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Deathscar


You'd be surprised at the emotions twenty-six letters can unearth

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Source

“Oh my dear mother
I love you so
Till seeds turn to trees
With you, I will be.”

Find out the true meaning of the phrase "I would like to be a tree" through an untold part of the train ride to Appleloosa. Because we all need to understand, hardly any phrase is muttered without a story behind it.


Author's Notes

A story I had in my head for a long while now that I'm finally able to write. Inspired by AeronJVL's art (which is the cover art for this story). I hope you guys enjoy! Be sure to leave some comments about what you liked/what you didn't like! I read all of them!

Credits:
Cover Art & Inspiration: Sunshine by AeronJVL

Proofreading by writer and Bronymaster

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 19 )

That was petty good. I'm not really sure what to say, so I'm just going to give you this::heart:

Also, I think the dad got killed by a dragon:trollestia:

Daaawwww:fluttercry: 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Hmm. Bronymaster gave this story high praise, especially for its feels. So I had to check it out.

I wasn't as touched as he was--but then again, I'm not surprised, knowing him--but still, it's a very adorable and touching story. I've a few issues with it, though. Mostly Rainbow feels shoehorned in. Your transcribing of the episode is perfect, it made me smile just like watching the actual episode would, so bravo there...but as soon as you start your own story proper, both Fluttershy and Rainbow feel OOC. Not terribly so, but it's not near as natural as it should be. So that throws some of the emotion off, for me at least.

Grammatically it's very well written, but unsurprising really. BM wouldn't have let you go otherwise, heh. Your actual story structure is very well done, via the flashbacks. I enjoyed that a lot. Pacing is generally good, but feels a little rushed here or there. There are some scenes that are a bit too much tell and not enough show, so they come off a little bare bones and--as I said--rushed. But overall, the story as a whole is decently put together, more than decent, actually.

I enjoyed it, you got a thumbs up from me. I'm not sure if I'll fave it or not though. But anyways, good job! I did enjoy it heavily.

I really enjoyed this story. Good job taking one of the main quotes of the fandom and making it depressing! Even if it is only really half depressing.

1241975 Awww thank you!

1242141 Thanks for taking the time to write that critique. Yeah, I think I can see why Rainbow and Fluttershy look OOC now >< I'll definitely try to fix them in my later fics that feature these two (which will not be far off, I love these two!)

1243218 Thanks! ^^

Amazing. Simply amazing. Bravo to you.

I like the song in that it includes a subtle ending point to the "staying together". What is nonsense verse to a child is a promise of the right ending for a grown child moving out into their own house. Of course, Fluttershy was forced into that by her mother "moving out" of her mortal form, but the idea remains. She does visit a lot, but that is understandable given who she is and how they parted dwellings.

4:07 am - fimfiction.net
I checked my fanfic and found that Pe4ceKeep3r read my story!

He also dropped the following loot:
99 manly tears



:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

Bro, I can't be crying in the library. That just can't happen. Gah! Confound it all! Manly tears were shed. Nicely done! :pinkiesad2:

1245372 Thank you ^^
1247410 I'm glad someone caught that kind of message from the song. I spent quite a bit of time making sure the song had more than one meaning :)
1248607 *takes the loot* Thank you! *stores in collection of manly tears he has collected*
1248836 *collects tears and stores them in the collection* It's alright, you're not the only one :)

Don't know why it took me so long to get around to reading this, but I absolutely loved it. Really the thing that clinched it for me was the little song. It really had a great impact on the story as a whole.

Gotta admit, that I first was thinking this is a rather creepy one-shot without any sense in it, given to the odd title and description. But, well, it turned out to be a great piece of work. I loved it. :moustache:

:fluttercry: Beautiful story here. Gave me the chills and almost made me cry several times. Little part with Spike was a nice touch. I'm surprised this story doesn't have more views. It defiantly should!

1703401 Hehe, thank you :) I really enjoyed writing this story and i'm really happy with it :D

The total of manly tear shed

Seriously good sad story now i need to go cry myself to sleep :fluttercry:
Fegelein :raritycry:

Heartbreaking and full of emotions story, described in such beautiful words.

I love it.

:raritycry: This is enough to make a person who doesn't cry, cry.

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