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Jarvy Jared


Reader. Reviewer. Writer. Also now script co-writer and musician for the fan project, Elements of Justice.

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Chamomile isn't a train conductor. She isn't an engineer, either. She's just a widow taking care of her lonely Bridlewood tea shop and disabled son. Yet, when she receives word of a job opportunity from the newly instituted Equestrian Railroad Company, asking for ponies to extend the railroad to a forgotten realm in the Frozen North, she is intrigued. Perhaps such a place holds the key to changing her son's life for the better.

This simple task is colored by the group she's paired with: a reserved unicorn, a gung-ho pegasus, and an earth pony no less burdened than herself. As they journey forward, she'll find they bring out sides of her long since buried, and new sides altogether—not least the earth pony, whom Chamomile finds herself growing inexplicably closer to.

It'll be up to her how to react to this change—and what kinds of memories she wants to make.


This story is complete, and will be updated every Tuesday and Friday.

My eternal gratitude to all of my pre-readers and editors who, with all their various contributions, comments, and concerns, helped me bring out the best in this story:
Stinium Ruide
Mike Cartoon Pony
VoxArachne
Sledge115

Little Tigress provided the cover art. Their deviantart can be found at this link. Thank you so much!

This story was written and revised to be set during the Tell Your Tale YouTube Series and after the Make Your Mark special, and as such, departs from the Make Your Mark series. That said, I have tried to make it so that watching either the special or the series is not necessary to understand the story's contents.

Chapters (20)
Comments ( 33 )

Good start,but its really hard decision to leave your own home.

Honestly, this is an intriguing start, with the potential for lots of emotional exploration for our lead character. Still, for me in particular, it's pretty funny that her name is Chamomile. It obviously fits what you've shown of her personality so far, but I can't help but compare her to this Chamomile, who was named ironically. She's the punch first, ask questions later type who causes massive collateral damage constantly and wouldn't know the first thing about parenthood. 😅

I have to say, this has one of the best openings to fic that I've seen in a while. I know it's only the first chapter, but I'm this will win a Derpy.

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Indeed - but in this case, even the slimmest chance may be worth the decision.

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Funnily enough, I had a number of people in DMs and in pre-read sessions compare the character to other similarly named OCs. It was completely unintentional, believe me - I went with what sounded right and worked the character from there, and only learned later that it's pretty common. I'm hoping that my interpretation of the "Chamomile archetype" is a worthy addition. :raritywink:

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Thank you! It's a softer opening than others, but I think it does set the tone quite nicely. :raritywink:

Interesting start, I haven’t really touched gen 5 much but this story sounds like it will be good anyways.

This is a pretty good start. I can't wait to see more. This is the third G5 story I've put in my book shelf.

I really like the start especially how you portray Chamomile.

You can clearly see here that she is not "ok" and hasn't been for a long time but she still going through the motions, kinda interested on how her character/personnality is going to evolve going forward into the story.

Juniper, little Juniper he seems like a good colt but it's still kinda sad to see the situation he is in without fully realising it ... ignorance is trully bliss sometime.

Penny, she seems to be quite the character If I had to describe her interaction here it would be with this quote " A true friend doesn't tell you what you want to hear but what you need to hear " I hope to see more of her or Juniper even if they stay behind.

To conclude this little review I'll just say that I had a really good time reading it, would totally recommend it and that I really want to see what comes next.

"You had my curiosity now you have my attention" :raritywink:

Your writing is quite enjoyable so far

Oh dang, Juniper is an actual magic wish baby? It wasn't a child-friendly explanation? I certainly wasn't expecting that.

A good start to a good fic, keep the reader wanting more and fallow Chamomile’s story!

Quite interesting chapter

Astral is full of secrets it seems

Hmm, quite a bit to unpack here. So as it turns out Astral wasn't a completely saintly pony whose only flaw is being dead, he actually did a bad thing here. Granted he still had no malevolent intentions,but it was still a selfish act.
So yeah, now your making me think about what I would do under those circumstances.

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Sometimes we remember the deadly more fondly than they actually were...

It's almost as if most of the ponies who signed up for this are running from their pasts...

That was very good. I'm giving you six stars for doing a good job. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

This chapter was three parts hilarious, sad, and worrying. Well done.

Hearing what Ponyville became after decades of separation brings a certain, nostalgiac feeling to me. More than that, the detail that everything around Ponyville has life while it itself is barren of it is interesting and makes me wonder just what in the world happened for it to get to that state.

Also, calling it now, that circle in the center is the Golden Oak Library.

So...
...on one hand, Enkimdu (clever name btw) could have probably done a better job letting the family know he wanted to leave.
On the other hand, he clearly had some issue that were gonna come out eventually, and since disaster was going to strike anyways, it might of actually been worse if he stayed.
So I guess things were gonna get rough no matter what.

Astral is definitely sad, but what is he hiding?

The way you're handling Chamomile's obvious crush here is fun.

Oh no, poor mares. Stupid Astral, doing whatever the romantic equivalent of cockblocking is to his wife from beyond the grave like an asshole. Closing your heart off like this isn't healthy!

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Its just her imagination.
Also good chapter, i think Gaea kinda forced her progress with Cammie.

Oooo So close, but still got things to work through.

Heavy chapter, shame about clip.

I would've expected at least one of them to have died in the fall, they should count their blessings! At least the dire survival situation somehow gave Gaea and Chamomile their catharsis.

What just happened?

Never mind, death may well have been a better fate than being puppeted around by Sombra.

Something tells me they are not yet done with the north, but maybe I’m wrong.

Huh, I was sort of expecting them to find the Crystal Empire hiding underground, not to immediately go back. But it works.

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