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Axolotl222


I read, write, and make plans for world domination. Not always in that order.

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Or that time Zipp jumped out a window as a filly.

Written for Bicyclette's A Thousand Words Contest. Set just after the flashback in Zipp's Flight School.
Now with a dramatic reading

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so zip went from wanting to fly to follow her dream to then doing it as a you only live one thing after she was hit with reality? well at least she did the math

This contest has a ludicrous amount of entries, I'm always impressed to see there's still more coming all the time. It's great to see such drive. :twilightsmile:

A fun little add-on story! Anything with filly Zipp is A-tier reading. A few spelling errors or missing words here and there, but nothing too distracting. Good luck in the contest!

Decided to give this a read based on the Douglas Adams reference in the title. There's some entertainment value and I gave it an upvote, but you might want to reread your work before posting so you can catch your errors.

The sculpture wiped the sweat off her brow

"Sculpture" is the art; "sculptor" is the artist.

“ZEPHYRINA!”
“ZYPHERINA!”

You got it right the first time; not sure what happened all the times after that.

“Even with lot’s of hard work.”

That apostrophe doesn't belong there.

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“You are so grounded.”

And they are SO putting a lock on that window.

In fact, make it ALL the windows...just in case. :raritywink:

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Not to mention putting a guard or two nearby as a precaution.

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The math doesn't lie

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I went back and fixed the errors. Thank you for the kind words and pointing out my mistakes :twilightblush:
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Zypher Height's is not OSHA approved

Okay, that's simply adorable. But good pony, I feel sorry for Haven as she's watching this happen.

Aah, I finally got 'round to reading this! And boy was it worth it.
That was adorable! Lil' Zipp is already hella adorable, I have no clue how you made her even more cute, but you managed it.
For a story with only 1000 words this was paced amazingly well. I really don’t get how you brilliant people mange to do that, but I digress. Seeing Zoom and Thunder again is amazing, and Queen Haven's critiques were fun and a great way to start this off.
I have a little technical question:
So when Zoom says she’s never seen a filly glide like that, does that imply the royalty's been pretending to be able to fly even before Zipp and Pipp, or is it implying that all Pegasi can glide if they want, but most don’t know how, which would mean fillies and colts as well? Or am I looking to deep into the lines? Probably that last one.
Overall: Wholesome! Deserves this favorite, bud! :rainbowkiss:

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Brilliant people, you say... :pinkiecrazy:
*Ahem* But yeah, I'm glad you liked it! And to answer your question, my head cannon is that most pegasi can still glide without magic. It's skill that takes practice, though, and by Zipp's time only a few, like the military, would bother to learn it (propaganda that common pegasi weren't meant to fly didn't help either). But Zipp, being Zipp, taught herself how to glide (at an impressively young age to boot). Eventually Zipp learned that she wasn't really flying, but she kept practicing anyways. Then came the day when she actually could fly...
TL;DR, the second part was right. Thank you for the favorite! :yay:

Cute profile pic and story! Great job, Zipp!

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Fun fact: originally I wasn't gonna watch Tell Your Tale. But then I saw that screen cap...

the title is hilarious and the twist of zipp gliding down to safety is great

Awesome story. :twilightsmile:

On the one hand, at this point in the timeline, the guards should still think the royal family can fly and that Haven can snatch Zipp out of the air if need be. On the other, this is still a delightful blend of positive nihilism and shameless feghootery. Thank you for it and best of luck in the judging.

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Thank you for the kind words! And yeah, now that you mentioned it I might have a bit of a plot-hole, although I guess could hand-wave it and say that a few of the guards know.

Or should I hoof-wave it...?

Howdy, hi~!

This was adorable. Love the short story that really captures the personality of all the characters present. I particularly love the line from Thunder about unyielding optimism. Excellent read, thank you~!

Queen Haven placed a hoof on her chin as she inspected the statue. “Hmm,” she said, frowning in thought. “This is absolutely terrible.” She then pointed an accusatory hoof at the bust. “No, no, no! Literally everything about this is wrong! Is this even supposed to me? I mean, just look at that chin! That is way to bulbous for me! I’m much prettier than that…”

i can just about hear Jane Krakowski's voice!

“Y-your Majesty! Your-”

“Not now Zap,” Haven said without looking at her.

ah, classic! poor Zoom!

She squinted, curious. Haven saw the tower where her daughters slept, nothing unusual. That is, until she noticed that a window several stories off the ground had a small white filly leaning out of it.

oh, yeah, that is certainly warranting of some panic!

“Alright, no wind! You know what that means?”

Zipp turned towards her sister, who was sitting in her crib, engrossed in the task of stacking blocks. When she realized Zipp was looking at her, she gave her a nearly toothless smile. She then clapped her hooves together with a giggle.

“That’s right, Lil’ Pipp,” Zipp said, affectionately running a hoof through her hair. “Your big sister’s gonna be the first Pegasus to fly in thousands of moons!” Zipp then pulled her goggles down before leaning out the window. “Hear that Equestria? I’m gonna fly!”

augh, that is just so cute! Pipp being too young to understand anything said to her, Zipp talking to her anyway, calling her "Lil' Pipp", all of it is so great. and yeah, can definitely picture a younger Zipp trying something like this

“But Mommy! You told me I could do it,” Zipp pouted.

“I said no such thing!”

“You told me I could do it as long as I didn’t give up.”

“I… uh,” Haven stuttered as the memory came back to her. “Well, I suppose…”

brings to mind the following sketch:

made all the worse for them being pegasi who pretend to fly in a world where everypony knows that pegasi once could fly and would give anything to have what is rightfully theirs back. great stuff!

“So life is just biding your time until death comes and sends you into an eternal nothingness?”

“Kinda?”

“Huh,” Zipp said, leaning away from the window. The three let out a collective sigh of relief.

aha, a bit zero to sixty for a foal, but that is dark humor for ya

“Oh no,” Thunder said. “She’s full of unyielding optimism again!”

ahaha, love this line!

Zipp landed in the courtyard with a “Yippee!” She then turned and ran towards her mother. “Mommy, Mommy!” Zipp said, practically vibrating with excitement. “Did you see me? I did it! I flew! Just like you said I could! Mommy… why are you crying?”

Haven whipped her eyes. “Oh, Zipp,” she said, pulling her into a hug.

“You are so grounded.”

ehehe, that is a fun ending, all the more so for the dip into nihilism in the middle of the story! makes this read like a text about the triumph of Zipp's you-only-live-once philosophy over the despair of nihilism, which is an interesting bit of texture to chew on. in any case, this was really great! silly and cynical without overdoing it on either, letting the ridiculous characters and situation speak for themselves, with a great sense of comedic timing. thank you so much for it!

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I might have to make "Oh no, she’s full of unyielding optimism again" my catchphrase :scootangel:

Hello! Have a review. This was really nice, and if anything more satisfying G5 than Tell Your Tale itself has (largely) been so far. Zipp was particularly nicely characterised. Have a like, and well done on the Bronze Medal!

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Howdy howdy, and thank you for the review! I'm glad you liked Zipp's characterization here. My goal was to show how her more adventurous side, which A: her mother both encourages and discourages, and B: how it never really goes away, even is Zipp gains some cynicism over the years. So yeah, I'm glad to see that I was able to communicate that.
Oh, and thank you for the up-vote. :twilightblush:

This was a fun little vignette. Oh man, the image of toothless baby Pipp was priceless!

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