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When filly Twilight asks Celestia to tell her a bedtime story, the Princess is not prepared for the many memories that float to the surface once she is asked this. She mainly remembers a small filly just like Twilight, who also asked for bedtime stories many years ago.
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What a sweet story.
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Aww, I'm so glad that you responded to it in such a way!
My goal was for this to be a story for people to emotionally respond to, and it seems that goal was fulfilled!
Thank you for reading!
1692431 <-- This
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Thank you!
1692493 Awwwww! Super duper sweet! Have some mustaches!
Immediately brought this image to mind http://rizcifra.deviantart.com/art/quot-You-remind-me-of-someone-quot-212495190
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Dat pic. Hnnnnnnnng.
Also, even more Hnnnnnnng in the story.
this story is really beautiful and pretty! it's short but really sweet. i loved it. it made me smile. i love the relationship with celestia and luna that fellow bronies portray in fics like this. i can never read enough of these. they are just simply too adorable and really sweet. i have that warm fuzzy feeling after reading this.
That's cute.
adorable for Woona.
Check any dictionary: "flank" is not the rump, it is the side of the waist.
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Whoops! I'll go fix that right now...
Manly tears were shed.
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Thank you so much! *Internet hug*
I absolutely love this story. Also, the Elephants of Armony. That amused me more than it should have.
I like this.
I have an owie. In here.
so many happy hurts
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Then I guess you will be pleased to know that I am planning on getting this story fully voice acted.
Imagine a little girl's voice saying "Elephants of Armony."
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This will be most amusing, I'm certain.
This is Kalash93 from Authors Helping Authors. I am about to write up a review for your story.
Reviewer: Kalash93
Story: Miss Princess
Grammar: 9 Your grammar is impeccable. You only made a few minor comma errors for some of the more advanced concepts.
Pros:
1. Your story is the perfect length for what it aims to do.
2. Your story explores the ancient history between Luna and Celestia.
3, Your story gives happy feels.
Cons:
1. The long bit with Moonbeam, whom we later learn to be Luna, came very suddenly almost out of nowhere.
2. The story that Celestia told Luna was more conversation than tale.
3. The writing style you employ does not match the narrative.
Notes
You did a very good job with this one. Allow for me to elaborate upon this. Your story is just the exact correct length to tell this sort of story. It does not feel rushed, nor does it drag whatsoever. I like how you went back to what might be termed the childhoods of Celestia and Luna, given how seldom such things are explored. Little Woona was adorable, and you managed to use the opportunity to contrast and develop character between the past and present. This story was a wonderful piece of sweet fluff. It's short, fun, cute, and light, but it's not forgettable or insubstantial.
Now, I do wish that you had provided a bit more context surrounding the sudden cut to flashback. It was mildly confusing because we had no idea that a change of scene had even occurred. The story that Celestia told Luna played out more like a conversation with a little lesson in it than what one would expect an actual story to be like. My last complaint is that your writing style clashes with the narrative you are trying to tell. Your narrative is very tight and terse, but your style is much too verbose and relaxed to be harmonious with the short paragraph structures.
This is a damn good piece of work. I believe that you could send it out to Equestria Daily. You win 4/5 flutteryays.
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story, Last One Standing: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/72998/last-one-standing
2266600 Thank you very much for your lovely review.
I agree with pretty much everything you commented.
I would send it to Equestria Daily, but it does not meet the minimum word count for a one-shot story.
Perhaps I will expand it later, and add more to Celestia's story.
I will most certainly be reading and reviewing your story soon.
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Don't forget, please.
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/72998/last-one-standing
D'aww. Really sweet and sad.
Awww, this is a very sweet and sad story.
I love how you contrasted Luna and filly Twilight, and how Celestia saw both. Another awesome little piece! 
sooo sweet
and soooo sad
really sweet
How did I miss this? This is very well done...
The feels.....wow. D'aaaaaaaaaaawwwwwww
HNNNNG!
>InkRose used "D'awwwwwwww"
>Critical Hit!
>It was super-effective!
*faints from feels-overload*
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I could tell from the cover pic this story was going to give me diabeetus. It did. Well done!
HHHNNNNNNNNNNGAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH
*long monotone ring*
Cop-how did he die?
Doctor-*mumbles under breath* those damn fanfics
And i just teared up a little, which even getting that far is hard to do, any more. Good job, InkRose. Thumbed and faved.
Edit - Normally my rule is 'Three story faves for an author gets a follow,' but i'm going to break that rule for you. Counting this, i've only faved two of your stories, but they were both excellently written, and gave me some major feels. Followed.
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3395640 I'd have to agree.
My heart nearly gave out that last sentence
What can I say? I can Say this:
Inkrose: Do you also have a youtub channel in the same name?
Becuse their is a video were your fanfic "the lonly princess" is red by Inkrose on youtub.
For the Princesses, this feelings...
Very well done, InkRose. Very well.
this is soooooooooooooo cute and sad!javascript:smilie('
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awe how sweet lol elephants of armory how cute Luna was so sweet as a filly
loved the story though
Really sweet, keep up the good work kay?
I kept it to together for pretty much the whole thing, but when they got here…
…the dam broke.
Wow! These Youtube theories and fics are amazing! Keep up the good work!
*Dies of cuteness*
Ok, I offically love you! I love your videos, your reveiws, and fanfiction! Can you do one on Dissy
I mean Discord
Awwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!
This story is so cute!!!!!
NAILED IT! ~Pinkie
OH MY GERD THE CUTENESS!!!! Well i can see why Tia like Twilight so much. She's reminded of the innocent times she had with her little sister