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The Zebra Hybrid


Be who you are and strive who you want to be

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Emerald Crescent has always been picked on in school due to his nationality of being half zebra and unicorn, but he pays no mind to it. He had a few friends but that never stopped the bullying and the abuse by the high class ponies in Canterlot. Having had enough he moves out of Canterlot and goes to Ponyville for a new life.

Will he be able to improve his life? Or will it just be a repeat of the past?

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Hey guys this is my first OC story! This had been in my head for a while so I hope you all enjoy!

Chapters (16)
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Comments ( 105 )

Zanzabar... Nuuuuuuuu. He was so cool! :pinkiesad2: Great start to a story pal.

Hmm interesting

This is terrific! Can't wait to see where this goes. Prepare to get tracked! :yay:

I'm liking the story so far. I can't wait to see more as the story goes on.

Geez, I wonder which character is going to be evil in the story? Could it be the adviser with glowing eyes, red and black clothing, and always wearing a hood? Nah, it can't be.

Comment posted by The_Poket_Umbreon deleted Apr 4th, 2016

Wow. Well done! Really liking the story! Looking forward for more.

When do you think the next chapter will be done?

Well this looks rather fun!

7094365 No problem.

I wish you luck on getting this story featured! It looks like you won't need it, though. :3

I hoe you have a good first day!

Wow. Telling that to a young colt. So scandalous~ All jokes aside it's hope my good pal. Other then that great chapter.

OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH OH MY GOSH EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!! ONE OF MY FAVORITE FANFICS EVER!!!!!!!!! WHEN DO YOU THINK YOU CAN START ON THE NEXT CHAPTER?!?!?!?!?

7095791 Thanks!:twilightsmile:

7106742 I thought I fixed that! Thanks for telling me.:rainbowlaugh:

7109127 uuuuuuuuuuhhhhh.......RIGHT NOW!:pinkiehappy:

7109625 No problem pal.

7109620 YYYYEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!

Great story so far. Looking forward to more. There's a missing word near the end. The filly and two colts were cut off by the door opening and revealing an old looking unicorn with a brown coat and yellow. Yellow mane? perhaps.

I really feel like giving Blueblood a powerful uppercut to the chin for how he insulted Emerald.

DIE BLUEBLOOD DIE!!!!!!!!!!!! YAYAYAYAY EMERALD!!!!!!!! WHAT IF HIS DAD IS STILL ALIVE AND IS BEING HELD AS A PRISONER OF WAR?!?!?!?!?!?!????!!?!!!!! OR WHAT IF HE'S IN HIDING AND TRYING TO MAKE HIS WAY BACK TO LEMON AND EMERALD?!?!?!! I CAN DREAM!!!! BUT EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!! :):):):):):):):):):):):):):)

Darn my money was on racist teacher

Well, then, not only is Blueblood a cowardly sexist, but a racist too

Yeah, just like that!

Awesome Chapter as always. Emerald is so cool. Can't wait for more.

Someone wana die, someone REALLY wana die

Someone needs to go all Rosa Parks on the train

Wow, I never expected you to do another time skip.

7133304 Thanks!:twilightsmile:

7147801 Don't worry this is the last time skip:twilightblush:But there will be flashbacks

7146211 True that!

Little short and some grammar and spacing issues here and there but not bad.

Thank goodness you didn't neglect to have Pinkie Pie meeting Emerald, especially since its her usual thing to not only greet ponies new to Ponyville but also to set up parties for them.

Not bad. It sucks to hear about your internet being down. Hope it comes back to you soon.

I like this story. I think you can make this go many directions with this, although it seems you might already have an idea with that, with the whole thing about emerald being watched. Makes me think about something from my one (and currently only) story about my oc. I dont mind grammar errors here and there, heck I type my chapters in on my iPhone and auto correct can irritating sometimes. Anyways, hope you get you get your internet working again, love to see more of this:pinkiesmile:

7224603 Yeah, I noticed that some OC stories are sometimes missing that aspect of Pinkie.

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Thanks:pinkiehappy: My Internet should be back up next week but until then I am working off of the hotspot on my phone or just heading down to Starbucks.

