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After one intense argument with her sister, Rarity finally decides that it's time for an apology. But sometimes, even an apology won't fix things.

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Your usage of imagery and descriptive language really is quite powerful. You've done an excellent job in making the environment very fluid and real. I didn't cry, but it was disheartening. Good work. :pinkiesmile:

Meeester
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Im amazed. Your ability to write such vivid imagery and detail is absolutely stunning! I felt depressed, entranced, and angry at the story, scenery, and just the setting with how well you wrote. Amazing indeed!:fluttercry:

First of all: :raritycry:

Second: that was some powerful description and prose. It did a good job of wrapping this reader up in the ambiance of the story.

Really, this was very good. I quite enjoyed it. :moustache:

I really, really, REALLY need to know whether the story has a good ending or not... I absolutely can't read a story that's both well-written AND depicts things I don't want to read at any cost.

hmm, check list: deep CHECK,spelling CHECK, grammar CHECK, and sad DOUBLE CHECK.
this thing will be bombarded with likes in no time.

tear :'(

563010>>563014>>563018 Thanks! I'm glad to hear I've earned my cheesecake :pinkiesmile:

563098 Well, happy is a relative term. So happy ending? Yes, there's not. (yes and no)

563107 I hope. It's my goal to one day get something featured.

563111 That picture :fluttercry:

A very sad story indeed, a good sad story. The ending also wasn't completely depressing as some writers think sad stories need to be, it felt satisfying.

I need a hug.

Poor Rarity. :raritycry:

I thought this was a great sad fanfic, btw. The bittersweet(?) ending I thought was a good way to end this fic. I don't see any grammar mistakes from what I can tell. So that's a plus. You have my thumb.

"Perhaps is she had lent some time to that dear little filly, instead of taking the time to push her away."

Did you mean if?

563368 Um, yes :twilightblush: thanks for pointing that out.

What an absolutely amazing fanfic! :twilightsmile:

future feature...
this is beautiful...
i love it:raritycry:

This was great! It made me cry:raritycry::fluttercry::applecry: and listening to wishing you were somehow here again didn't help

Is the cover image your work? Is there somewhere a bigger resolution version of it?

Okay, I thought that Sweetie Belle ran off into the snowy night, after her and Rarity had a fight. But that didn't happen. Still, it was very good. I enjoyed it!

That's the first story I read where one of the younger sisters dies ... damn that was tough! :fluttercry:
As for the writing: Excellent imagery. I would have expected a bit more flashback/windblown dialogue, but it get's the point across rather nicely as it is. One thing though - I know it contradicts the challenge - but I can't quite picture Rarity going alone on such an anniversary, especially on such a cold winter's night.

I want to hurt you for writing this:pinkiecrazy:

563405>>563733>>563486 Thank you :twilightsmile: I wish it were featured. Looks like that won't happen though :twilightblush:

563765 It's not, unfortunately. I just couldn't find the artist to give him or her proper credit. The most credit I can give is google images.

564639 I meant for it to be. Though honestly, I didn't expect it to be this emotionally appealing. I was wrong :pinkiesmile:
Thank you. Though, I could see Rarity doing this. I'm not sure if there's a specific reason, but I can.

566036 ...Perhaps it could wait until I've gotten my cheesecake?

'And for her sister, it was the icy heart that was so contradictory to her element.' - it sound like you mean that her sister has the element. Not a actual problem, just a little bit of confusion on my part.

'Im amazed. Your ability to write such vivid imagery and detail is absolutely stunning! I felt depressed, entranced, and angry at the story, scenery, and just the setting with how well you wrote. Amazing indeed! :fluttercry: ' - Meeester

'First of all: :raritycry:

Second: that was some powerful description and prose. It did a good job of wrapping this reader up in the ambiance of the story.

Really, this was very good. I quite enjoyed it. :moustache: ' - Errant

'hmm, check list: deep CHECK,spelling CHECK, grammar CHECK, and sad DOUBLE CHECK.
this thing will be bombarded with likes in no time.' - Cord

'Poor Rarity.

I thought this was a great sad fanfic, btw. The bittersweet(?) ending I thought was a good way to end this fic. I don't see any grammar mistakes from what I can tell. So that's a plus. You have my thumb.' - ClassifiedIdiot

'What an absolutely amazing fanfic! :twilightsmile: ' - ThatGuy

'This was great! It made me cry :raritycry: :fluttercry: :applecry: ...' - InfiniteScratch

'Dude, you really did it this time, I normally love sentimental stuff, but I just read, review, read, review; this time, I actually shed three tears! you're really good! You have Everypony that read it at least doing something close to crying; even the one that threatened you! For the record, nopony threatens me, but that's because they don't really get too emotional.' - Me

This was a lovely piece.

It got my thumbs, my favourite, my watch and quite a few well-earned tears.

:raritycry:

595079 :twilightsmile: Thank you for that. And those, all three of them. I appreciate it!

Well, you accomplished your #2 goal quite well with me.

This is one of the best, most powerful and descriptive story I think I've read in a very long time. You did such a fantastic job of really pulling the feeling of the scene out and making it real, s well as all of the pain Rarity was feeling. I approve of this masterfully written prose, and am very glad you decided to write it.

Thank you for the tears and the joy this story brought me.

This was a fantastic piece, made even more amazing by the fact that you wrote this as a challenge.
Even if I hadn't read a lot of your other work I would have watched you just for this one fic, I didn't cry but I felt like I should have been.
Phenomenal job, good sir :moustache:

Well...

The language and vivid imagery in this fic is so damn good, that they kinda force reader to have strong feelings and forget that the story itself is pretty weak and generic. Seriously, I didn't believe this story for one bit, but DESPITE that it gives me the chills. Give me the chills BIG TIME.

That, dear sir, is quite an achievement.

This story will never become one of my favorites, but you definitely got yourself a reader.

Sorry for bad English and criticism.

1240108 Aha! Caught on, have we? :trollestia:
Yep, it's generic. Sweetie dies, Rarity is sad because she's at fault, so she goes to apologize. Eh, what can I say?
But hey, I still got my cheesecake. Mmm... But thanks for the comment my friend! It's much appreciated :pinkiesmile:

Oh, by the way, can you name your best work in your opinion?

I am kinda want to start read your fics from the best.

Sometimes I like to sift through and find some older fics that have passed me by, and this one in particular caught my eye.

It was quite an enjoyable read. I didn't shed a tear, but you certainly evoked a chilling atmosphere. I loved the vivid imagery. Though the flow of the words seemed a little choppy and repetitive at parts. Still, you did a phenomenal job, considering the conditions of the challenge. Great work, thanks for writing this :twilightsmile:

Where did all this water come from? :fluttercry:

Not gonna cry. Not gonna... Celestia dammit... :fluttercry: :raritydespair: :fluttershbad:

I'm sorry, but I hate stories like this that say some pony has to die and it's a key pony, a key loss. It's either a family, friend, or even a rival like Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon. I can't read the whole thing without feeling sad for Sweetie Belle. Bring her back to life so she can love her sister. It's a horrible death to die unloved,just horrible and sad.

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