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On the one year anniversary of Luna's banishment, Celestia has an honest and open talk with her sister about what went wrong, how it happened, and what she's going to do to fix it.
And hopefully Luna can hear, because Celestia's question will reveal just how much she loves her sister.
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Really well written, which is quite a surprise for a subject such as Luna’s Banishment. Usually, the way Celestia's inner dialogue is written out, some would struggle to really capture the internal conflict. They would give it no time to develope, but that's not the case here. It's pace is good, the narrative is good, so, the story is good. Great job!
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Thanks! I was trying to convey the sisterly love that Celestia has for Luna, so I'm glad it came across. Gave me warm fuzzy feelings to see you enjoyed it!
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It’s going to be an underated story, saddly. I think it deserves a little bit more attention.
Great, cute story. My only problem is that since they're the Elements of Harmony, why would they kill? Usually, when I think of harmony, I don't think of murdering.
Anyways, great story nevertheless, and a nice look at what Celestia did in the little while after Luna was banished.
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If I may ask, what part gives you the impression the elements ended somepony?
Kill? Yikes! I hope that's not the impression I'm sending out!
Glad you liked the story all the same!
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They, "Obliterated," and "Destroyed," "Many of our enemies."
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Ah ha! I'm one of those types that can't find my sunglasses when they're on top of my head sometimes.
I would offer one example of another obliteration: King Sombra. If he can be incinerated by the combined power of love from the Crystal Empire, then the Elements could work in similar fashion against similar foes. (Of course, this argument only works if you declare the t.v. show to be cannon and ignore the comics, which is what I'm doing.
Failing that, then it is a dark thought to contemplate. The only thing that I could really offer in that case is the plot for How To Train Your Dragon 2 SPOILER ALERT! - despite the best efforts Hiccup put toward peace negotiations, war came anyway. I also would use the quote from Stoic: "Some minds can not be changed." Such would be the case here as well. Celestia uses diplomacy as much as she can, but there are times when the Elements have been used to defeat a foe. They are the Elements of Harmony, but Harmony can have a high cost at times.
(Or perhaps I'll just slap a dark tag on this whole ungangly mess.
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I'm glad you liked it!
I honestly don't know if I'll use this in No Nose, I actually hadn't even thought about it. It would be easy enough to flashback, I suppose.
I shall take your idea under advisement.
I just noticed you had other stories.
Anyway... this was good. Other people have done dramatic "talks" before, but this one was a bit unique.
(I can also recognize the writing style of someone who just got a burst of inspiration and wrote practically all of it in one go.
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Yeah. The little flash of an idea that came to me on this one needed some refinement. This is an ok little thing, but not much else. Maybe one day I'll rewrite it.
If I ever get done with the Bean words.
(Oh, and fair warning on my other story, The Black Sheep. It's not pretty. My first submission to this site and all that.)
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Yep. Totally understand that. My first submissions I ended up deleting, they were so bad, and the only early one on my page (which I still think is not-so-good) people like for some reason, so I let it stay.
But if I have anything to offer from my experience with failed stories, it's to not let things drag on if you are starting to lose momentum of ideas. I mean, as much as I'd love for Bean to go on forever, I would rather have a nice ending than a slow death.
(But I mean, as long as you have a plan for a potential ending, you won't be in this danger.)
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Meh heh heh. Boy howdy do I have plans for Bean. No worries there.
It's sad how overwhelmed Celestia is trying to do Luna's work, just now realizing how much work Luna put in. Sad story, but beautiful and hopeful.
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Thanks! I'm glad that overwhelmed feeling came through; that's what I was aiming for.
One thing I disagree is that it went to Celestia's head. She might have been buried by stuff to do, and thus neglect Luna. If you want I can find a comic that I feel is the correct way to see it.