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After Chrysalis failed to conquer Equestria, she was shamefully stripped of her title of "Queen of the Changelings".
Their people now leaderless, the Changeling race now finds itself in a unique situation. In the struggle for power, one Changeling seizes the attention of his people. Can he overcome his nature, and the nature of his people, to lead them into a better future?
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Alright, changeling fic is a go. You'll have to forgive the miniature biology entry somewhere in the center of this chapter, but I couldn't resist writing down my thoughts on how changelings tick. Hopefully it's not too long-winded or distracting, and some of you might even find it interesting.
Aside from that little excerpt, this thing is, as per usual, its own beast. Looking forward to writing this fic all the way through; I'll be able to pull some really fun shenanigans with the changelings at my disposal.
Hope you all enjoy the read!
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>Has to do with Changelings
>Romance
Huh?
Added to read later. Swear i'll get around to it, just not at the moment.
...Me gusta. Tracked and faved and all that jazz.
Looks very promising! May even be EQD-worthy once more chapters are up!
Exclamation mark!
EDIT: Oh, wait, this is by you, Razorbeam? yep, definitly EQD. Probably gets featured in future.
HOLY CRAP!!! THIS WAS AWESOME.
In the 2-3 weeks following the season finale, this is the most unique and greatest version of the changeling hierarchy and government. They are surprisingly democratic and operate through a kind of parliament. Plus they have free will and aren't mindless creatures, which makes sense because in the finale one of the changelings fighting Pinkie Pie did humor her and gave into her requests. There are towns and jobs, markets and family based structures. I like that Spike feels a certain kinship with the changeling race as dragons tend to exhibit a lot of the same negative traits. This is just a neat story and great concept, the idea that their race can be saved through better public relations and peace.
Also when you mentioned that Chrysalis now has the the amount of magic as a baby unicorn, I kinda want see her engaged in a magical duel with Dinky and Dinky opens up a can of whup-ass.
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Peace Out.
Interesting, let's see how this goes
Romance.
Knowing you, this will be interesting.
I like this favorited
A pure minds descent into brain rotting senility? oh please i beg
that...was the best fic i have read in a LOOOONG time
the personification (ponification?) and personalities of the characters are absolutely stunning.
can't wait for more!!
Sounds already good to me! Tracking!
This is more than deserving of a fave!
Cheeeeeeers!!!!!
This seems very interesting. A lot of promise.
Keep it up!
Razorbeam! Didn't you say you were going to kill me?! And yet, here I am, reading yet another one of your fantastic stories. Either you lied, or you realized the value of keeping your fans alive.
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Both!
Glad you enjoy it so far! The best part is nothing has really happened yet, so there's much to do.
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Eh, I don't usually send my works to EQD. It's better just to keep things here at home on FiMFic.
Featured maybe, but we'll see. Thanks for reading!
*finally sees new story* ooh, what's this? *reads chap 1*
there is only one thing to do. *click click* there we go.
Razorbeam, have I ever told you that I love you and your writing? Well, now you know.
I was cautious about this at first, after the barrage of Chrysalis fics the week after the Royal Wedding aired. Though when I saw it was you that wrote it, I put that aside cautiousness aside, and I'm glad I did. Not very often I see a story related to politics in any way. It'll be a nice change.
Definitely thumbing this up and faving it. Can't wait for the next chapter, and the next one, and the next one. Though I would like to know where this idea came from. Was it a spur of the moment thing? Or did you plan this out for while?
Something new from you! And it's good! And it's not tagged sad! YAY!
I don't want to feel sad...
On topic, this is a very interesting premise you have here... I'm curious where you will take this. And I see that romance tag and it fills my head with ideas... hmm. In any case, you have a follower here!
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To be honest, all my ideas are spur of the moment. I have them and write them down. Heart of a Dragon started as one sentence on the back of a receipt from my lunch at work.
Glad you're enjoying it so far!
You have my full and undivided attention.
Very interesting take on the Changelings, I especially love the bit of intrigue with the Council.
I wonder if Twilight and Aurus will meet up soon?
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I applaud your depiction of the changelings, I've always really enjoyed seeing the bad guys portrayed in a good light.
Hah, this story so far is basically how my head canon for changelings work, they can feed on lesser forms of positive emotion, just love is strongest/most attractive(ha, get it?). Chrysalis was just going about it the wrong way the whole time, I still think she's awesome as far as show canon goes though.
You'd think Changelings would be omnivores at the very least considering the fangs their carrying around.
Ah, nice to see you working on another fic. I'm sure it will turn out brilliant like the other one did. It already has an interesting enough premise, and I enjoyed your speculations into Changeling society and biology. Although... wouldn't having holes in their legs technically be more surface area to cover up? That is, from a technical standpoint, because there is all the area exposed on the inside of the hole itself. It certainly is less mass though. I don't know, just nitpicking I guess, and it doesn't really matter for the story. Either way, looking forward to what we have in store next!
