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Closer-To-The-Sun


You gotta kick at the darkness until it bleeds daylight.

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“Are you locked up in a world that's been planned out for you?/Are you feeling like a social tool without a use?/Scream at me until my ears bleed/I'm taking heed in just for you.” –Green Day, “She”

A few years down the line, Scootaloo is still earthbound. While still puttering her scooter around, she has noticed her friends have changed their focus away from their cutie marks. This bothers the orange pegasus and causes her to look for a new friend. And she finds one in a purple dragon with newly grown wings.

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Maybe a bit short, the awesomeness makes up for it. Good job! :moustache:

Nice short story.
No complaints not one!:twilightsmile:

This is looking like a good story, but you've got a couple of grammar errors. "She because nervous" is the standout, but there're a few others about.
I liked the bit at the end with Scootaloo's reaction to the universe dropping hints. And ScootxSpike (ScootaSpike? Spikyloo?) in general.
:moustache::scootangel:

Not a bad story. Kinda lacked some back story on Spike's feelings and ended to sudden for my taste, but in all, awsome story. First Spike x Scootaloo fic I've read and I enjoyed it. :moustache::scootangel:

Always love a good Spikaloo, great job!

So... what's the cutie marK?! :applejackconfused:

1139399 It's left ambiguous for a reason.

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Lemme guess. Sequel coming soon? Or are we never gonna find out? OR BOTH?! :pinkiecrazy:

1139742 No sequel. I've already stated that in my blog entry, no sequels are planned.

find the word gay straightstraightstraightstraightjustinbieberstrightstraightstraight

so full of da'WWWWWWWWWWWW

Um, Scootaloo is not Rainbow Dash's little sister. I'm going to read the rest of the chapter and edit this post with a more complete response, but that's my first impression.

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So then, the reason is... what, exactly? Without there being a clear reason to leave it ambiguous, it looks to the reader like you left it ambiguous because you couldn't think of a good cutie mark. It does seem very odd that her cutie mark doesn't involve her scooter, since it wasn't around when it appeared.

1150551 Please be aware I took liberties with this story.

"Yes….you're mine…." sounds more like a command than it is a statement.
I also didnt expect that RD:rainbowdetermined2: would be SL:scootangel: sister.

1205595 Well, I took liberties with this story. And for the quote, I thought it fitting for tsundere Scootaloo.

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The thing at the end isn't a word.

:facehoof:
Sometimes ponies have just the worst kind of luck. Or is it the best kind?
Anyway awesome story so far! I hope it will continue being that nice. It shows a pairing that isn't seen that often especially considering Spike was the one to (nearly) ask her out.

I guess Scootaloo *puts on glasses* chickened ou- *reads on*
God damnit :rainbowlaugh:

Nice how you write the pairing. I also like the touch of reality you bring into this. The pony who stays true to herself gets a boyfriend, the overly girly turning friends for that purpose don't get one.
I've seen some relationships start and break apart because of this nonsense so I REALLY can't like stories in which ponies (or dragons or any other creature) changes his- or herself just to make the other one fall in love with him/her.

Ohh Spike wants to Scootaloo to ride him. How kinky :moustache: :scootangel:
But it just goes on being adorable. Good, continue please :raritystarry:

1141529 hey stephano how is pewdiepie going:derpyderp2:

Good read and all but I gotta ask:Why Combat Baby ?:rainbowhuh:

2684266 She's fighting the entire way. Whether it be against her own feelings, against Spike confessing, or even her lack of cutie mark.

2684961 Oh~ :rainbowderp: With that title,the story could be misleading.:twilightblush:

2687076 Well, it's a musical reference as well. The title comes from the song of the same name from Metric, which fitted the entire fic in my opinion.

2689570 Oh,my apologies,I'm afraid I'm not knowledgeable in the music department :derpytongue2:. Still,thanks for your patience with me:twilightsmile:

2691108 Not a problem, and thank you for reading!

OH HELL YES:flutterrage: That just made my night:pinkiesmile: I thank you for such a good read:pinkiehappy:

3562717 Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for reading.

That was the most adorable story I've read in quite some time:raritycry: Fantastic writing. I know I haven't read too many ships of this particular 'flavor' yet, but this is the best :scootangel: + :moustache: = :heart: I've read yet:twilightsmile:

3884844 I'm really happy you enjoyed it! And thank you so very much for reading it as well!

*sniff* that was a beautiful and well delivered story!
congrats mate!

And a different matter, I was lack of a better term, kicked out of Cloudsdale until I can fly on my own because I've gotten to the point where no pony can fly me up to the city without being looked down upon by others. I'm thankful my sister was able to fly me up there for this long now, but I know Dash has a reputation to keep up so now I'm living with Fluttershy. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy living there with her, but I would like to go back home

The element of loyalty ladies and gentlemen!

it was nice but it was over too quickly

I found a typo,

While they didn't crazy and bizarre activities in hopes of gaining their marks, they still stuck by each other and remained close friends.

You forgot to put "do" in between "didn't" and "crazy".

Sounds like the three of them are growing up. Shame they still don't have their cutie marks despite having slowed down on the crusading. Nice to hear Spike has grown his wings in, sounds like he's still trying to get the hang of it.

Technically Rainbow isn't really Scootaloo's sister, but I suppose she is like a surrogate one.

I wonder if someone was watching them and did that cloud trick on purpose. Spike's little confession seemed a bit rushed, but I suppose I've got no experience with that kind of thing, so what do I know?

I don't really think Applejack would call anypony "dear".

Funny how the one who was trying to avoid getting into a relationship got into it first.

Not a bad story, I liked it but I do think 1 or 2 more chapters or even a flow up one shot would bring it full circle. But all in all I liked it

Well shit...that's one way to make an entrance, glad to know you're keeping Scoots true to herself.

Very in character, really great, you done a good job.

As a tomfilly, Scoots and Dash knows what it's like to not allow feelings and junk to really affect them, at least in public but they are still females so it's understandable why she is worried.

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