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Twinkletail


I write poni. I am easily distracted. I like Oreos.

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This story is a sequel to Sparkle Kitten


Twilight Sparkle and Rarity are about as happy as two ponies can be together. Their love is about to be tested, though, when Twilight's former flame returns to Ponyville to take back what was once hers.

This story takes place in the same timeline as Sparkle Kitten and Trixie's Great and Powerful Revenge. It's written without taking the events of Magic Duel into consideration, as I thought of this idea a good long while ago, but only just got to it.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 67 )

I SEE NO WAY THIS CAN END BADLY AND/OR IN TEARS

Seriously though, I loved Sparkle Kitten and this can only be awesome :raritystarry:

I second what EvilPresident said. I've been hoping for a continuation to Sparkle Kitten for a while. Can't wait for more:twilightsmile:.

Good story amigo, keep it up please :eeyup:

Wot a rite cheeky cunt
She needs a smack in the gabber
Best be makin tesco value brand beef with this bitch, cheeky slag

Huh, this didn't show up in my normal favorite list. Almost missed it.
Anyway, still liking the story. Can't wait for more:twilightsmile:.

Poor Rarity, her natural drama skills have kicked into overdrive :raritywink:

Honestly don't believe Trixie either. Rarity's right, this is exactly what swindler bullshitters do when they try to steal your loved ones from you.

Twilight Sparkle and Rarity are about as happy as two ponies can be together.

It's funny because Rarity is canonically straight.

Prince Bluebood, anyone?

2380176 Remember when Blueblood was a total douche bag? I think that would turn any mare to consider the same sex, dood.

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It's funny because canon doesn't freaking matter in fanfiction. It's also funny because she might be pan/bisexual and you haven't even considered that. Or anything else for that matter. Using our brains, anyone?

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Also, who else feels like Trixie's going to start tormenting Rarity by being all hoofsy with Twilight in the club? This is starting to feel like a cuck-fic, and I might have to turn away if it starts down that road without Twi getting wise and putting a hoof through Trixie's face. Considering Twixie is my OTP, that's something of an endorsement towards how much I hate the situation Rarity's in right now.

This story's twilight is really, really stupid.

I didn't know this was a thing! I read Trixie's Great and Powerful Revenge and reread Sparkle Kitten before reading this. I really feel for Rarity here.

2380176 https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bisexuality

I really hope that the next chapter will be posted soon. I bucking hate cliff hangers. I love the story though.

Comment posted by HaoKyruss deleted Apr 26th, 2014

Did Rarity just kiss Trixie.................

This was Trixie's plan. To talk up friendship in front of Twilight, knowing Twilight's too forward and frankly simple in these matters to understand, and would take Trixie's words at face value.

Then to get Rarity drunk, using her favorite drink which she wouldn't say no to. And I'll bet she even figured that her extra display of those traits she knows gets under Rarity's skin would drive her further into drinking. She set Rarity up to break Twilight's heart, so Trixie could claim innocence and 'be there' for Twilight after exposing her 'cheating' marefriend.

... I'm not sure if this is rape or what since it didn't get past a kiss, but alcohol was planned and used for this specific outcome on the part of Trixie. Twixie might normally be my OTP, but I'm hoping Rarity enlists some help to remove Trixie for good. Twilight's being a fucking dunce. She is -with- Rarity, so giving Trixie chances to get between them makes NO sense. Your partner is supposed to be the one who is most important to you. If Rarity is uncomfortable with Trixie's presence, then it's up to Twilight to remove Trixie from the equation with a sense of finality. It's not Rarity's fault, this is Twilight's for being so stupid about relationships (also, giving Trixie so much free rein is normally a tell that she still has some sort of feelings for her) and Trixie for maliciously trying to take Twilight from Rarity.

This is starting to get personal, if this doesn't have a quick turnaround I'm not sure I can continue without raging every chapter due to my own experiences in Rarity's position.

well, that came out of left field :rainbowhuh:

Blegh! Cliff hangers :ajbemused:

I'm very interested as to where this is going, So you win this round, TwinkleTail. Take a mustache, you've earned it :moustache:

Wow Twilight. The Element of Generosity comment was pretty harsh, especially to your mare friend. You big meanie! :flutterrage:
This story is so good XD

Spike! Thank God, a voice of reason.

About time, Spike. Trixie's farce has gone on long enough. I'm getting just about tired of this cuck crap. If this doesn't clear up soon I'm going to have to stop reading this story before it poisons my Twixie ships with my undying hatred for what she's trying to pull.

Also feeling the other girls are out of character. Rather than avoiding Rarity; AJ, Dash, and Pinkie are the sort to "try and get to the bottom of this" rather than just believing some hearsay. Fluttershy would stop to listen to Rarity's side due to her pathological kindness and understanding. Realizing they aren't important elements in the story, but also kind of removing their profiles from them altogether in this manner.

“I would think more from a pony who bore the Element of Generosity,” Twilight said evenly.

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Run Spike!
Show us the meaning of haste!

*imitating Jenny from "Forrest Gump" * RUUUUN, SPIKE! RUUUUN!... I don't trust that stentorian showboat!

Aha! Trixie is to blame for this after all!

i love it and when will more chapters for this story come out

I can honestly imagine Trixie singing this song

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Apparently...

Remind me to play Rarity at cards sometime. Easy winnings.

After all... can't read my, can't read my, no she can't read my poker face...

:pinkiegasp: It was Trixie!
I'm just glad that Spike is doing something about this madness.

This is another awesome story I can't wait for the next chapter. keep up the good work.

This story...

... is awesome. Another! Please?

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Agreed.

