Cheerilee was asked by Princess Celestia to travel to Saddle Arabia for a teacher-exchange program. Sounds like the offer of a lifetime for a small town teacher, right? Too bad her escort, an Equestrian diplomat, is the worst travel buddy ever. Hopefully our favorite cheerful teacher will survive the trip...
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Oh boy... Looks like our fave schoolteacher's patience will be tested and will probably reach it's limits.
I did not expect to enjoy this as much as I did. Props!
I'd love to give constructive criticism but I can't really think of a wrong thing here, dialogue is fun, you set scenes well enough that I can imagine it visually, those are the most important parts!
Was this inspired by the friends forever comics by any chance?
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Most likely. Then again, Cheerilee has dealt with Diamond Tiara's shenanigans for who knows how long. Maybe her sanity will remain intact... It's a pretty big maybe, though.
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I am very pleased to hear you enjoyed it! That is literally the best thing to hear when you're a writer.
And that really comes as a surprise to me. My gut was telling me that somewhere, despite checking it over multiple times, there was probably some glaring mistake or writing mishap. I'm not new when it comes to writing, but I am by no means a master at it. I have a long way to go.
So if you see any problems and/or things that could be improved upon in future chapters, please don't hesitate! Constructive feedback is crucial for writers, and I personally enjoy getting it. It tells me that people legitimately care and want me to improve, which is really touching in a way.
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Funny you should mention that. I read that comic just the other day, and I greatly enjoyed it!
The idea of Blueblood being sent as a diplomat and how I chose to portray his personality were partially inspired from the comic. So yes, I suppose it was inspired!
Hmmm... you have my attention
I'm interessted, but if he is talking like that, I can barely stop thinking that he is either only interessted in one thing, or that he want's to gain a good influence from everyone with his false behavior.
I would like to notice a personality change, once Cheerilee has turned him down the first time.
In storys where one is totally in love and maybe some sort of asshole too, I really like it if the other Ponys burst his bubble before there is a chance for them to get together. (sorry if my grammar should be off, I'm still learning)
Poor Cheerilee, it looks likes Blueblood is in for a challenge.
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Maybe vice versa... Cherilee in for a challenge as she tries to figure out the conundrum Blueblood is...
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And I shall try to hold it in my twisted writer hands for as long as possible!
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We'll just have to wait and see, won't we?
And don't worry about the grammar, it's fine!
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I think they're both in for a challenge.
"I just thought, since you two got the honeymoon cabin and all..."
Why do I sense Celestial meddling here?
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She pleads the Fifth.
7136139 Equestriadoesn'thavetheconstitutionasitisnotaUSterritoryandthereforeyoucan'thaveherpleadtotheFifthAmendment.
It's hard to write without spaces.
"I'm going to lose my job for this, aren't I." It's a safe bet, yeah.
Well as long as it doesn't look he is just getting what he wants if they have to sleep in one room, I'm okay with it.
Not sure how to explain it, but I don't really need him to harass her in their room. In some storys he would probably manage to get.... (I'm not sure but I guess in an E rated story, I'm not exactly allowed to say anything right?, I guess there isn't going to happen anything anyway, sorry Iforgot how the story was rated.
In a way I'm really suprised why so many Ponys are thinking that she just has to love the prince, or that they are even married. I think this is supposed to be one fun thing in the story, but I hope there are still some that think otherwise, just to keep it a little bit realistic, I don´t think that would destroy the whole comedy part.
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She pleads whatever Equestria's version of the Fifth is, then.
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Poor girl. She really was trying.
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Without giving too much away, I can confidently assure you that there will be no abuse or things of that nature in future chapters.
The only reason the stewardess assumed they were a couple was because they had gotten the honeymoon suite, even if by accident. If two people are booking a honeymoon suite together, it's only logical to think they are a couple.
7138464 okay, one thing was, that I understood they just gave them the honeymoon suit.
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"I asked Cadance to help me set up Blueblood so he would get married and move out of my place. Did you know that she have filing cabinets for everyone in Equestria? All of them dedicated to one individual each. Something about 'Shipping Flow Charts' and 'Red String of Fate'."
I hope that you come back in the future and finish this story.