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FerociousCreation


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Throughout her life, Vapor Trail has been in the shadow of Sky Stinger, in the best way she could. She didn't want all the attention to herself and wanted to give it to somepony she found special. As the years have gone by, the two have grown close to each other, helping one another accomplish their life long dream: becoming a Wonderbolt. And for once in her life, Vapor Trail didn't want to be in the shadow of Sky Stinger, but in the light beside him.

With both of their dreams accomplished, they can now live the dream... that is, until Vapor Trail had another dream in mind. Because of her closeness with Sky Stinger, the mare developed strong feelings for him and wants to confess her emotions to him.

However, Vapor Trail was unaware of how challenging such a task could be. Vapor Trail has many resources to her disposal, such as teammates and various plots to get the right words out. But will that be enough? Can Vapor Trail get the message across? Or will her chances of being Sky Stinger's special somepony vanish like a vapor of steam?

11/18/17 It happened! Failed Confessions made the featured page!

A special thanks to katseartist for the cover art!
Link to her website: http://www.spiritrappings.com/about/
Link to cover art image: http://katseartist.deviantart.com/art/Vapor-Trail-Commission-666221707

Chapters (33)
Comments ( 152 )

Very nice! Well written :ajsmug:

8360656 I know! I wrote it!
-Sky Stinger 2017

I know I'm not supposed to judge a book by its cover, but good lord, that was too adorable to look past. The first chapter was great. I'm not usually into romance stories, but this looks like it's going to be a fun ride :twilightsmile:

8361466 I am glad you enjoyed it with what little I gave. And yes, it will be quite the ride :raritywink:

If Spitfire does something screwy then I'm calling her Green Jelly.

Is Vapor gonna mare up or wuss out?

Don't screw up!

Lock those lovebirds in a closet why don't ya?

And if that doesn't work then she should go lock Sky and herself in the closet.

8390341
I'm just saying this as a last resort.

The writing on the picture says failed confessions to an oblivious friend, right?

Still the closet idea is up for grabs.

She got sister-zoned!!!

All we need is a closet for two ponies.

Ooooh!!!! He gonna geeeeeet it!!!!!!

Ravage his face with affection!

Something that doesn't screw up.

This brings sad memories...:pinkiesad2:

I can imagine Vapor Trail's face when Sky Stinger announces that he chose another mare as a VSSP. :pinkiecrazy:

Closet plan really would solve this.

Either someone cheated on Spitfire or bad luck.

It's a good story so far. I'm definitely liking it so far.

Sky Stinger must have Ketchum Density.

Imagine the disaster if Sky Stinger were to get another marefriend today. :flutterrage:

ARE YOU BUCKING KIDDING ME?!?!?!!?!?!!

“Of course! I mean, what’s the worst that could happen?”

Famous Last Words?

Oh this is getting worse for Vapor all the time... :rainbowderp::pinkiegasp::fluttershbad::raritydespair::twilightoops::applejackunsure:

What's the worst that could happen? Murphy's Law, anyone?
:twilightoops::pinkiegasp::applejackunsure::rainbowderp::fluttershbad::raritydespair:

And of that other mare meant for Soarin, I like thinking that Rainbow Dash is his potential love mate. :rainbowkiss:

Cadence can easily help Vapor Trail w/o the love magic + Flurry's helping out.

SO HELP ME I WILL LOCK THOSE LOVEBIRDS INTO THE NINE TAILS PENITENTIARY!!!!!!!

Will Lightning Dust play a role in this story?

And if Rainbow's plan got Twilight'd then go for the Golden rule.

Back to the closet idea.

I am feeling that I could beat them both black and blue for everything up to this point and how long it's taking get a result finally.
:ajbemused::pinkiegasp::fluttershbad::rainbowhuh::raritydespair::twilightangry2:

8495043 My worry is me dragging out the story too long and I fear it is getting to a point where the delay and interruptions are becoming annoying. Do you see this problem as an issue on my end or because of the characters and their predicament?

8495061
I would think that taking it to this point is getting to be problematic, what with Sky always blissfully unaware of his friend's deeper feelings and Vapor seeming too afraid to really speak out and reveal herself to him. For 20+ chapters, I do feel that is getting to be rather long, and drawn out, which could do more harm than good.

8496196 I did want to experiment with how long something can be drawn out before it becomes stale. Of course, I don't want to make a lousy story and keep it going with no substance. It was only a matter of time before someone mentioned it so lucky you. I can easily speed things a long and know how to go about having actual substance.

8496264
That is most pleasing to know. :twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2::yay::ajsmug::raritywink:

8497425 You forgot generous horse D:

Edit: Never mind... My phone didn't see her...

8498285 Despite my naughty behavior, I do hope the newest chapters were good enough

God fucking DAMMIT!

Can't catch a break.

Yeah the chapters did help a lot

Keep it up :pinkiehappy:

8498404 *leaves angry comment about the story* SO MUCH ANGER!

*compliments writer*
Hey, keep it up :D

8498385
Well it isn’t where I had thought about it going in, and things still feel kinda irksome as before, but then again I can admit it’s getting... somewhere? :scootangel:

If she wants to kiss him then kiss him!!!!!!!!!

8498691 I actually read my story over and am not as irritated by my pacing but still amused by how I wrote Sky. I think the issue is kind of like Finius and Ferb. The boys do something, Candice tries to bust them, and Dofinshmerts is up to something. Then the episode ends up with the brothers not caught by their parents, Candice makes herself look like a fool, and Parey saves the day. The difference from the show and my story is how there is some progression. I did say that I think I showed how stong Sky cares for Vapor so there is that progression. But everything else seems lacking, or at least, the world of the Wonderbolts.

What are your thoughts if you don't mind answering, since we have brought this up? And don't worry about being too critical with me. I stride for improvement. And a second opinion is very valuable

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