My thought process when I saw this. Oh dear another changeling picture, another mediocre/bad fanfic. Might as well click on it and see if it is. Reads premise, hmm actually doesn't sound to bad and it seems unique, who can I thank for this opportunity. Razorbeam you amazing bastard I just might have to love and tolerate the !@#% outta you.
Love comes in many forms; love of family, love of a role model, love of your country, love for a friend, love for your lover. I applaud your show of this in how changelings feel the power of it from the people around them. It gives so much more meaning to the leader of the changelings as well, you gain your power to lead by how well you are received. Can't wait to see more about this and I think that alone will make this an awesome read.
The biology entry was perfect. It was long but I think it explained a lot and will be a constant reference with everything else happening. You nailed it so don't feel like it was unnecessary in any way.
The character names are also very well done, they have a kinda of insect sound and feel to them. While I never thought of them as an insect I think it fits very well. I can't imagine how hard it was considering you probably had to make them all up.
Btw this Korrik guy, a man who knows how politics should work and the dangers of abuse and corruption within. Love him already. Oddly enough I also enjoy Gerd, probably just because of the banter between the two but I like his presence anyways. He gives a good contrast to the opposite ideals and still presents them in a appealing manner.
My only questions right now are as follows. The way they made it sound, former Queen Chrysalis was a regular changeling and wasn't that different from the norm aside from her leadership skills and such. So did the power from the citizens love for her change her physical appearance to reflect her growing power? Was she always as she was shown in the TV show? Or is there a initiation of sorts for a new leader? Will Aurus grow in a similar fashion? How long till the next update? OMG NEED MORE.
EDIT: After seeing the above post, that actually crossed my mind while reading. Adding holes into the legs would increase overall surface area, however this could be explained still as its less surface area for the illusion to COVER as those legs would appear solid. It did not state this however and should probably be added for clarity.
That's all for now. Everestt out, I'll be lurking in the shadows until next time.
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Night owl much?
I knew the changeling fiction department was a deep pit to jump into, but as long as I don't sell myself short in writing one like many others have, I should be fine, right?
The fact that love is so dynamic and not just one-way is kind of the main theme of this. It's a sort of symbiosis when love is shared between changelings. It also makes their political system that much more involved; checks and balances in a system where 'ultimate power' isn't really possible is pointless. In the changeling community however, someone with enough love could be unstoppable. It makes a wicked amount of sense in my opinion to think that something like the council might be needed. More to guard the people from the possibility of tyranny, as I said, than to guide them.
Glad you enjoyed the biology bit. I wasn't sure if it was worth including, but I pulled a classic 'eh, what the hell' and wrote it anyways. I hope a few other people can get some gears turning over it too.
The characters are always the hard bit when writing OC. A lot of folks have it easy with this piggyback-fiction stuff they're doing, but I don't like to conform to that. That's not how true fictional works are meant to be written, in my opinion, though there's certainly nothing wrong with utilizing characters you and your audience appreciate. Suffice it to say, I find more purpose and enjoyment when the characters are mine, even if they are not well-liked or as adored as the show base.
As for your questions... I hate to be that guy, but you will just have to wait and see. I am writing this completely by scratch: I have no chapter outlines, little more than a basic 'point A -> point z' plot. I couldn't answer them if I wanted to, lol. Maybe that makes me a weak author, but it's more fun if I write as I go, for everyone involved. Sorry to anyone if finding out that I just make it up as I go is a put-off.
I would be careful which shadows you lurk in, as sometimes I lurk in them also. And I'm not always this nice.
Thanks for the read, my friend! Glad to see your name again in my comments; I know my work is meaningful when it draws people like you back. Here's hoping I don't let you down.
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Night owl? Perhaps. However I notice that your here too, yes?
If your previous work is any indication of what you can do. Your just the man to send into that pit and try to pull something worthwhile out of it. I always enjoy a good OC over anything else, reading about what you know in a different light is fine, reading about what you already know in the presence of something new...well that's just fantastic. The problem is that a GOOD OC is quite hard to come by. A great one even more so. The fact that you are writing so many in a single fic when I know that you can pull it off, well it might just make me have to take a cold shower.
No harm on the questions, being in the dark will just make me want to read it more. As long as it's addressed somewhere at sometime I can wait. I find that writing as I go along makes for the best ideas. I'm sure it's different per person but I'm definitely in the same boat as you when it comes to that.
We shall see how this turns out in time, I've got high hopes and higher expectations, but only because I know you can do it.
Now it's back to the shadows to lay some traps....just in case.
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Dude, I don't even sleep. Ironman of the internet, right here.
Hmm, truly the most interesting start I have read for a while. Definitely tracked.
could have sworn i faved this a bit ago, o well did it now.
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Sometime tomorrow night, if I have my way. Ask any of my readers from HoaD. I always have my way.
