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On a starry, moonlit night, Lyra discovers a baby on her doorstep. More surprisingly, the little bundle is a baby human... and Lyra is, well... Lyra.


Featured!!! January 8th, 2015
Again on October 14th, 2015

Chapters (4)
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"Lyra, when I take this mask off, you'd better be on fire..." Bon-Bon removed her mask, revealing a very stern glare to Lyra. "And what do you know? Nothing is on fire."

Really Bon Bon? Don't you think you'd be able to tell if Lyra was on fire without taking off your mask?

Ich habe einen Fehler gefunden!

where ther marefirend in question lay.

You must have sneezed while typing this. Or had a mini-seizure.

I am loving this already and I hope to see it continue!

This is pretty freaking good I can't wait for tha next chapter

Ooohhh , I am LOVIN this story! Please keep making more! Ah Ned 2 no what hapns! :derpyderp2:

Your story is good and your story is realistic to mlp so I say good job and continue the good work all these people like it so enjoy it

I'm liking it so far. I wanna see where this goes.

wait a minute.....foal-napping? again? :rainbowderp: uuhhhh....that gonna be explained?

Well I'm no grammar nazi... But I can see a lot of work went in to making this wonderful story presentable for even the most scrutinizing gaze. You have my attention, now let's see where the story takes us. :moustache:

Love it, want to see more

Es heißt:
"Korrigieren Sie meine Arbeit und haben Sie einen schönen Tag."

Besser währe:
"[...] und ich wünsche Ihnen noch einen schönen Tag."

I couldn't help myself on this one. :twilightblush:

5385224 aaahhh i had the same thought but well:trollestia:

I don´t know if it is because of Bon Bon and Lyra for a change, or because of how you have written about their love and anything, but i would already consider it to be in my favourites, but i still wait for a second chapter.

Yes i want to read more, i believe it is going to be a good story and i like the start. I know that you maybe need a few timeskips, but i hope you don´t make the time change to fast. I mean i don´t think you should make the Baby older in every single chapter, if you maybe planned to do this.

mehr bitte!:twilightoops:

everypony speaks german in the comments,
so I thought I do to:pinkiesmile:

Nice story, but there are some things you may want to edit.

In ponyville, only one mare could fit one or both of those descriptions.

From there, a smallish staircase lead up to the master bedroom, where ther marefirend in question lay.

The doctor reccomended a sleep tablet that should only be taken once per week, and for Lyra to listen to her body.

Wow...I really like how you've played Lyra's character; and although I admit I'm a little tired of people making her out to be somewhat of a lunatic, I like this. I look forward to more :pinkiesmile: I especially liked the Doctor Who reference.

This needs a quick edit, nothing major just some words smashed together.

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I agree. Quite a few misspellings and smushed together words in this chapter. A little time spent on editing or getting a volunteer editor would definitely do wonders.

You say nothing much happens but Lyra does something that really makes her likable in this story. Giving up "the finger" (the way Bon Bon said it made me think it was a sex toy) and Bon Bon's reaction to how Lyra was able to do it spoke volumes about her character and values.

I am enjoying this a lot and look forward to seeing where this story is heading.

So Lyra's giving away her finger to Twilight Sparkle? :trixieshiftright:

It's sad how much sense that last line makes.
Sad for Twilight, I mean.
She probably WOULD be the only one interested in buying it.
And she'd ask Lyra why she's selling, Lyra would tell and then she and Bon Bon would be dealing with a stalker who wants to study their daughter.

Wait wait... is it confirm the baby is a 'she'? (Just cause of eye lashes being 'feminine' and I don't see any lines of them changing diapers or giving it a bath... now that would be very awkward "Oops, I guess our baby is a boy")

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... ... Um... I feel awkward trying answer this question.

In the ponyverse (I have no clue what else to call it) all males have a lack of eyelashes while mares have more prominent ones. You're right in saying that it'd be awkward to discover a mare was a stallion, but it'd be even more awkward "checking what's under the hood" so to speak.

That said, I have not scrapped the idea of a bath chapter...