IF YOUR OC NEEDS A PAL HE CAN BE FRIENDS WITH MY OC!!!!!:pinkiehappy:

A few grammar 'n' punctuation mistakes, but an excellent start. ~~~Wait!~~~my powers of draconic premonition~~~are telling me~~~THIS SHALT BE AN EXCELLENT STORY!!!

He observed the high-class ponies walking about and noticed that most of them were unicorns, he always wondered why that was but he never asked.

Well...

F***. Can't find an appropriate 'Unicorns Master Race' image. F***.

7119613 Hang on, is your profile pic Gerudo script?

Another fic where the Bluebloods (it was his father - I think- in the other one) are racist f***s? What a coincidence!
(The other fic I mentioned is 'Render unto Twilight'. Really worth taking a look at.)

"Why don't you watch where your going, peasant!" ... "It better not! Or i'll have you on a one way ticket back to whatever hut you came from!"

B****!!! What, are all Equestrians racist f***s or something?

Don't slam me for being to lazy to edit in all the instances from the rest of the chapter, but..... there are just too f****** many!

Okay, on to the next chapter...
NOOOO!!! MUST HAVE MOAR!!!!!!
I DON'T CARE IF YOUR INTERNET IS DOWN!! MOAR!!!

(Actually, I do. Sorry to hear that.)

I bet a ton of you think that you had guessed where this was going to go from the start - mainly from the description - i.e he gets to Ponyville and things are much better. But I just realised, that that wouldn't make much of as story. So I'm hedging my bet. There are gonna be just as many racist f***s in Ponyville.

7124743 That would be awesome. Ohhhhh, imagine, the racist unicorns have gotten full on lynch-y, when somepony walks up, pulls out an AK-47, and says "Get away from my son, you f****** b******d."

It is gerudo script. I thank Google Play Store for the translation app. It's free last I checked.

Zan just nodded and smiled, the two then just walked through the halls of the castle in deep conversation. Zan had told her about Princess Zahara, Arbez, Rayas, and his sister, Zooma. Lemon looked like she was stuck in a trance as she listened to his story, she noticed that for a zebra he was quite handsome and she admired that he put others before him. She felt her heart skip a beat just thinking more about Zan, the two then passed a window and noticed that the sun was setting.

I realy like it that it doesn't felt forced from any site of the party. what I mean is, that I don't get the feeling like someone wanted it to happen, and well that it was the girl this time that is showing the first sign of interesst.

I admit I'm drinking a bit right now, and I'm only saying it because I don't know if it is affecting my opinion right now, should anything sound weird,... only hate saying it because I bet that one or two probably think I do drink to much.

Well for a moment I forgot that he wasn't the main Char, but I think I'm alright with how the story happened. Anyway I'm pretty sure that I liked how you introduced your characters, and I nearly actually felt sorry for the Mare, so I think you did a great job.

I guess there are going to be a few more timeskips and probably Starlight is going to be his love interest.
While I don't need you to chance Starlight, I hope that our main char isn't the typical wimp if the romance part is starting, and with that I mean that type of guy that is being manipulated and played with. (I hope that sentence makes sense, I'm still no grammar expert and are using something I heard like that sometimes.)

"Emerald, huh," Sunset Shimmer, but you can just call me Sunset. I've never seen a unicorn like you before?"

"Really, how so?"

It's weird how often I enjoy something different, but this time I actually wanted Twilight to already exist.

Nice so far, but I guess the chliché evil bullie is going to appear next chapter already.

"Mmmhmm, and because of that I have made her my personal student."

I bet now he is thinking, why haven't I walked into the castle, I could be famous so easy.

Good really good, I think I can enjoy it really much, sadly I let other things ruin my mood a bit at the moment.

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