Emerald Crescent has always been picked on in school due to his nationality of being half zebra and unicorn, but he pays no mind to it. He had a few friends but that never stopped the bullying and the abuse by the high class ponies in Canterlot. Having had enough he moves out of Canterlot and goes to Ponyville for a new life.
Will he be able to improve his life? Or will it just be a repeat of the past?
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Hey guys this is my first OC story! This had been in my head for a while so I hope you all enjoy!
Chapters (16)
Zanzabar... Nuuuuuuuu. He was so cool!
Great start to a story pal.
Hmm interesting
This is terrific! Can't wait to see where this goes. Prepare to get tracked!
I'm liking the story so far. I can't wait to see more as the story goes on.
Great story. ^^
Wow. Well done! Really liking the story! Looking forward for more.
When do you think the next chapter will be done?
7092367 Zan will be missed
....Thanks pal!
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7092672 I'm glad you're enjoying it!
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7093039 THANKS!
7093498 I'm glad you're enjoying it!
7093815 Either later on today or at the latest tomorrow.
Well this looks rather fun!
7094365 No problem.
I wish you luck on getting this story featured! It looks like you won't need it, though. :3
Wow. Telling that to a young colt. So scandalous~ All jokes aside it's hope my good pal. Other then that great chapter.
OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!! ONE OF MY FAVORITE FANFICS EVER!!!!!!!!! WHEN DO YOU THINK YOU CAN START ON THE NEXT CHAPTER?!?!?!?!?
7095791 Thanks!
7106742 I thought I fixed that! Thanks for telling me.
7109127 uuuuuuuuuuhhhhh.......RIGHT NOW!
7106742 FIXED!!!!!!!!!
7109625 No problem pal.
7109620 YYYYEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great story so far. Looking forward to more. There's a missing word near the end. The filly and two colts were cut off by the door opening and revealing an old looking unicorn with a brown coat and yellow. Yellow mane? perhaps.
I really feel like giving Blueblood a powerful uppercut to the chin for how he insulted Emerald.
DIE BLUEBLOOD DIE!!!!!!!!!!!! YAYAYAYAY EMERALD!!!!!!!! WHAT IF HIS DAD IS STILL ALIVE AND IS BEING HELD AS A PRISONER OF WAR?!?!?!?!?!?!????!!?!!!!! OR WHAT IF HE'S IN HIDING AND TRYING TO MAKE HIS WAY BACK TO LEMON AND EMERALD?!?!?!! I CAN DREAM!!!! BUT EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!! :):):):):):):):):):):):):):)
Darn my money was on racist teacher
Well, then, not only is Blueblood a cowardly sexist, but a racist too
7119613 Thanks!
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Yeah, just like that!
Awesome Chapter as always. Emerald is so cool. Can't wait for more.
Someone wana die, someone REALLY wana die
Someone needs to go all Rosa Parks on the train
Wow, I never expected you to do another time skip.
7133304 Thanks!
7147801 Don't worry this is the last time skip
But there will be flashbacks
7146211 True that!
More?
Little short and some grammar and spacing issues here and there but not bad.
Thank goodness you didn't neglect to have Pinkie Pie meeting Emerald, especially since its her usual thing to not only greet ponies new to Ponyville but also to set up parties for them.
Not bad. It sucks to hear about your internet being down. Hope it comes back to you soon.
I like this story. I think you can make this go many directions with this, although it seems you might already have an idea with that, with the whole thing about emerald being watched. Makes me think about something from my one (and currently only) story about my oc. I dont mind grammar errors here and there, heck I type my chapters in on my iPhone and auto correct can irritating sometimes. Anyways, hope you get you get your internet working again, love to see more of this
7224603 Yeah, I noticed that some OC stories are sometimes missing that aspect of Pinkie.
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My Internet should be back up next week but until then I am working off of the hotspot on my phone or just heading down to Starbucks.
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Thanks
IF YOUR OC NEEDS A PAL HE CAN BE FRIENDS WITH MY OC!!!!!
A few grammar 'n' punctuation mistakes, but an excellent start. ~~~Wait!~~~my powers of draconic premonition~~~are telling me~~~THIS SHALT BE AN EXCELLENT STORY!!!
Well...
F***. Can't find an appropriate 'Unicorns Master Race' image. F***.
7119613 Hang on, is your profile pic Gerudo script?
Another fic where the Bluebloods (it was his father - I think- in the other one) are racist f***s? What a coincidence!
(The other fic I mentioned is 'Render unto Twilight'. Really worth taking a look at.)
B****!!! What, are all Equestrians racist f***s or something?
Don't slam me for being to lazy to edit in all the instances from the rest of the chapter, but..... there are just too f****** many!
Okay, on to the next chapter...
NOOOO!!! MUST HAVE MOAR!!!!!!
I DON'T CARE IF YOUR INTERNET IS DOWN!! MOAR!!!
(Actually, I do. Sorry to hear that.)
I bet a ton of you think that you had guessed where this was going to go from the start - mainly from the description - i.e he gets to Ponyville and things are much better. But I just realised, that that wouldn't make much of as story. So I'm hedging my bet. There are gonna be just as many racist f***s in Ponyville.
7124743 That would be awesome. Ohhhhh, imagine, the racist unicorns have gotten full on lynch-y, when somepony walks up, pulls out an AK-47, and says "Get away from my son, you f****** b******d."
It is gerudo script. I thank Google Play Store for the translation app. It's free last I checked.
I realy like it that it doesn't felt forced from any site of the party. what I mean is, that I don't get the feeling like someone wanted it to happen, and well that it was the girl this time that is showing the first sign of interesst.
I admit I'm drinking a bit right now, and I'm only saying it because I don't know if it is affecting my opinion right now, should anything sound weird,... only hate saying it because I bet that one or two probably think I do drink to much.
Well for a moment I forgot that he wasn't the main Char, but I think I'm alright with how the story happened. Anyway I'm pretty sure that I liked how you introduced your characters, and I nearly actually felt sorry for the Mare, so I think you did a great job.
I guess there are going to be a few more timeskips and probably Starlight is going to be his love interest.
While I don't need you to chance Starlight, I hope that our main char isn't the typical wimp if the romance part is starting, and with that I mean that type of guy that is being manipulated and played with. (I hope that sentence makes sense, I'm still no grammar expert and are using something I heard like that sometimes.)
It's weird how often I enjoy something different, but this time I actually wanted Twilight to already exist.
Nice so far, but I guess the chliché evil bullie is going to appear next chapter already.
I bet now he is thinking, why haven't I walked into the castle, I could be famous so easy.
Good really good, I think I can enjoy it really much, sadly I let other things ruin my mood a bit at the moment.
I really enjoy it more and more, but please don't let him be a total idiot and his love interesst totally cool if they are dating.
I mean if it should be Zecora, then I would like it if she would act a bit well...not shy but clumy about it, or just different.
I don't have seen many female main Chars in the storys I have read, but normally the guy is often some sort of clumy wimp if they are about to ask the other person out.
I want it to be at least both, not just the Male again. I can't help to think that it sounds wrong something, but it is a bit to often the male on this site as far as I'm seeing it.