For one moment when bon bon said about finger i though she mean baby and oh uh kinda grimdark

Neat, it would be funny if she turned out to be a he (with long eyelashes) in a bathroom scene.

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Well Humans are not biologically the same as ponies... so yeah, it will be very awkward come bath or changing diapers to find the baby to be of opposite sex

... Fine I guess I can favorite this... If you update then I'll throw in a watch too.

Nice chapter, but I found some things you may want to edit.

Once there, she quickly clicked on a gas powered lamp and grabbed a pair of goggles hwich she put on deftly. She then turned toward a cloaked oject sitting upo a large workbench.

However, the intrument itself was inteded to be used by gryphons.

Her plan of returning to her placwe of honor fell apart into settling down with a marefriend who helped up from the deepest despair.

"i'm on the second pot of coffee,"

"Aww..." Lyraa cooed. "I'm sorry."

Lyra was right. She still wanted to have ababy and start a nice family, but she didn't see this coming.

Lyra was right. She still wanted to have a baby and start a nice family, but she didn't see this coming.

Once there, she quickly clicked on a gas powered lamp and grabbed a pair of goggles hwich she put on deftly.

Once there, she quickly clicked on a gas powered lamp and grabbed a pair of goggles which she put on deftly.

She then turned toward a cloaked oject sitting upo a large workbench.

She then turned toward a cloaked object sitting upon a large workbench.

She soo began to emulate their mannerisms.

She soon began to emulate their mannerisms.

Her plan of returning to her placwe of honor fell apart into settling down with a marefriend who helped up from the deepest despair.

Her plan of returning to her place of honor fell apart into settling down with a marefriend who helped up from the deepest despair.

This Finger 1.1 wasperhaps the cause for most of her happiness, and it wasn't even finished.

This Finger 1.1 was perhaps the cause for most of her happiness, and it wasn't even finished.

The coffee makers perkalator bubbled and Bon-Bon quickly poured a large cup of the stuff and took quick sips.

The coffee makers percolator bubbled and Bon-Bon quickly poured a large cup of the stuff and took quick sips.

Too many errors for for a spot in tier 4 or 3, but it's a good story and has a lot of potential. Tier 2

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I've edited it!!! I've edited the second chapter

5402802 Then I'll read it again and give a new rating based on the improvements.

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Alright.

I'm gonna... uh... be completely honest in saying that I'm shocked by a freaking kids TV show.

5403022 I have no idea what you mean.

5403079 Well, I was watching The Legend of Korra's last episode.

I have never watched the series prior to that, or even showed mild interest in it. It was on and the episode was halfway over. I just wanted the background noise, ya' know?

i will not spoil it for anyone, but... that ending... Can't tell if lesbian, or really close friends... What is... I can't even or odd...

HOORAY HER DREAMS HAVE BECOME TRUE! :pinkiehappy:

Ach, es ist aber wirklich ein Mädchen, wenn? :raritywink:

Loving it so far btw.

Well, I wonder how Bon-Bon will react to learning how much money Lyra got from selling her contraption to Twilight?

Wait the guards were fake?:rainbowhuh:

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"There is a fifth dimension beyond that which is known to equine. It is a dimension as vast as space and as timeless as infinity. It is the middle ground between light and shadow, between science and superstition, and it lies between the pit of mare's fears and the summit of her knowledge. This is the dimension of imagination. It is an area which we call the Twilight Zone. "

The baby... is it officially a girl or is it a boy? (hoping for the later, would create a lot of awkwardness for Lyra and Bon Bon... especially during teenage)

I saw references to Lord of the Rings and SpongeBob!

"One does not simply approach the princess."

"I knew this mare who knew this mare who this mare who knew this mare and her roommate who this mare who knew this mare who knew this mare who knew this mare, who knew this mare's cousin who said that you like science-y... stuff."

The heck is up with those guys? Twilight cant have her own cult yet!

Twilight wouldn't disect a baby... Would she?

So Twilight had guards she didn't know were guards that weren't really guards that Spike knew and thought were guards?
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Cool.

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