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Closer-To-The-Sun


You gotta kick at the darkness until it bleeds daylight.

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“You're my blue sky, you're my sunny day/Lord, you know it makes me high when you turn your love my way/Turn your love my way, yeah.” –The Allman Brothers Band, “Blue Sky”

Applejack has lately been feeling crestfallen and out of it. But when Spike stops by and offers to help her with her chores, she feels puzzled of what is happening. What exactly is going on?

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 34 )

Cute :pinkiesmile:
But in the begining, you wrote "On her face, Applejack's face looked worried". You might wanna fix that :twilightsheepish:

Woo-hoo another closertothesun story I'm there

This needs to be longer, but overall not bad.

:moustache: Not enough of this pairing.

Short but not bad. Kinda wish you'd expand the story a bit more though.:twilightsmile:

AL

too short but wooooooow very very sweet :DDD :twilightsmile:

...your endings all seem a bit rushed. but I'm interested how this story will go on :twilightsmile:

...same old problems: it's too short and some of the feelings could be a bit more fleshed out.
It doesn't feel rushed though and both characters are sufficently spot-on.
Oh and it was damn cute too :ajsmug:

1821703 Yeah, apparently I have a problem of writings too cute. xD

Yeah, I have been reading your comments (multi-tasking, so I apologize), and I do admit that I'm one for having the problem of rushing. I'm not one for really dragging things out (kinda how I write, I guess). But thanks for your words. I am trying to get better with my writing.

1821728 first of all - :yay:
I have no problem with not getting answers - I'm simply writing opinions down, more especially my own opinion. I'm honored if I get replies to that but that is not a must-have.
Your work is really great - it has its flaws (as I've stated before) but it really captures the picture of what you are trying to convey. And I'm kind of able to understand your words - if you have an idea, you NEED to write it down or it's gone. There's nothing wrong with that, nothing at all. :twilightsmile:

Short, sweet, to the point. Love it! Reminds me of support conversations in Fire Emblem.

Woahhh....
So this kind of fic is possible too.
I like it!
Short, yet incredibly sweet and not unsatisfying at all.
It kind of reminds me of this:

2641755 A very fitting choice of a song. Forgot how much I love the Azumanga Daioh sountrack, so light, sweet, and beautiful.

Sir, you had my curiosity, but now you have my attention.

this story, I am intrigued will continue on:pinkiehappy:

me too!
also I smell love in the air and it smells like apple pie el a mode

babies + stash of sugar= RUN EVERYPONY! RRRRUUUNNNNN!!!!!!!:twilightoops::raritycry:

short but as potent as snake venom
:heart:ed it

:pinkiecrazy:Ooooooooooooooooooh

Short and sweet, like a vanilla wafer...I applaud you, good sir/ma'am.

This was so short, but yet perfectly done. It shows how easily a hole in somepony can be filled by something simple as someone helping you out or simply chatting with you. An awesome AppleSpike story worth remembering and one that will be added to the best stories I've read this year. Be glad; I know I am.:moustache::heart::ajsmug:

10 out of 10 for Romance
10 out of 10 for Slice of Life
9 out of 10 for grammar
10 out of 10 for overall story.
A like, fav, and a moustace your way!:moustache:

5476115

one that will be added to the best stories I've read this year

Wait....but this year just started....


Haha, anyway, thanks so much for reading it. And I'm glad you liked it!

5476205
Well your story is the only one in the folder, so grats! :twilightsmile:

5479108

Glad you enjoyed reading it, and hope you take the time to check some of my other stories out.

3976445 "BREAKING NEWS! Newest natural disaster are babies with sugar! To survive this, you just lock yourself in your house! Good luck!"

8/10 It was short but, I wished it was a bit longer. But still, loved it

Okay when I got to the confession part you had me a little worried. I was like: "You don't just jump into it like that. Where is the build up? The suspense?" But then I kept reading and it was actually not that big of a deal. You seem to make it work out just fine in the end. This was a great read.

All my advice is to try and maybe do a little more build up to the big moment of confession next time. That's all. I actually want a sequel now.

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