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FamousLastWords


"The emptiness is heavier than you think!" - Bring Me The Horizon

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A collab with Freedom!


It's time for the yearly Hearts and Hooves Day Scavenger Hunt, hosted by Cadance and Twilight. It's a chance for couples to participate as a team in a competitive game against other couples throughout the town. It's very... romantic-ish and cheesy.

Regardless, Flitter would like nothing more to be asked to participate by the love of her life... Poptart! He's dreamy, he's handsome, he's in a band... He's perfect! Of course, it'd be easier if her sister wasn't always getting in the way of her hopes and dreams.

I mean, what would she do if her sister stole away the one pony she truly loves? Or at least likes a lot? Take a dragon to the event instead? Yeah, right...

She's not that desperate.


Cover art by Not Enough Coffee! Check him out!

Special thanks to Muggony for helping out with editing!

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 49 )

Whoever drew the cover is a sexy beast master. Bro has me quaking.

Wow, a Flitter story? She's such a wonderful character, I can't wait to read this!

F+F? Now that sounds pretty gay. I can't believe y'all published this before finals were over. Not very cash money of you.

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Damn that grass is

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Also, other writer here. :)

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Hey, leave his parents out of this. Let Famous enjoy himself enjoy his story, it's all he has.

This story is so awesome I did heroin and I would still rather do this first.

Cute, I was expecting this to be an entry in the May contest for original ships, but it's not. Still cute.

Been a while, but FLW. is doing it again! Poptart and Spike, Spike and Poptart! This time, they got Twin Mares!
Get the popcorn, this is going to be goooood!:pinkiehappy:

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Yeah, its gonna be too long for it or I would. Thanks for reading though!

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I'm glad you like it! We've got about 45k words written already so its definitely a trip.

Been waiting for this!

Good to see you writing again; really enjoying it so far.

Oh, this is going to be good!

P.S. There are a few times around the end of this chapter you use "him" when I think you meant, "her".
P.P.S. Yes, im to lazy to point the lines out, I want to enjoy the story, not proofread it!:moustache:

Swag as always, bruh!

Aww, I was waiting to see Flitter actually proceed to yell at Cloudchaser for the next forty minutes. :rainbowlaugh:

“Yeah, I haven’t had any real drama go down in awhile. This shipwreck of an idea may be fun to see up close.”

Pffft--admittedly, that's pretty much my whole reason for reading this fic in the first place, so Spike and I are of like mind on this. :rainbowlaugh:

Three-fourths of Spike's lines in this chapter are some sort of wisecrack.

I approve. :trixieshiftright:

I knew this premise sounded familiar...pour one out for It's All Downhill From Here.
Looking forward to more. I'm always happy to see the pega-sisters.

Flitter had batted Spike upside the noggin with her wing.

I suspect Spike's going to be getting a whole lot more Gibbs Slaps in his near future... :trixieshiftleft:

“Hey, my stomach resembles that statement!” Spike exclaimed, chuckling. He gave her a grin. “It’s just a kiss though. I don’t see why you’re upset.” He patted her on the head. Besides, was it really that bad of a kiss?”

Think this should be 'resents'

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No, it shouldn't. He's a dragon. Internal fires and all that.

Can see it already, 6 clues, Mane 6? Even with Rainbow and AJ playing, that doesn't mean they won't go to someone who isn't close to Spike I some way.

Great job with Rarity and these whole chapter!:moustache:

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You're pretty close actually. And thanks for the compliment! Rarity is now and always has been one of my fave characters to write. I'm glad you're enjoying the ride so far!

This is good, I was very impressed by your Rarity.

Spike is an absolute legend

EEEEEEEHH so cute. Great chapter.

Wow this was really nice keep it up

Wow,really sweet chapter!

Love where this story is going!:moustache:

The feels are strong with this chapter. :twilightsmile:

Cute chapter. Glad to see that the whole "dating" thing is out in the open now. Good for them!

Cool, that Angel was trying to look out for a bro!:moustache:

Hamilton sounds like he is going to be some kind of dragonslayer later in life, if he can take down spike as a baby imagine his power as an adult.

Rainbow Dash smirked and hoofed her a flier. “Tomorrow! Lucky for you, I got another flier just in case I ran into somepony who was interested!”

This should be 'flyer' unless Rainbow is offering to give Flitter a creature that is capable of flight. (Though, 'flier' might be synonymous with messenger for ponies.)

I really liked the sisterly pettiness here. The everyday humor between characters was spot-on and makes this a really fun setup. You guys are in top form here.

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Now I'm imagining a great big full grown adult dragon like the one from Dragonshy...getting stared down by one little squirrel. :rainbowlaugh:

N i c e.

We're almost there! Kind of...

EEEE this story gives me the good feels

Don't now where they're going in the Everfree but, nice to see we still care about Zecora!

Good job!:moustache:

“I wanna know why you’re actually asking me out for this,” he replied. “I’ve been around enough ponies trying to kiss up to Twilight to get their way to know when the same thing is happening to me. I mean, we just randomly run into each other and you ask me out. Spill the beans, the whole beans and nothing but the beans.”

I think Majin would agree with me that this ought to be 'beanis' instead of what you've got here.

Also, I hadn't expected Spike's conflict to be given so earlier. He certainly comes across as a very mature and grown-up individual here. His communication ability is a huge leap in characterization and he feels like a fun and believable romantic partner.

“Twilight, you’re using your Canterlot voice.”

Err, does she have the ability to do that? It's not a nitpick, I just don't if Twiggles has ever actually used or had the power of caps lock like that.

Meanwhile, it’s like I’m just a background character in a cheap romance fanfiction.

Well, not in this fanfic, missy--in this one, you're a leading character. :raritywink:

“No…” she replied, uncrumpling said paper and holding it out in front of him. “It’s our next clue, ya ding dong.”

Flitter shouldn't be using language like that in a SFW story! Also, I have to say that one of the things I like most about this is that even though they're both using the whole 'fake significant other' ploy it's not done in a way that comes across as hurtful to either party, which is something a lot of mediums do when going with this element in their plot. It's actually helping to build up their chemistry too.

Rarity was an absolute queen this chapter. It's always good to see her being an expert in social cues and helping out her friends. She certainly lived up to her Element here and her romantic expertise was very wholesome and realistic.

Flitter chuckled. “Ye7ah, I’d say we have.”

Excuuuuse me, what's this doing here? And in chapter six, no less!

A very adorable chapter. I'm looking forward to seeing these two have a real date too.

Hoof-holding? And they didn't say 'no hetero'? That's absolutely scandalous.

Eh, that's a beautiful story. What a pity that it was apparently abandoned. Seriously, it's not often that I come across stories with spike (my favorite character) with such unhurried shippings that reveal the identities of both characters. Hell, after all these chapters, I even became interested in Flitter as a character, when I had previously forgotten about her existence and here, a knife in the back, the last chapter was a year ago.... Well, all good things come to an end. Although I also adore "Blonde Moments", also a cool story that made me cry... Thank you
P.S. English is not my native language, there may be mistakes.
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