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You gotta kick at the darkness until it bleeds daylight.

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“It's times like these you learn to love again/It's times like these time and time again.” –Foo Fighters, “Times Like These”

Sequel: "Life In A Northern Town"

Spike begins to spend more and more time helping Rarity and Sweetie Belle around the Carousel Boutique. As time goes on, Sweetie Belle and Spike become close friends, sharing close secrets. But there seems to be a secret that Sweetie Belle thinks Spike should share with Rarity.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 60 )

D'aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa *thunk*

Sorry, I passed out from lack of oxygen.:twilightsmile:

"Then please….just pretend I'm her."

I'd say that Sweetie Belle has seen too many old movies, but then I'd also have to say that those old movies were very wise for their time.

now thats a truly beautiful line in the:pinkiesad2:


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Spike x Sweetie is great and all and I even like the fact that she realizes that Spike will move on in time, but I just know that years down the line when they have an argument or Spike forgets an anniversary or he screws up in other manner, Sweetie Belle will most likely bring up the whole Rarity thing in the form of a guilt trip and or insult.

this chapter was ok. LETS SEE WAT THE NEXT 1 HAS IN STORE!!!!!:derpytongue2::rainbowkiss::moustache:

This is looking good, but you made a mistake towards the end: "She continued to laugh until she was able to catch her breathe" I think you meant breath :twilightsheepish: . Still, keep the stories up :pinkiesmile:

i think spike and sweetiebelle should go out!:twilightsmile::heart::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy::ajsmug::derpytongue2:

poor spike!:fluttercry::applecry::unsuresweetie::facehoof:

The Daw has gone through the roof :yay:

0i knew it, i knew it!!! i love that couple!!:twilightblush::heart::derpyderp2::pinkiesad2::ajsmug:

THATS IT?! AWW COME ON!!!!:fluttercry::applecry:

1117478 Sorry, but that's where I am ending it. I've done what I can with them for now.

Hnnnnnggg! Right in the feels! :fluttercry:
I feel your pain, brother. /)

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

one of my favorite ships and i noticed that this is the first of your stories with a conclusive end

1117638 There are conclusive ends to some of my works, but I just leave it ambiguous to allow the read to think, if that makes sense.

1117249 Pah, she has Sweetie in her name, I doubt she'd do something like that. A delightful read! Short and sweet, like the characters it's about. (HEYOOOOO)
...Sorry.
Anyways, please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

Yay! This story is finally on FIMFiction.net!

I read this story previously on DeviantART. Now THIS is IMO one of the few good examples of a GOOD SweetieSpike fic.

"Oh Spike! I'm sorry, dahling, I didn't know you were here. What do I owe this pleasure?" Rarity was quick to change her voice from annoyed to pleasant":rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
This dahling part sounds as if applejack said this imitating rarity
:ajsmug:whoa there lover boy
:moustache:sorry applejack but I couldn't help but notice how..Hard you're bucking those trees
:applejackconfused:why spike ah never seen this side of you
:moustache:girl I want to see EVERY SIDE AH YOU
:rainbowlaugh:sorry I troll I troll but despite this scene I made I really like this
Let's see 4/5 ,.sweetie spike instant upgrade 10/5

1119259 Well, since you made a reference to AppleSpike, I do have a story of such that will be up soon.

she should of said, Its nothing against you. Your a great dragon its just that your a baby dragon and i dont want to get charged with child molesting.

This reminds me of a picture I saw on Deviantart

1141013 Yes, I was inspired from a dA image for that scene.

1141041 It was quite beautiful. Also, while that is it for this, I leave it open for possible continuation (more than likely not going to happen, but still)

1141065
It'd be nice. Though it was short it was very well-written

1141077 I'm more one to write short, fun stories, not epics.

1141081
I'm the opposite, mostly.
I try to get my storied to be a minimum of 20 thousand words.
The big one I have in the works might even border on 200K:pinkiegasp:

1141091 I am impressed, but to me, I enjoy doing fics that are short since they are not my characters. I love them and writing for them, but it's not my place to change them altogether.

1141106
A good way of putting it.:moustache:
Well I should get going, the story won't write itself.:applecry:
But what if it could?:pinkiegasp:Like some kind of thought-to-text machine?cdn.broni.es/images/emotes/mlp-tplotting.png
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Comment posted by stephano deleted May 2nd, 2014
Comment posted by stephano deleted May 2nd, 2014

Spike.

Hit on Rarity, like a boss
Get rejected, like a boss

Date Rarity's sister, like a boss

nuff said:moustache:

A good story and an interesting place to end it :pinkiehappy:
Kinda leaves it up for a sequel, but at the same time I like the fact that it's like this... Spike/Belle is a cute couple, really, and one of my fave ships.
Job well done, dude. :scootangel:

Please say that you will eventually continue with this story. I was a SpikexRarity but ever since i started reading stories with SpikexSweetie I switched sides. At least make 2 more chappters when they are older and no one know they are dating until pinkie sees sweetie kiss spike, and when Pinkie sees something no one knows about she just cant keep her cake hole shut.

The dialogue feels forced, and the ending comes right out of left field. Can't say I like it.

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Everything was perfect...until the nation of abrupt endings attacked.
Thats it? No, really. That is it?!:twilightoops::unsuresweetie::applejackconfused:

You can't totally blame yourself. I mean, it's not like you can just get over Rarity right away,"

Except apparently he can.

A cute little story, Sweetie and Spike are adorable together. It could definitely been longer though, the whole thing was somewhat rushed. Particularly the ending... as I already pointed out

...

They wouldn't admit it, but Spike and Sweetie Belle were becoming good friends.

*gasp*
THE HORROR! THEY ARE BECOMING FRIENDS! :raritydespair::raritycry:
...
Sorry for that, my mind was spewing strange thoughts again...
oh and it was a nice first chapter:pinkiehappy:

Well...it's short. Especially Spike's 'comearound' seems a bit to hasty. Other than that - it's a nice, sweet story :yay:

Personally, I don't think the confession should've happened at all. Might've made the story longer if we saw more internal turmoil from Sweetie Belle having a crush on Spike. The end itself was kinda...... end-ish. "And they lived happily ever after" :U

Good start though..

As an old wise man once said..... HNNNNNNG!

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