It's just a day after Trixie's show where she preformed the trick only the Great Hoofdini did before her, diving into the mouth of a manticore and making her first friend in one Starlight Glimmer. But oddly enough, she hasn't gone back on the road for another town, another show. In fact, she's stayed in town a bit longer and when Twilight comes around to investigate she has one particular thing to say that'll leave the Princess of Friendship shocked and confused about her own feelings for the showmare, with her student caught up in the middle of it all...
Twixie shipping, if that wasn't obvious. Cover art property of catsncupcakes so all credit goes to her.
Chapters (1)
Well, that was fun!
It feels super rushed and forced. Like, at the beginning Trixie sorta felt in character but then it kinda all went off the rails
Change most of the "it's" to "its."
I'd like a sequel if you could, please.
It tide up a little awkwardly, but it is okay.
Find some mistake:
its
pony
Leave Sony out of anything that isn't Playstation.
its
on
wide
flirtatious
The comma should be placed elsewhere. (Now if you excuse me, Trixie...)
*unneeded space*
Wrong, it's Cadance who taught her.
I agree with 7509983 . The story pushed ahead far too fast without doing anything, and then ended. I hate to be harsh, but there's really no substance here.
Despite the grammer error, I really enjoy it.
7513449 Glad you liked it, and most of the grammatical errors are fixed now.
7512939 Yeah, I freely admit this isn't my best work, but romance has never been my thing when it comes to one shots.
sequel?
7577689 Hey, glad you liked it in some form. And I hope you have the same feelings about any of my other stories if you decide to read them.
Still a few grammatical errors here and there but I loved this!
The sweet feels!
A little rushed but not bad.
You can has review!
It was Cadence who taught her the breathing exercise, not Celestia.