Our job is not to give readers what they want; our job is to show them things they never imagined. --Walt Williams
Neither Sunburst nor Zephyr did much with their lives. Sunburst subsisted on the bare minimum of his magical talent, while Zephyr coasted from job to job, relying on others. When the two of them happen to meet in a hair salon and strike up a conversation, their pasts come to light in way that would be impossible for any other pony.
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And thus began the start of beautiful bromance.
It only got crazyier when Flurry hit her teen years and started hitting on Zephyr.
Very nicely done! You've got a great writing style, really fluid and enjoyable to read. And you got the characters spot-on! ^^ I really liked the hopeful message, as well. Great job!
Great story. Sunburst and Zephyr are an unlikely pair of friends, but you make it work.
The characterization was indeed spot-on, and this story speaks to me when it comes to where I stand in life and not making much of myself. Too bad I don't have much to work with at present to actually succeed. Not to mention the overwhelming odds being against me were I to take any and all risks and go for broke in the world. I just fear loss and failure, I suppose. Working on the latter, of course.
7482587 You made me think of Shoutingisfun's adaptation of teenage Flurry Heart
Somehow, it works. [Warning: NSFW]
7482587 Wouldn't be be like nearly 30 or something?
This story feels like a sequel to another Sunburst story I read by milesprower06
Foreshadowing.
Isn't it just lamentable how neither of these characters has his own tag yet, but we've got one for the Breezies?
The Breezies. That's just sad.
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I would so read that.
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Depends on how old Zephyr is. Fluttershy's the older sibling, after all.
As someone who's been there... This says a lot.
Really wish there were more stories like this. Thank you for writing it.
VERY well done! I read this while eating breakfast yesterday and it really made my morning. I feel these two characters were criminally dumbed down for the sake of comedy. There much more depth to them than others think. As one who's dueled with self-cofidence and not feeling successful, I can relate more with them than most any Mane 6 member.
A great story. And I really like your writing style!
You did a great job of thinking about how each character would talk and what they would say. Nice work!
Good choice of characters, the two of them play well off each other and have a very natural interaction. Each one had some nice moments and made good points. Sounds like this could grow into a great friendship over time and a number of mane cuts. I wonder if Zephyr would trip fetlocks as well...
Also, great little moment with Shining Armor, that seemed perfect in character with him.
I'd never expect this friendship - Sunburst is one of my absolute favorite characters, and Zephyr Breeze I have to work hard not to dislike - but somehow, you made it believable and touching. Part of it is that Zephyr's far away from Rainbow Dash in this story, so I can forget the most annoying part of him and focus on the parts I sympathize with and/or relate to. But part of it is that you're an awesome writer who put a lot of thought into the connection you saw between these characters, and really followed it through.
The dialogue is a standout, and I knew it was gonna be from the moment I saw the phrase "Trottler effect" and the hilarious way you formatted Shining Armor's, uh, screams traveling through the castle. (I don't bet I'll need to use that sentence lots in the future.) Also the attention to the mundane physical stuff in Zephyr's job, such as how tailstyling is easier than manestyling (I never thought enough about all these ramifications of horse-people being into fashion!), and how inconvenient Sunburst's fidgetiness is. Like, I could believe you're a hairdresser in real life and just extrapolated from your experiences and thought, "Now how would it be different if me and all my customers were horses?" Zephyr Breeze seems really professional, and that among other things in this fic actually gives me more respect for him than I used to have.
Also the little bit with Flurry in the beginning ... agh my heart.
I really enjoy this story. Good work. :)
Before seeing this story, I never would have even thought about a scenario in which these two interact, but this was very wholesome and believable. Also appreciated all the details reflecting how hairstyling might work for ponies.
Ok you're getting thumbs up, fav'd, the whole shebang just for the bit with Flurry Heart. Sunburst, next time try the choo-choo train.
Awww, I love it!
I really like this, your characterisations are spot on.
Looks back on Starlight and Trixie
See, Those perfect friendship times just come when doing these stuff. That's where Those who had a rough Life comes.