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Not bad. Because it's good.
But the master of clop is, and always will be, Mr. Crowley the mushroom hating griffon.

This is very well-done. Too bad it seems to be a one-shot.

Perhaps more hijinks? Maybe some... gender-bending magic?

And more Vindicated Depravity while we're at it?

is it necessary to have it password protected, like whats the point? just curious and all. not hatin, just curious?:trixieshiftleft:

Eh, this seems kind of...rushed, or forced, I can't quite put my finger on it.

>Luna lifted a hoof to toy with the mares rainbow-coloured mane
There is no apostrophe here! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png

>Luna drew back with a sly grin, watching the rainbow mare
There is no period after this sentence

>she gasped and stiffened, entire form quivering
I think you missed a word here

998922 It wasn't approved yet. That's why there was a password.

An awkward silence stretched between them, which was broken by Rainbow Dash blurting,"I’m don’t like mares!”

Found something. :O

Aaaaand it's approved :pinkiehappy:


Oh pinkie sense, just getting weirder and weirder

“Well... I guess it could work. Did you have anyone in mind?”

"Did you have anyone in mind?”

"anyone in mind?”



Other than that, awesome story :)

that was nice.

:moustache::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh:Rainbow's still not as crummy a liar as Applejack. AJ's skill at lying sucks the wet mango.

:rainbowlaugh: Crack ships are AWESOME! :raritystarry: Not what I was expecting in a story, to be honest, still it was good. :rainbowwild:

Editing as I go along.

Damn it AP.

What's good
-Straight RD (it could only last for so long I suppose :'(...)
-I can already say the sex is going to be good, albeit unbelievable 'cause below, andddddddddd it was.
-Luna teasing RD
-RD being awkward about the kiss.
-LOL first you're trying to make the audience of Vindicated Deprivation have weird feels, now you're making the characters in your fics have weird feels.

What's bad
-This is going to have RD have sex with Luna...and even if she is drunk, that's still horribly unbelievable.
-Luna should be more awkward.

1017363 Never read Dark Apprentice. I've actually read very little fanfiction on this site. Go figure.

Thank everything that exists ever.


"Luna stepped closer to Rainbow Dash, looking her up and down for a moment, and then smiling mischievously. “I thought I might seduce you.”

“W-what?!” Rainbow Dash asked, backing away, her expression alarmed."

I'm watching you...

I like questioning-her-sexuality-Dash. I can never seem to find fanfics as specific as that.

998902 Yes. The master of clop is always Crowley

o.o is there gana be another chapter where rainbow gets entertained :twilightblush:

*sees title*


this was ok but you could have gone in to more detail and add more emots.:scootangel:

This was good. I love to see Dash and Luna in some romantic interactions. I would love to see a continuation of this story at some time. I look forward to reading more from you in the future. Keep up the great writing!

Okay. You are my favourite author on fimfiction. This is my favourite pairing ever. This is now my favourite story. :heart: I hope you turn this into a full length story! :twilightsmile:

Very cute. I wouldn't say 'no' to a continuation.

I’m don’t like mares!

this doesn't read well.

Great story, and such a spectacular ship.

That. Was. Awesome! Loved the ending with the pinkie sense.

6746088 I have that one saved.

6746088 I know that pic from a story on here!
I added it I didn't read it yet!

7949211 I don't even remember where I found it tbh...

7956041 it's fine. I just have the story saved.

Sensitive analysis of Rainbow as she comes to terms with her sexuality.

"Bye, Luna!" Gets me every time.

Luna shook her head gently. “No, they are back at my castle. I ordered them to remain behind, they were... Unhappy.”

Well no offence but if something can harm you, what are they going to do about it?

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