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Lovely start so far and I didn't spot any errors whatsoever, great writing too. I'll definitely keep track of this.
Can I have the link to the image of this story please?
Does May suffer from depression? because that is an interest concept, he love at least one of them but see himself as a monster so he doesn't try anything.
Also does this mean that he not only has a really big scar on his left side of the face but in fact all of his body is cover in very nasty and big scars?
8173955 bby, linking NSFW images is against site rules
PM that shit
Very interesting concept, I love reading HiE fics, but every one of them is "Human arrives and immediately takes up job working for Applejack" it seems. I'm glad that this Human is "working" on stuff he's had a job in (at least from what I gathered from the summary).
And the ponies are anthro too? Alright, this'll be good.
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Straight outta the gate, and I notice you may need an editor. Get yourself a good one (if required), it'll up the enjoyment of everyone, trust me.
*You see, with (add the comma)
Un-italicize this part and put it in single quotes, like this: 'this bureaucratic *bullshit is killing me'
*afar, he appeared (comma)
*scrutiny, Matthias' (comma)
*May, was Lord (comma)
**bang*, which would (comma)
This sentence is just so run on...
*"AS MUCH as I appreciate your candidness with me May," and indeed, nopony besides her sister or neice would ever think to be this informal with here, though Twilight put up a valiant effort. (Some grammar, and you can take out the last part of the sentence, it's very repetitive)
More edits to potentiality come as I read.There were a few more that I didn't write down. My b.
I'm hooked.
Tit for tat is also a story about a three small sentient engines that are visited by clergy avatars of the author and his friend. The ending has one engine, Bert, acknowledging that they're in books. The televised version does the same, only going further by acknowledging the television series, lampshading by the narrator, and Bert winking at the camera.
I like it

it is good
Definitely getting a tracking for this one. Looks interesting.
Definitely need an editor though. While it didn't distract me too much, others may find it a bit unnerving.
Should be hear.
Quite enjoying it so far. But i do have one question. Why the nickname may wouldn't mat be closer?
OH BOY, an anthro story with actually good writing.
Fav'd.
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This will be addressed next chapter
First story ever
Featured
GG
Top notch thus far especially as it is your first story.
Fantastic work
A truley great fic so far, fallow it i shall.
This is great!
I can definitely see the influence of Flammenverfer on this fic. You have captured his style (and love of longish chapters) quite well. Have a like and a fave from me. Just don't burn yourself out. A first fic can prove to be a daunting task.
8175058 Found a mistake
Where does she get her mannies?
*manners
8175645
Thanks for looking out for me. Mannies is an informal plural form of manicure used around where I live.
8175680 oh
I normally wouldn't read a story with an anthro tag, but I took a gamble with this one and holy shit did it pay off. You have an incredible talent for the art of creating believable character interaction, and your writing skill far surpasses my own. I eagerly await your next update.
A great story and even greater introduction, if this is the quality you will have thru all of the other chapters and the length aswell you will go a long way and this story might just be your ticket to the top stories of this site, or maybe just HIE section but still would be a great accomplishment
The artist name for this is DimWitDog.
Your welcome if you dont read the discription
Wow. I can only guess what happened when Matthias first arrived but I hope to read for certain how he got into this condition. As well as how he reacts once he wakes up.
And then the f
cked. A lot. We're talking levels achieved by rabbits and the average weekend of Ben Franklin. And everywhere. A lot. Several maids quit in tears and many a guard blushed. And many a noble bitched. A lot. Then luna and Matthias showed up in their dreams. To f
ck there. A lot. Nobles no longer bitched.
Silliness aside mate, I'm not gonna read this. Anthro annoys, and clop repels and cringes me to my core, but I wanted to say congrats. First story and making the box already! Kudos
loving this so far, can't wait for the next chapter!!
8176255 I love this comment.
WHAT THE FUCK... How... how?... I Swear there were two chapters- OH GOD... I'M SEEING THINGS.
I'm DEAD curious now, what the heck did Celestia do?!
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*checks to validate information, only to find that it's true*
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If this REALLY is your first story, and by some stroke of luck you made it to the tippy-top of the featured box, then it's clear to me that...
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Instant fav, follow, and like!
......awesome can't wait for the next chapters.
Looks like Solaire finely found his sun.
Great beginning! It's got me hooked.
8173689 You probably already have this, but giving the magic number 1198036 to derpibooru will lead you to the cover image. There are also variants with *cough* extra bits, which I doubt we'll be lucky enough to find in the story.
Seriously, this is well done for a first story. I can tell you are either incredibly patient when it comes to editing... or just that damn good.
8177170 I'm less inclined to think it's odd, mostly because my first story occasionally plants itself in the number eight spot when I update it. It doesn't stay any longer than an hour or two, but yeah.
fuck me. fantastic first chapter. also ima ship it. also have a like and fave
The promise of clop does not keep my attention. It's the great relationship building here and the mystery!
This reminds me of the great unfinished story, Taking Turns, where it was a clop story but the wonderful experiences provided before hand made the story really enjoyable!
More please!
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I love that story too! I found the dynamic between the reader insert character and the main six believable and engaging and am hoping to bring that to my story.
Alright, let's see where this goes! (Commences read)
If this is indeed your first story, you're off to one great start! Missing a few commas here and there but still, congrats on making the feature box!
8179318 Your off to a great start. It makes me sad though knowing we will never get an Applejack Episode.
Still I will settle for Luna here.
ok so just the first chapter is very captivating and makes me want to read more and that alone makes me think that you atleast wrote one story somewhere on the internet or real life. That said I want to see this grow and look forward to reading more from you. (please write faster)
What kind of a update schedule can we look forward to, if there is one?
I liked and faved off the description for this alone, but that's a hell of a good! start looking forward to seeing how this goes!
*looks at the slowly growing list of In-Progress works both on the Read and Write tabs of her planner*
Ah, horseapples.
*adds to the Read list*
Ya got my attention, sugar cube. Well done first story. Put's mine to shame.
Very impressive, where did you learn to describe a scene like that? It really makes things come to life, and that wonderful bit of intrigue at the end is a masterfully crafted story hook. I'm actually a bit jealous of your obvious writing talent, but hopefully with a bit of effort I too will one day be able to compose a piece of somewhere near the same exquisite quality. In the meantime I shall take joy in learning from your shining example.
First you make us love the guy (not to mention your interpretation of Celestia), then you flash back to the painful memories and leave us in suspense!
Very crafty.
Needless to say I'm bouncing in my chair in anticipation of the next chapter! 
The anatomy has me puzzled a little, though:
.... to her belly button?
With THAT cover art there is nothing bound to go wrong!
Nice. From the way you described his scars, you made it seem like he had been sprayed with strong acid. Probably from a lab accident, I had assumed.