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Lyra was always willing to make a sacrifice, but she soon learns that some of the most important sacrifices are not from the heart, but for the heart.

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My first fanfic, so I hope I did well on it! Sorry if it seems rushed. But still, I put lotsa work into it :twilightsmile: So tell me whatcha think!

Not bad. Not bad at all. For what it's worth, i think you did a good job. :twilightsmile:

Loved it. This was a very well written story.

It was pretty good.

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Only the end was rushed. I think. Especially with the way Celestia does things, it made me :flutterrage: but then I felt :rainbowderp::rainbowhuh:

Some things I noticed (I am sleepy :ajsleepy:, its late):
<<“when you're parents...”>>
I don't know if it is intentional the misspelling, and the ... could be replaced by a dash beacuse her dialogue is cut
<<.........

"..........Lyra>>
too much points for me, IDK what you think

<<"You're a poet to?">>
I think she meant too

Lyra-Trixie? Pulled it off nicely
Only thing is that i didn't catch why they were starving beside saying climate was badly handled :ajsleepy:

....Oh, I have discovered brilliance in my fridge

I really liked the story. It was a nice plot with good background for the characters, and good development. The only part that seemed weird to me was Celestia being pretty cold to both ponies despite the happy ending. I guess I just couldn't see her acting that way just to teach a lesson. Overall though very nicely done for a first story.

That was certainly original!

Good ending, too, although I'm not quite sure if you meant Trixie to be real or not in the end. Solid story. Just a FEW grammar issues, but they're nitpicky.

That was really good! I love you for using lyra!

245758 I agree, I wish I had stretched it out farther.
Also, that you're was a typo, I just wasn't paying attention ahah
Yes, too many points, and I meant when I said "You're a poet to?" Was "You're a poet as well"
Thank you for the shipping complement :twilightblush:
Um, last things, I don't really understand what you mean, but they were starving cuz they were homeless, and I'm also not sure if you're saying I wrote the climate poorly.
And what did you're fridge have to do with it? :derpyderp2:

246275 Well I love you too :rainbowkiss: hehe Seriously though, thanks

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It's a referance to the Fridge Brilliance page on tvtropes.org. Anyway, I friggin LOVED this fic! I think this may be the first time a fanfic has driven me to actual tears! :fluttercry:

Reading this displeased me. I can`t fault mechanical execution - it was written with skill and care.

However... The overall defeatist tone is simply crushing. Learning arbitrary lessons in the power of nigh-omnipotent being, without even being aware you`re being taught some lessons is just too glum of an existence to suffer in acceptance.

As far as I`m concerned, Lyra should`ve told Celestia to go buck herself.

272604 Believe it or not, I agree. But first, thank you for the complement.
I thought about it after I finished editing and posting. I did realize that it just didn't seem... believable, I suppose. But I doubted myself - as I usually do, and that leads to the downfall of plenty of in-progress stories.
At one point, I had thought about adding an argument between the two, but my mind scrambled my thoughts, and the result was... not pretty to say the least. Still, I wish I had taken the time to recreate and edit that scene. I'll keep this in mind for future stories.
Once again, thank you for the time you took to read this, and the criticism. Every bit helps, in my opinion.

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As a rule of thumb, hardships without a defined reason tend to make people bitter, not repentant. For a repentance through the hard life, you have to clearly define the "sin" in question to character, and then have them be unyielding "I deserve all of this" attitude.

Because otherwise, no matter the guilt, consistent hardship tends to break anyone at some point into just shouting at the sky - "WHAT ELSE DO YOU WANT FROM ME?!"

Wow, Trixie certainly got a raw deal. She is basically pulled through hell because on a misunderstanding and ultimately dies with her life's ambition unachieved and with her only accomplishment being to love someone for a short period of time. Something about this story bothers me.....meh

Motherbucking trollestia at work fellas

I love you're harp

*your

593318 Thanks for that, but I'm not changing a thing about this fic. It's bad, sure, but it's my first story. I'll just keep it as is :twilightsmile:
Though I just want to say that that was an accident. I know the difference between your and you're.

You my talented friend are a bastard.... that being said I appreciate your works greatly, but I could of used this story years ago. I recently learned a valuable lesson myself. May 7th-May 10th was a helluva learning curve for me. This is a beautiful story.

I cried.. yet again, after reading the most of your other fics, Lynked, after all this time, I've finally read what started you off, and I think that this is one of the most touching sentiments I've ever read. This is going up as my favourite. This is such a perfect piece that I'm practically kicking myself for not reading it earlier. Lynked, I can now safely say, I have read magic.

