I figured out what people do that I don't. They do; I don't.
Rainbow Dash got herself a new computer and a shiny new game to push its limits. Applejack wants to spend time with her but Rainbow Dash isn't exactly the best at picking up subtle hints. Applejack, still working out her feelings gets unsolicited help in an unconventional way.
Yeah... things were going to get messy.
An entry for the 2023 Spring Fling Contest
*Screencap taken from the official comic: Canterlot High: March Radness*
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Oh my gosh, I absolutely loved this! You portrayed their characters really well, and Sunset being a much-needed meddler was just perfect. Also, the scene with Applejack singing was super sweet. Well done!
Glad to see some more AppleDash at the Spring Fling!
You sure ain't.
This whole interaction was hilarious.
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Hey, glad to hear you enjoyed it!
The whole Sunset & Cadence sequence was sort-of a catalyst for this whole story, strangely enough.
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I love that. It was really fun to read so I can definitely see how it could have started from there. You did an excellent job expanding upon that idea, then!
Best of luck in the contest! I can't wait to read more of your work. :)
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Thank you; it means a lot to hear that.
I wish you the best of luck as well!
RUN, SUNSET SHIMMER! RUN LIKE THE WIND!
Cadence (singing): "Caaaan you feeeel the loooove toniiiight?"
Sunset (while running): "No, I don't want to feel the love tonight!"
Seriously though, the whole 'Sunset runs from her feelings and a somewhat-creepy Cadence' subplot was hilarious!
As for the main plot, I really enjoyed seeing how Applejack and Rainbow Dash figured out their feelings for each other. While AJ would live in denial without help from a pal, Rainbow would say 'buck it' to denial, caution, and all manner of sense within seconds.
Poor Sunset though! She now has to deal with the living embodiment of SunLight shipping and hope to survive long enough to get help from her friends.
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I kind of now wish I had Cadence play some not-so-subtle music during that short trip they had.
This was a really nice bit of AppleDash that felt wholly natural to both characters. I really enjoyed the way Applejack struggles to even recognize her feelings, and the way she seizes on a way to explain them away regardless of how little sense it makes felt very AJ. Sunset makes a good go-between for these two would-be lovebirds, and the characterization Rainbow gets here is really nice and does a better job than many fics at not making her feel abrasive or annoying. I got a bit thrown off when Cadance shows up with an abrupt last-minute side plot, even if I do enjoy a good SciSet tease, but overall this was a really nice story and thank you very much for the submission.
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Yeah, that one part in hindsight did detract from the rest of the story in terms of tone looking back at it. I added it for a bit of humor to offset the mood a tiny bit but I think it probably came across as just random and strange to most people. Oh well, I learned something of value by taking that risk and that's what matters at the end of the day. Thanks for the kind comment, I really appreciate it!
I feel like I missed something here... What bookstore?
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Ah, that would be a major oversight by me. There's no context here as there should be but that's referencing a moment in one of the comics. Thanks for the catch! I'll do some rewording a little later today as soon as I'm able to.
Edit: Okay, I tried to make it a clearer and make sense given her character. I know it's not perfect, showing would have been better than telling, but that's something I'm just going to have to learn by trial of fire.
Great story. I feel like you used and understood the characters very well and that part at the end with cadence was hilarious.