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Gray Compass

Unicorn Developer


There are no such things as bad ideas; instead, there are badly executed plans.

The young Todd McRaven knew the differences quite well.

After the death of his only brother, Todd had to learn again how to live a life, and little did he know, he would be aided by the most unlikely creature to ever cross his path.

A cloned alicorn.

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 83 )

first.... I had to say it.... Now I get five bucks.

Who is the other tag for? If it's for the human, then an OC tag should be used.

7506602 Didn't know humans were tagged as OC's, but it does make sense. Thanks for pointing out.

I'm liking this so far! Can't wait to see what happens next. :twilightsmile:

7513822 Thanks. :ajsmug:

I like your writing style

Rare thing to hear that. :derpytongue2:

Epic chapter! I really LOVE this story so far! I doubt ive seen anything like it! Please I beg you do make more chapters! Dont give up on us!!! :rainbowkiss::heart:

7572669 I'm glad to know you like it!

Dont give up on us

I won't. :ajsmug:

Pinkie Promise!

Dont want to bother you or anything, but when do you think the next chapter is coming out? Im getting really excited to what happens next :trollestia: :pinkiehappy:

7698287 Surely this month. I was quite a bit busy with some artworks, but now I'll be able to focus on my stories again.

That was incredible timing. I finish reading the previous chapter, and you've posted a new one. :P

Woah. Woah.

7703928 Supernatural intuition? :pinkiecrazy:

Or plain old magic?

Huzzah! This story is most satisfying! Very incredibly interesting! I thought I would simply get some pointless quick story about some guy and a princess alicorn falling in love and the end, but HELL NO! Keep at it man! I will acompany you until the final chapter of this fine story!

7704395 Great to hear that bro!

Other than a few grammatical errors, this shaping up to be a nice story.

7705185 Thank you. :ajsmug:

And sorry for the grammar; English is not my native language, I tend to miss a few details here and there. Any tips/suggestions, I'm open.

Comment posted by Tenth deleted Nov 8th, 2016

You're good at English for it not being your first language! :twilightsmile:

The only thing I noticed is the fact that you used hyphens in the place of em dashes, like here:

I knew that name sounded familiar - Life is a pharmaceutical brand. A big one.

Should be

I knew that name sounded familiar—Life is a pharmaceutical brand. A big one.

Or, in the case you can't find out how to type an em dash:

I knew that name sounded familiar--Life is a pharmaceutical brand. A big one.

Also to be specific, the em dash is used to add note. It works a lot like a comma. Example:

I'm kind of an asshole—but I have my kind moments.

Another Example:

I don't like James—that man who sits close to Janet in maths—but I can tolerate him.

Pardon me if you already knew that stuff, just thought I'd put that down for what I noticed in this.

7705519 Thanks. Yes, I know the em dash, but I couldn't find a way to type it here on FimFiction, so I just placed hyphens instead. I'll make sure to replace those. :ajsmug:

No problemo, amigo! Looking forward to more of this! :heart:

I really love this story, can't wait for the next chapter :twilightsmile:

7795385 I'm glad you do! I'm working on the next chapters.

Pretty good so far.

This is certainly a curious find. Maybe I should keep an eye on what you got going here.

As far as the fic is at now, the fast pace seemed to fit well enough and so is the writing.

7850111 Thanks. :ajsmug:

I've been posting short chapters at first, the future ones will probably expand in length.

This is an interesting development:trixieshiftright:

BTW I loved reading this chapter, good job:twilightsmile:

I can't wait for the next chapter

An interesting read. I'll keep my eye on this story.

Really like this story so far and can't wait for more, a most mysterious pair of characters you'very developed. One thing in this chapter is a case of several grammatical and/or spelling errors such as :

"Did you had breakfast already?"

Could find the others if you want, just a heads up otherwise. Awesome chapter nonetheless.

7854989 Dang! Thanks for highlighting this!

I tend do mess up with words when I get distracted. My mind tries to think in Portuguese and write English sentences at the same time. Oddities like these pop up.

7855044 Perfectly understandable, considering how I myself manage to mess it up when I only know English, so I respect that.

Whoa what the fuck

Oh fuck, this is some fuckin tense shit holy hell
You're a great writer, though; not many people can get pacing quite right. You did.

Thanks mate! I should definitely get back to writing this story again.


It's bad, because it is too good but it's slow enough that I aaaaah.

Please continue.

What is your native language because I feel is not English?

Nope, not English at all. I'm from Brazil.

Any grotesque combination of words? :derpytongue2:

Some grammatical mistakes but still a great story.


Thanks, I'll make sure to revise the chapters soon. :twilightsmile:

This is pretty good so far. Can't wait to see where this is heading :pinkiesmile:

May I say that this is not just good but AWESOME!:rainbowkiss: I hope Luna opens up a bit more to Todd though he needs somepony to talk to and she needs someone

I'm absolutely loving this story so far! It feels so fresh on the whole "lost horse on Earth" trope. I love how Todd is working to accomplish something, and his growing bond with Luna is making him willing to go to hell and back. It's going to be extremely interesting to see how it plays out with them fighting the organization... And no matter where the story goes, I can't wait to read more. Keep on writing, you're awesome!

8930735 Thanks! That's nice to hear, I'm glad you're enjoying it. :ajsmug:

I'll do my best to keep the story updated.

Whens the next chapter?

Still waiting....

9402742 I'm so sorry for the long wait. I had quite a few misadventures on the last few months, coupled with a harsh writer's block. Hopefully this issue will be fixed soon.

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