615245 Wow, thanks :twilightblush: But seriously, my later works are far better than this. There's plenty of grammar errors, spelling errors, a ton of telling, it's choppy, and the ending is rushed.
But once again, thank you! This story is dear to me, problems and all :twilightsmile:

615257 For once, I really don't care about the errors in there, right now, they all have sentimental value, don't they? I think that this tops anything you've ever written before, because it's just so touching! I felt a hole in my heart at the point of Trixie's death, and I can tell that this is what inspired one of my other favourites, 'Great and Powerful', also written by you.

One thing is for sure, though: This story truly holds the most powerful lesson of friendship. "That love, of a friend, family member... or a lover, is the most valuable thing in the world."
This has touched my heart, as have many of your fictions, and with age, I will look back on the time, however small, I spent reading this fic, just as I have to 'My Little Dashie', and other fictions, and books, and sadly, even games, that have brought me to tears, and I will look back on them with pride. No matter what I force myself to show to the people around me, be it over the internet or in person, this story has a place in my heart.

-*EDIT*-
'D'aww, shucks.' that.

615273 You know, I've been doing some thinking... I want to leave this as is, but maybe one day, if I'm ever feeling sentimental, I'll rewrite this.

Also, kudos on seeing that I drew inspiration from this story :yay: I'm surprised no one else did.
What do you think? Should I remake it?

Thanks for the 'Kudos'.

I think that this story its self needs to be left, but to rewrite another one and post it separately, and I mean, not in the same story, as a sequel set, not another chapter, would be fine.

God, I love Lyra stories! I'm reading Melodious, and it's actually pretty good! I don't normally pay too much attention to the board, but when I see one that's based on something that I like, I read it.

Also, I don't know where I'd be if I didn't read your fictions, But I know that I would be emotionally boring, because these things make me cry with happiness, sadness, grief, loss, and so many other things, but never once have I read something by you and not smiled at the end. Even, and you know that I despise it, but Incense, or at least, what I did read of it. :twilightblush:

It pains me to say it, but you are truly one of my idols, and to be able to even be noticed, down here in the comments, is one of the things that makes me smile. I can always count on you to make me smile. I count on you like I do my friends, though we barely know each other, and for being so reliable, in times of sadness, to make me smile again, I thank you from the depths of my heart.

You are as true a friend to me as those I have known in person for longer, and I'm sure that others feel the same way.

I would also like to thank those that have said similar words before me, for giving me the confidence to do so myself.

-Friendship speech over-

Yeah, I always feel a bit daft after a friendship speech. well, that's just me, huh. Maybe that's because it's just me that writes them. Oh well, it's time to smile to yourself over a cup of hot chocolate and think of the wonderful sentiments that people like these leave for you in their writing. Damn me for always typing without planning it out.

615396 Well I would leave this one, but rewrite it as a separate story and post that one. Probably rename it, too, to something like "Of the Stings on a Lyre".

And thank you for this comment. You have made me smile here, and for that I owe you a great thanks :twilightsmile: So thank you.

615407 Hah, you write and name well. I feel like a suck-up, complimenting you for everything you do, but you're pretty damn good!

As always, Loyalty sends his regards. :rainbowlaugh: My smiles often join others, as oppose to being joined. By that I mean, when good people smile, so do I. :twilightsmile:

Trixie says that I'm a poet as well.

615419 You really think that sounded good? I just kind of drafted something quick up :twilightblush: And thank you!

Well, it always makes me smile when I make others smile, so it seems this is a loop :pinkiesmile:

I absolutely hated the music I was listening to while reading this, but I love how you handled this. If this doeesn't touch your heart than why are you a fan of MLP?
:facehoof: I don't know why I can't keep these things together, hope you get the praise.
:pinkiesad2: Really touching though, can't believe this is your first.:trixieshiftright:

I think you keep saying 'bolster' when you mean 'bluster'. Interesting sentiment, although spelling and grammar are distracting.

1080344 It was my first story :applejackunsure: I wrote it in a day, had no editor, and no idea what I was even doing. So...
Ahem, thanks for the information though. I haven't cracked this story open in a while though.

This story is pretty good. I'm tempted to make a "your tears are delicious" joke though.i.imgur.com/Fsp3kJA.jpg

Wonderful! I was drawn in right from the beginning. I love that you wrote a story on Lyra.

I'd have prefered a bitterly tragic ending where Lyra refused Celestia outright, and cursed her name, and died alone.

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