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"Show my head to the people, it is worth seeing." - Georges Danton


Twilight Sparkle has always been a mare with a plan, and tonight that is going to be tested. The three most important mares in her life are all in town. They of course know of each other, and are happily accepting of Twilight's polygamous nature. However, Trixie has never met Sunset in person. Will they get along, or will there be tension which could possibly ruin a nice evening at the carnival?

This fic would have been a garbled mess if it were not for my close friend and great editor: Autumn Bramble

"This fic is cotton candy..." - DrakeyC

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Not that bad of a fic, really. Mind you, I'm getting nervous that my favorite story list is rapidly approaching six hundred. Is that something I should be worried about?

Nah, not at all, I'm sure everything is going to be ok. Also thanks a bunch for the favourite I really appreciate it.

*Reads story*
Well, crap... I'd ship it: Trixlight Starset.

A ships only stronger as its crew grows.

7278078 True, but a large ship can sink like the titanic... lol :derpytongue2:

Spike looking at the scroll, “Check list for Twilight without a checklist. Step one. This isn’t going to end well.” The dragon laughs, “Check.”

Having her pupil, Starlight, as the voice of reason worked very well. Having Trixie, the least secure of the bunch, blow up first also worked well. Sunset is the odd one in the bunch. You showed that with her hesitation towards Starlight and Trixie, but none towards Twilight.

The resolution was quick, sort of like a 22-minute show. Ending on the Ferris Wheel is a fairy tale ending though.

Kix #7 · Jun 6th, 2016 · · ·

Interesting, and would definately like to see more like this.

I wrote this while trying to keep as much of the show's integrity in place so I am thrilled to see it being compared to a 22 minute episode. Thanks a bunch.

Thank you, I hope I can deliver more of this stuff. It was really fun to write this one.

Awesome. :rainbowkiss:

Here I thought this was going to be a generic tale of romance. It was but you managed to write it in a unique way to me. Loved it! AND you put all THREE of my fave unicorns in it!! 12/10!:scootangel:

me think twilight has a type,

Twilight has her own harem.

I really loved it! It's so cute and tender... I liked how you tried to keep everypony's personality and that made it more realistic. Keep up the good work here! :twilightsmile:
Also, it's nice to see polyamory in here. Sometimes I forgot that me liking one ship doesn't mean that other ones are not ok.

Hey thank you very much. I love getting comments like this. I'm glad you're a fan of the polygamous angle that I took.

I acknowledge only the Twilight x Starlight. The other ships mean nothing to me.

“Trixie is fine with this, as long as we can ride the teacups.”

Inserted after All Bottled Up, or hilariously accurate foresight?

So.....now we add Tempest to the mix?

I wonder how the wedding will go?

A classic of Twilight's Marem, The Magical Quintets.
My OT4.

Lovely story.

Very nice and sweet. Also, so many appear to forget that this is fanfic and not an English Literature term paper. I get the same criticisms with my work. But I doubt anyone of them speak the king's English all the time.

Forget them, we write for ourselves. If we like it we share it. If they don't like it, they don't have to read it.

i mean this was also written... half a decade ago :P

That's okay. I just came across it because it came up as a Similar Story.

Oof. At least all three ships got enough soft moments together, though I sorta feel that there was more focus on Sunset and Trixie’s bonds with Twilight more than Starlight. Though it is made up by Starlight being the overprotective one of Twilight’s feelings.

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