Applejack and Fluttershy are married and celebrating their one-year anniversary. When they both admit to each other that they want a foal, they need to find a way to go about getting one. And is there a better way to do so than holding a town-wide competition to find a stallion to mate with one of them? Probably, but where's the fun in that?
This story takes place in the same universe as Appleshy, Sparkle Kitten, Trixie's Great and Powerful Revenge, Tragic Magic, and Dragon Your Hooves. None are required reading (though Appleshy explains how the two got together), but go ahead and read 'em if you like!
Thanks in part to some of the wonderful people over at Intelligent Shipping Discussion!
Chapters (1)
why not use unicorn magic? give one of them the equipment?
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i love it and i can't wait for more chapters to this story to come out
Only problem I noticed, a little redundancy here.
The 'Jackie' thing might be putting some people off; girly AJ is a hit or miss proposition.
However, I am nevertheless interested to see where this goes.
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Pfft, totally overlooked that. Fixed now, thanks!
This is a very confused story. First the desire thing? What was going on during this cause it's just so confusing.
Like in this part---->
It makes no sense. What these ponies don't have foals usually, is it a niche thing?
That's not only slightly confusing world building but also very presumptuous of the world. Also how's it a moral choice, perhaps in a more populous world, then a choice of morality would occur or if there were few resources but here it just makes no sense.
Then once we learn what she wants it just goes down hill. At first I thought, 'Oh she wants a child, but that means one of them would need to be mated with a male. Ahh but she has desires, she must either be really apprehensive of a stallion being with her or Flutters or She wants to be mated but is still in love with Flutters'
That's good character dilemma. 'Should I give myself or my wife carnally to another so that My wife and I might have a child. Or I love a mare, then why do I want to have sex with a stallion'. I was sorta looking forward to that, but then you dropped what ever ball you were holding.
So in retrospect. It started out good, though slightly confusing. But then just went on to be as contrived as possible. With the characters not really thinking things through despite text that says differently. A world that doesn't make sense in a fanfic way or alt universe way. And a premise that needs stronger writing then this. It wasn't good. How ever I will continue to read simply for the premise and the fact that it's teen and not mature and thus no stupid het sex to ruin my Fillyfooler paradise.
FF, out.
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That part was meant to sound misleading. You're supposed to think she's got some bizarre fetish or perversion or something, but then it turns out she just wants a foal.
As for the rest, the story's certainly not over yet. This is only the first chapter! But don't expect it to be completely serious; the comedy tag is there for a reason
I am really excited for the next chapter!!!
Not bad at all, keep it up
Good beginning can't wait for the rest of it. Keep up the good work.
I hope to see more from you.
Awww, so this is a universe where Twilight can't just slap a wang on any old mare passing by? Boo! Boo I say!
Can't wait to see what the competition entails.
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Mfw "slap a Wang"
this is really good!
and 
are perfect!
Twinkletail i got a question when will the next chapter for this story come out and sorry for saying your name account Vengeful Spirit
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I promise it's coming! I have a lot of stuff I'm working on, and I take a while to update. But I promise it will be coming at some point! I just can't give a timetable, cause I know I'll somehow slip up with it.
3197047 ok
heh ya know... stillhere..
Omg!!!! I love this!!! Two best ponies, it's so cute!!! *squee*