Vinyl and Octavia need to have a talk. They've needed to for awhile now. Can they resolve it this time?
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Yeesh. Talk about a downer. My phone won't load the video at the end, though.
Was this brought on by events involving you? If so, do you need someone to talk to?
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Yeah. I'll get over it. It's just hard in the meantime. I have wonderful friends who are always here for me.
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that's good to know.
I went through something similar to this, only it ended in the theft of a number of my things. Including my favorite Trixie plush! I'm still mad about the plush. But possessions are replaceable, and some friendships have to be let go of. I'm just lucky I have close friends I can count on.
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Ya damn right you do.
Well, shit...I can somewhat relate to this, but not entirely. Still, though, this story pulled my heartstrings. It has be thinking about some stuff now.
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You do!
My PM is always open to you, friend.
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While I don't actually know you, you have a tendency of catching my sense of humor, and being a decent writer. I try to consider myself a nice guy, so if you feel like talking to a total stranger, feel free...
I hope stuff brightens in your life.
PS A couple errors, but I'm not sure what your SOP is on them.
Fuck. Cut deep.
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by all means. comment em, and i fixem
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Yeah! Yeah. I'll deal with it!" she says. "Just stop treating me like you're my Mom."
'Mom' wasn't proper noun, therefore should be 'mom'.
While not a major item, it did mess with my immersion
On to other things:
She grabbed a corkscrew and affixed it to the top.
I'm doing this because I see a great story here. Not out of some pettiness, thank you for being chill with criticism.
I am trying to keep in mind that you are going for a minimalistic approach, and letting the reader fill in the details. Every paragraph has something of importance, action, or dialog. They build the reader's interest, keep the reader informed, or make the reader act. You built the framework for the feet of a grand statue, and the reader fills in the rest.
darn, can't believe this is based on true events. we luv you!
Wow. Is it bad of me to side with Vinyl on this?
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fixed
Wow, seeing these two together all the time and then reading this...wow. Well written. Really sliced deep. Not just cut, sliced.
Wow this deserve a like. Rating I give is 8/10
Vinyl wears socks?