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At first, Chrysalis loathed him; the dumb-as-a-brick woodspony who goes by the name of Evergreen. But through circumstance, he is her only savior. And slowly, she comes to love the simple pony and his way of life. But her life as a changeling keeps holding her back. Will there be a happily ever after for them? Or are they doomed for failure?

*Comments contain massive spoilers!*

Check out the Sequel, Antecedent! http://www.fimfiction.net/story/25117/Antecedent

Cover art by Ink-Flow!

Edited version helped along by Fernin and Burraku_Pansa.

Chapters (16)
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Comments ( 1169 )

It's almost as if I've seen this picture somewhere... But I can't put my hoof on it.

484001 You know, that exactly what I thought... :twilightsheepish:
What a strange coinicedence...

Wow...This is looking pretty good so far. Can't wait to see what happens!

484001
484010

Really though, What are the odds of them posting within the same ten minutes :twilightoops:

484001
I know right?
It just seems so damned familiar.
The answer is right on the tip of my tongue too, but just out of reach.

HOLD ON. you guys are scaring me. I just had the same sense of Déjà vu with this picture:raritycry:

Good start. I have one note for you though:

> And if he died of hyperthermia, then she would die along with him.
That should be hypothermia considering the circumstances.

I Trust this would be a good story.

I like it, thumbs up and fave, keep up the good work!

484087

AHAHAHA.

I see what you did there.

484156

No, thank YOU. I laughed out loud when I read that. I just got back from watching The Lorax and I'm super bored, so that was great. I actually don't know whether to change my cover or not :applejackunsure: suggestions?

484171 keep it, nice, short and straight to the point

484177

Alright. I just don't want to get into a pissing contest later about who chose the damn picture.

484182 hey, it's there for you to use. People have same taste, doesn't matter but what does is what's inside the fic :ajsmug:

484188 No problema, let me read yours now, has a good amount of thumbs, I wonder if it can compete with those two on top :rainbowlaugh: Btw, seen you everywhere commenting :derpyderp2:

Interesting we will see where this goes, tracking.

This picture was posted in the story trust and now this in the same ten minutes strange

484683 I've got 800 words of chapter 2 down. Now STFU and let me write.:twilightsheepish:

I like it! The characterisations are interesting and believable. This is the best story featuring Chrysalis I've seen yet. Favourited for sure; I'm interested to see where this is going.

make the weakened Queen of the Changelings treat you with respect

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Amazing, good work my friend, very well done :moustache:

That's right Chrys, swallow your pride.
I'm liking this.

NEEEEEEDS MOOOORE:flutterrage: loving this fic

I like. moar please

485685 on chapter three ATM :3 only 800 words so far though.

485827 Don't sacrifice quality for quantity, and make sure you're happy with it. Then your readers will be happy. :pinkiehappy:

Seriously though, you have a good idea rolling here, so keep chugging along. I love the interaction between Chrysalis and Evergreen.

485887 That's WHY I'm writing it so much. My track record for stories was usually once a month. But this pair amuses me. I love the kind of aggressive affection shown between couples like, say, Jordan and Dr Cox in Scrubs. And that is the kind of union that these two are building towards, without giving too much of the coming storyline away.

Plus, what I've got planned for their interactions is...fun. I like making Chrysalis's personality change in subtle little ways that combine towards a massive overhaul :D it's fun to explore as a writer.

485904 So much yes. Have fun spelunking. :pinkiehappy:

not bad this one is better then the other people spamming the same character story :moustache:

What chemistry paper that's due tomorrow? There's ponies to read. Lol, I like.

The heck just happened with Evergreen there?

I am liking this.

Down to business:
The story has merit, I can see the general idea behind the story taking shape. First story like it here, which is good. Grammar and spelling are both within acceptable bounds. And the character's themselve seem rather believable. Althogh the impression i got from chrysalis is that she was not nearly as stuck up as you portray her here. Everfree is, of course, a "blank slate" so to speak.

Keep at it sir, i do like what you have so far.

I don't like giving "star" ratings for stories, nor do i thumbs up/down a story. I beilive your story has merit, and you should continue writing on it until such a time comes that you feel you should move on.

Good work sir,
The Twilight Spark

Chrysalis is gonna kill Evergreen....

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FOR THE LOVE OF GOD! YOUR MAKING A MISTAKE! :raritydespair:

486609

If she does it would make a great plot twist, and shows that she cannot be redeemed.
I demand more......

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both outcomes are awesome imho

FIRST!!
and this is going to be a ship, no?

487443 Did the 'romance' tag give it away?

487450 not all tagged are ships

487454 I...thought it needed to be shipping for the romance tag to even be applicable? :derpyderp2:

487455 maybe you can make evergreen a changeling?

I really like their chemistry in the bit where she makes him get back in the bath. It made me chuckle, yessir it did. :ajsmug:

Hmm... nice pacing on this. Interested to see if you carry it through to a happy ending... Or a sad one. :trollestia:

487542 I think the proper ending will be happy, but the epilogue will be sad. :derpytongue2:

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