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Ice Star


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This story is a sequel to Divine Move


Gods cannot die, so what happened so long ago that ended in the total collapse of Pre-Equestrian civilization?

After many years of unspoken tension mixed with isolated peace, those that remained have received the cryptic message many never wished to see. When such events unfold, Princess Luna recalls a desire she thought she had all but buried and leaves Equestria without a word, only to be followed by the enigmatic and arrogant Sombra.

Now Luna and Sombra – whose enigmatic ways have remained undecipherable to every princess so far – try to use what knowledge they have to save the world and themselves.


Book Five and Final Book of Sombra's Odyssey.
The previous cover art was by MagnaLuna but the current one is a request of mine from the ponydoodles tumblr. The artist known as Mod Tea/Moon (milk2art is their tumblr). The cover edit was done by me.
Beware of the numerous unmarked spoilers in the comments!
With some help from: NorrisThePony and Word Worthy
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Comments ( 253 )

I saw the title and I couldn't help but think of the D&D alignment system.

7454994 I've used it before on some of the characters, but no that wasn't what it was for. :derpytongue2:

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Gods cannot die, so what was it happened so long ago that ended in the collapse of so much of civilization? After many years of unspoken tension mixed with isolated peace those that remain have received the cryptic message many never wanted to come. In the unfolding of such events Princess Luna finds herself thinking of a desire she had all but buried. When the opportunity to act upon this presents itself, she doesn't refuse the chance to slip away unnoticed in search of what others dismiss as a lost cause. Joining her is the insanity that is the forever smug Sombra, whose enigmatic ways have remained undecipherable to every princess so far.

I'm reading this on my mobile, so I might be wrong, but you definitely need to break that wall-of-text into smaller paragraphs to make it easier to read. There's also some grammatical errors, though. But I'll get to that in a moment.

Maybe something like this?

Gods cannot die, so what happened so long ago that ended in the total collapse of civilization?

After many years of unspoken tension mixed with isolated peace those that remained have received the cryptic message many never wished to see. When such events unfold, Princess Luna recalls a desire she thought she had all but buried.

When the opportunity to act upon this presents itself, she doesn't refuse the chance to slip away unnoticed in search of what others have dismissed as a lost cause. Joining her is the insanity that is the forever smug Sombra, whose enigmatic ways have remained undecipherable to every princess so far.

7455032 Thanks for helping with that! I split it into two paragraphs (currently) is there anything else I might need to clean up? :twilightblush:

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I've edited my comment, because my fat fingers simply love pressing big, green buttons.

Check it again.

Also,

that remained have received the cryptic message many never wished to see.

More of a minor nitpick, but it should help out your description immensely.

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I know it wasn't used for that, but I couldn't help but also be amused by it as well.

7735878 Luna's orientation, while never a major plot point is listed as demisexual panromantic in my notes, so yes, she's on the asexual spectrum. However, Celestia and Twilight are assuming she's a lesbian based on what they know about her.

EDIT: While it's never stated here, she's asexual, but she was originally written as a very reclusive demisexual - her orientation was just never said.

So Celestia thinks Sombra kidnapped Luna. This is going to end so well...:ajbemused:

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She's very protective of Luna...even when Luna doesn't need protecting...:twilightsheepish:

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Heh. Big siblings are like that. I myself am like that at times.

7758327 But I doubt you have the power to raze entire nations with sun fire. :raritywink:

And then the sea serpent happened.

I know this is a few chapters late but...

Best saved by the bell moment ever...

Note to self: If I ever end up in Equestria during the events of the show...Make sure to invest in making a version of the Recollection spell from Magi-nation...it may just have been a cheap plot exposition device in that show but god damn it all if something like this could be used to throw Celestia's own horseshit right back at her I use it in a heartbeat.

Sombra doesn't like sand?! I could make a Star Wars reference here, but I'll refrain from doing so.

I lied.
Sombra: I don't like sand. It's coarse and rough... and it gets everywhere.

7814665 He just thinks it feels weird - kind of like cats when they walk on unfamiliar surfaces and behave in a very finicky way. But yes, the Star Wars reference is appreciated.:raritywink:

Oh, my. This chapter started out pretty lighthearted, but ended on a really ominous note. As always, I eagerly await more!

Let's throw a party for our newest God of Knowledge!

7820519 I don't think the airship is big enough for a proper party. Whoops.

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Awww... Perhaps just a small one, then.

7820529 Perhaps the next chapter will be a party of some kind...

Sweet Cadenza, Sombra doesn't like Starbutt too much, does he? I can almost see where he's coming from.

7822802 Those two have a hate affair for the ages ever since Tomb of Magic...:twilightsheepish:

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It truly is legendary. Although, I must confess :twilightsheepish: that it has been a long time since I read Tomb of Magic, and some of the details might have been blurred. Not to worry, for I shall read it again soon! :heart:

7822837 tl;dr version: They basically drive each other to violence and false accusations.:twilightsmile:

I like the bizarro-grimdark-fairytale vibes set up by this intro here.

But for now, I think I'll let what happened in Las Pegasus stay in Las Pegasus.

Aww... but I wanna knowww!

As always, I reside in the shadows

Wow calm down there edgelord

Whoever ended the old world wants to end the new one too.

Ooo now thats a cool closing line though

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Aww... but I wanna knowww!

Maybe one day that story will appear. Maybe.

Wow calm down there edgelord

no u

Celestia, go see a psychiatrist. I think you're getting paranoid.

Although, you are right.

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Exactly what?

Actually, don't tell me, it's more fun that way. :raritywink:

7885751 She is right... partially. You said so yourself.

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Yeah, I get ya. :twilightsheepish: I wasn't sure whether you were referring to my comment on her accuracy, or my comment on her apparent paranoia.

tfw you wonder how long it's gonna take to catch up on this

Sassbra
That's Sombra's new nickname

He's so sassy I love it

Right-Honourable Lord Sombra, Duke of Nowhere and Nothing, God of Something, Extremely Disgruntled Demon and possessor of Devilish Charm

Seems 'bout right.

♪♫♪ Sombra and Luna, sitting in a tree ♪♫♪
♪♫♪ K-I-S-S-I-N-G ♪♫♪

Shipping princess doing her thing. Lovely.

k time to keep going xD

In order to get his attention this time, I do not call out his name knowing that his mind is elsewhere.
"Two plus two is seven."
The book is lowered so Sombra can properly glare at me with more fury than Celestia's sun burning in his eyes.
"What did you just say?"
"So I have your attention now?"

"Go away, Luna."
My favorite response. "Sombra, I need to talk to you."
"Too bad."
"It was not a question."
"You're not coming in here."
"Stars forbid I know any teleportation, Sombra. The mighty door shall surely hold back this goddess!"
"Quit stealing my job and go away."

"Did it work?"
He waves a hoof in front of his left eye. "Nope. Still blind. Nice try, but no sticker."
"Then I shall try again, for I am greatly intrigued by what stickers you are giving out."

:rainbowlaugh: Icy
You're brilliant sometimes

"You could just allow your eye to adjust to the sunlight."
"I could just become an alicorn princess too."

Sassbra at his finest.

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