Parental Fear

EHow'd You Endure It?
MLP Gen 5
Drama
Slice of Life
Alphabittle and Misty discuss Opaline, and Misty's life under her hoof.
Alphabittle
Misty
Boltstrike58 · 1.2k words · 27 1 · 791 views

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In the midst of Opaline's massive Cutie Mark theft, she is confronted by a stallion. A very familiar stallion, who isn't happy about her treatment of Misty.

A quick story I wrote that I think could've been a scene in Make Your Mark, but wasn't shown.

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Fireheart 1945

Fireheart 1945 #1 · February 2nd · 3 · ·

Pretty good. The ending sure was ominous, and Alpha's rage strikes me as realistic.

marmalado

marmalado #2 · February 2nd · 4 · ·

This 100% should have been a thing that happened in MYM. If Opaline hadn't been defeated I'd be willing to see a 1-on-1 with her and Alphabittle. Very well-written.

Comickook

Comickook #3 · February 2nd · 4 · ·

Whoa. REALLY emotional one-shot in this, quite appropriately so. Kind of wish Alphabittle was able to deliberately invoke some "Frosty Shivers" to use ICE magic to fight a FIRE alicorn (it would have added some stuff to the Papa Wolf rage to allow Alphabittle to get in at least a couple of decent shots in before going down). Still, you did a really good job on the dialogue and characterizations.

Yoshifan30

Yoshifan30 #4 · February 2nd · 2 · ·

"It's kind of a long story, Dad. See, I met this alicorn named Opaline Arcana. She took me in, and I think she might've wiped my memories, because I forgot all about my foalhood, and—"

Actually that makes sense why Misty couldn't remember her past that much

Yoshifan30

Yoshifan30 #5 · February 2nd · 2 · ·

Well I would definitely imagine how Alphabittle would react if Opaline did say something about Misty and probably would have found out that she was responsible for kidnapping his daughter and of course she doesn't care luckily Karma got to her anyway and it looks like they don't have to deal with her anymore after all the years she hurts throughout the thousands of years she got what she deserved this was a pretty interesting one here keep up the good work

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