I certainly did you enjoy it Twinkle :-)

I enjoyed this story.
:twilightsmile::heart::raritystarry:
A third story perhaps? :raritywink:

I am disappointed.

The story about bad impulse decisions, guilt, forgiveness and reconciliation (or possibly the lack of those last ones) that I thought I was reading after the end of Chapter 5 seemed much more interesting than the story of triumph over an underhanded antagonist that it turns out that I was reading.

And the way that the behavior of the others in chapter 6 is left unchallenged, as if that would be any way to treat a friend after such an action if it had been driven by nothing but alcohol and selfish desire, leaves a bad taste in my mouth.

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I actually did have a number of issues deciding how the story would end. The plan all along was to have Trixie behind it, but I toyed with a number of possible endings, including Twilight forgiving Trixie even after all of that, and Twilight not forgiving Trixie, but Rarity not forgiving Twilight either. It was kinda hard to decide which was the best end result of the story, and I figured whichever decision I made would leave some readers happy while other readers weren't quite as much.

I also totally agree about the last bit, with the other Mane Six's behavior towards Rarity and having to deal with the repercussions of such. That was another tough part to write and attempt to keep in-character. I figure they'll get a talking-to by both Rarity and Twilight in the events following the story, but I didn't want to add another chapter just to deal with it. You're absolutely right though, it's something that should be addressed.

I'm sorry the ending didn't work to your liking, but I greatly appreciate the criticism!

I enjoyed the story but I must admit there are many faults. One of these is the ending. It ends suddenly not really giving a real end. You show that they are back together but never wrap up the town hate towards Rarity. I think you could of expanded on this enemy. You could have added more where she could of tried to drive Rarity out by making a lie or something. I feel that it in the end was resolved to easily. Through out the story Trixie is portrayed as determined to win. But in this last chapter she doesn't even try to pull another trick. She just gives in which I have to admit I was disappointed by. Overall I liked it but it could of been better. Keep up the good work.

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Bad impulse decisions? I assume you've never been drunk, because you don't /make/ decisions while plastered. Trixie didn't need to cast an inhibition-removing spell, because alcohol removes inhibitions in the first place. Rarity made no decision, there just simply wasn't a conscience there to tell her "this isn't something you want to do".

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That said, Twinkle, I do agree. This feels like it should be somewhere at the bottom of a chapter. About 70% of the way through. There should be a lead-up... more scenes where Trixie is trying to further wind Twilight around her hoof, perhaps even trying to turn her away from her other friends just a little to isolate Twilight - nothing obvious enough for Twi to know, but there - perhaps even giving the barest seed of doubt ... Going from experience, anyway. Spike and Rarity watching, plotting - taking note of what's going on and what's being said, when things are happening so they know the best time for Trixie to not be suspicious, and for Twilight to be the most receptive.

We neede that final push to reaffirm to the reader that Trixie is a piece of shit here and the only real way to prevent her from manipulating people is enforced banishment, maiming, or death. One does not always need to lie in order to twist people to their selfish and sick desires, the better manipulators know this to be true. A lie is easier to see for what it is than a convenient truth told at the right time.

Then after that takes up 70% of the chapter, we have this block here... Trixie being run out on the rails, and a resolution between Rarity and Twilight - along with some chastisement. Rarity almost seems to have Stockholm Syndrome, frankly - Twilight abused her own partner for the sake of someone who just inserted herself into their lives and relationship, someone that her partner (who should be the most important person in the world to her) vastly distrusted. She took Trixie's side long before the night of alcohol and cheap spells - the moment she abandoned Rarity's misgivings, she was already batting for Trixie's team. Rarity needs to take BACK what's hers, not shush Twilight and tell her it's all okay, just hold me.

In this case, she needs to make sure Twilight is aware of what she has done to hurt Rarity, and when it /started/ because Twilight is obviously socially incompetent, which goes double for relationships - so Twilight will know that this must never happen again - and that she must never have contact with Trixie again or risk destroying their relationship. That is beyond fair to ask, because Twilight has proven she is easy to manipulate, and still has some sort of feelings for Trixie to have allowed any of this to happen.

Then after that, all the warm fuzzies with the lucky Rarity who actually defeated the venomous bitch and got back her loved one, unlike the rest of us who are not so fortunate.

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I think perhaps there should be a third story. I give this series 5 out of 5 mustaches
:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Meh, I think I would have liked this story better if I hadn't read 'Trixie's great and powerful revenge' before reading this, since in that story Trixie pretty much rapes Twilight and no one thinks to bring that up in this one.

Awe yeah! Have a fave and like!

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Here, Rarity, have a napkin 'cause...(puts on sunglasses)...you just got SERVED!

hmmm....okay de3spite the fact that I really cant in any such universe see Twilight and Rarity together this series was actually good minus the fact that Rarity seemed to be able to pull magic off better than twilight in the first stroy

That was amazing. SEQUEL NOW, AND BE QUICK ABOUT IT!

Um, if you wouldn't mind, that is...:fluttershysad:

"Oh, Trixie," Twilight would never say. "My love for you is burning anew!"

"My sweet Twilight Sparkle," Trixie could not possibly be saying right now. "I want you more than I've ever wanted anypony."

"Thank goodness Rarity is not around to witness our passion," were words that would never escape Twilight's mouth.

"You are mine now and forever," Trixie probably wasn't telling her.

"The rope that Rarity always uses is in the top drawer," Twilight shouldn't be saying, while hopefully not giving Trixie that half-lidded look that drove Rarity wild...

This exchange is one of the funniest things I have read in a while. Cracked me right up.

sparkle:raritystarry: kitten all the way

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