This is certainly looking good so far. Can't wait for more.
Whew, that was fun! Sorry it's such a late-nighter, but hell, I couldn't wait to post it, so I threw it up as soon as it was ready. As always, let me know if you find any errors, and thank you all for reading! I hope this second installment has you all as excited as I am!
Who needs sleep? And I'm very glad you decided to post it now, I had nothing to do!
Didn't notice any errors on my read through but in all fairness I was to entranced reading it to take notice if there was any minor ones.
The physical change to the King/Queen went about how I expected it too although you added more then I imagined to it which made it all the better. A brilliant idea by Aurus to show the power he's being given. A lot of philosophical and moral stuff in this chapter, I shudder at the thought of trying to express it in words but you did it in great meaningful speeches, well done.
I can't think of much else to say, story is amazing so far. However I'm sure I'll have plenty to say when he goes on a diplomacy mission. You've got me giddy for Celestia/Shining/Twilight/Cadence reactions to his appearance and proposal of peace.
amazing great story.
excess of energy => reciprocation?
Definitely a king I could get behind. NIce chapter, didn't notice any errors, excited for more.
589650 Same here...I would say more, but my brain doesn't want to function this late at night.
LOVE IT
nice.
LONG LIVE THE KING!!
Alright, start the fav-train. I don't normally favorite a story this early, but I've got a soft spot for changelings and, well, Heart of a Dragon was very impressive.
I like the trade-off on the plot speed versus details given. You have introduced two major characters, fleshed them out reasonably, and crowned one in what, 11,396 words? While giving some biology and social exposition on changelings and without feeling rushed? (Oh, one vote for exposition by the way.) Sure, we don't really have a good idea of what it would be like to be an ordinary changeling, but that's not the focus. I love the pace so far, just enough detail without bogging things down. Though I do want to savor things when Aurus finally gets to meet some ponies...
I am somewhat concerned about the size and scope of changeling society, though. I guess my own imaginings might be intruding here, but it seems a bit odd that changelings would have a large, well established society but be almost completely unknown to Equestrians. Do they engage in any trade at all? How close are they geographically? Also, is there a special benefit to feeding from ponies rather than other changelings (and can unknowingly loving a changeling harm a pony)? They seem a bit too... self sufficient for parasites (although that isn't how you're portraying them). Or creatures adapted to mimic so perfectly. And I know you'll probably say "answers will come in time" or some such, but I'm a curious bastard who overuses parentheses.
However, despite the fact that I think changeling society and biological adaptations might be slightly out of sync, I really like what you're doing with what you've set up. And, really, a parasitic society incapable of supporting itself on its own love is a bit... depressing... so it's probably for the best in this story. Also, THANK YOU for avoiding any sort of stupid hive mind or shared consciousness with the changelings. 'Tis a pet peeve of mine.
I do believe that at the conclusion of any comment made during the beginning of a new promising story by one in appreciation of said story requires the utterance of "moar," which I humbly request of your Authorship.
For some reason, I'm hoping Chrysalis will make an appearance.
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Oh, there will be moar.
I'm glad you find their self-sufficiency intriguing. You're right, of course; all of your questions are likely to be answered in later chapters. I hate to let you down on that, but you're speculating on a pretty broad range of changeling-based questions that won't come into focus until he interacts with some ponies.
Which, by the way, will result in a pacing change. Astute observation; I wanted to get through the changeling hierarchy quickly so as not to bore people, while still giving enough background about both Aurus and his people, such that his coronation makes sense. Things will slow down once there aren't as many time skips or OC's involved. Just trying to keep things interesting, and let's be honest, some of the philosophy and diplomacy is dry as dirt sometimes. I try to make it fun.
Changeling fics sure do get a lot of attention on this site. I don't mind since changelings are pretty cool but is this the new way to get popular. Want views and ratings? Just write something about changelings. Or people are just writing these for pure enjoyment, either way.
Can´t wait for the next Part!
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I'm writing it because I had this idea and figured it would be fun. I've had a grand time of it so far. Personally I don't write for fame; this story isn't featured now, nor do I suspect it ever will be, and that's just fine by me.
The trend is still that if you want to be a famous brony fiction writer, you either carve yourself a niche at the bottom of the shipping pit, or you write clop-fiction. I try to expand my writing into various corners and genres, so some of my work is popular, and some isn't. That's just how it works. I'm doing my best to explore new possibilites, things that haven't been done yet, because that's how I get my kicks.
589513>>589650 I agree with Everestt on this. Who needs sleep.
Just finished this chapter, looked at the clock, and only commented "what do you know. 5:30 AM... Worth it.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rainbow_Dash_lolface.png "
You're idea and presentation are great my friend! If this isn't already a 6 star on Equestria Daily, I want to know how on God's green Earth is that possible.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Fluttershy.png
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I don't think the folks at EQD are too overly fond of me. That's how, lol. Still, thank you very kindly for reading!