Twilight's castle was created.
Which there was.
And Pipp packing to much like Rarity would. 
Glad to know she's accepting her mistake.
Yeah, so, all we can do is wait now.
Oh boy!
Well, looks like they have nothing to worry about.
This is definitely gonna take some training first. 😓
Liked the ending.
Nice explanation for where the replacement jewel came from. All's well that ends well, I suppose.
Not much I can say that other reviewers haven't already said better in the previous chapters, but I LOVE the work that went into the exchanges, characterizations and general wrap-up throughout the short story in all the right places, especially with the references to "Sisters Take Flight". And, yes, this IS a great explanation for where Haven got the replacement gem for her crown (as well as a good build-up for Haven and Alphabittle becoming better friends).
I mean...I'm a bit sore that Queen Haven was justly detained for fraud, but not Queen Novo for doing much worse. Or Discord for that matter. Maybe there was a vicious revolution between shows due to all the injustice seen throughout G4 and THAT is why Twilight and Celestia's regime failed.
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Wait, what did Novo do?
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She held her people at the bottom of the sea instead of simply either ignoring the Storm King (who never proved at any point to ever be a threat) or place the Storm King under arrest. Then Novo punished for daughter for doing what she herself should've done in the first place. Also Novo was prejudice against non-aquatic beings.
Also it really was only remotely wrong that Twilight tried to take the pearl, Novo sure wasn't going to use it.
Glad to have finally sat down and read this. It was a charming follow-up to the events of the movie, and one that felt in-character for everyone involved.
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Thanks for reading! Very glad you enjoyed.
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Rival?
Nah more like another audio book reader
There are no rivals in reading