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Deathscar


You'd be surprised at the emotions twenty-six letters can unearth

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The Wonderbolts is Rainbow Dash's lifelong dream. But how did this dream come about? Follow Rainbow as she recounts the event that started it all: Her first Wonderbolts show.

(Inspired by the same song by MandoPony)


Author's Notes:
A very short story I did in a very short amount of time. Just an idea that wouldn't die until I wrote it out. The idea came about after listening to MandoPony's song "Wonderbolts, Pt 2 "Someday" ". It is a beautiful instrumental piece and one that I really love. The story was built to the 3 (or 4) parts of that song. If you are listening to the song, please don't rush through the story so as to link up with the song. Take your time and I hope you enjoy this short story!


Credits:
Cover art by steffy-beff from her art I've Been Dreaming...

Inspiration and music by MandoPony, for his song The Wonderbolts, Pt 2 "Someday"

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 17 )

I enjoyed it!

he lives!!! Haven't heard from you in ages bro!

899529 Sorry. Very very busy ><

899575 That's quite alright. I understand that we all have a life outside of the glowing screen of the computer.:derpytongue2:

899590 Wish I didn't have such a busy life outside my glowing screen >< Daring Do's Remembrance will be around next week :)

I liked it. You write well and it was a nice little one-shot. I'm not sure why there are so many downvotes.

902114 I guess because it feels rushed and I can totally see why. I didn't put it much effort for this story and I think it shows. I won't ever do this again, this was just a spur of the moment thing. I'm gonna make sure each story I pump out now is 120% of my effort :)

904082

I guess it is a little rushed, but it didn't make me dislike it. Still good!

You never disappoint Deathscar. Yet another solid piece.

906381 I personally think that this is one of my weaker pieces >< I rushed it and I'm not proud of it at all. Might do a re-write.

906408

While I will agree it is one of your weakest, I still think you have a solid base and it is pretty good for being rushed. A solid base is the start to any good fic, and since you have that, you should have no problem with the re-write.

I am a fairly slow reader, so when it got to RD and her dad bring her to the show, and the crowd being all exited was when it was the fast part of the song, and then it when it got to describing them a little bit the song went back to its slow part, then it looped and got back to the fast when RD was gaping her jaw, so basically it synced perfectly for me :rainbowlaugh:

Just a little spelling mistake, "I loved clouds with broke off from Cloudsdale."... yes I had to point that out... no I am not a grammar nazi, I just felt I needed to point it out cuz I am TERRIBLE at spelling and grammar and felt good finally finding something :twilightoops: :twilightblush:

Now that my rants are over, I thank you for writing this story right now, I have been surrounding myself with heavy depressing shit lately, and this story lifted me a little. :scootangel:

Now to my review, I really like this one, like a lot, probs just cuz of the timing you released it, but I still like it, you managed to use nor narrative, which is perfect for this type of story, as always I love you're writing and how you describe you're things (I must be getting really repetitive with my comments) and you actually made RD look like she has a good relationship with her parents unlike that rememberence story where they almost seemed abusive. Though RD is one of my least favorite out of the mane six, you still made me want to go into the pony world (even more than I already did) and support her on her journey to fame with the Wonderbolts. :pinkiesad2:

Wow this is a long comment. :rainbowkiss:

So all in all, another great story, yea it might be a little rushed, but it gets the point across, and give you one of those relaxed comfortable feels. So again you are awesome, and keep on writing! :pinkiehappy:

918078 Thank you! :D Will definitely fix that asap :P Really disappointed with myself for releasing the piece in its state. I promise to never do it again.

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