As a new leader and higher up in the ranks of the alicorns, Twilight must be tested. She needs to be prepared to deal with the responsibilities of her duties as a princess. Not only in the term of protecting others, but in physical pain that she would potentially go through.
Or that's what Celestia keeps telling herself. Celestia constantly attempts to kill Twilight, bringing her back to life every time she stops breathing. Twilight doesn't understand. Why would her mentor put her through this? Why would she make her suffer like that? She claims it's to teach her how to deal with pain...
But is she really telling the truth, or does she need an outlet for the pain she suffered?
Special thanks to Mr101, Skeeter the Lurker, RainbowBob, and Merc
Dark and twisted.
Still think you could have drawn out the torture and Twilight's snap a bit more, but this works well.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Oh wow, that was actually very good
Here sir, have a like and fav :3
Awesome!
My problem with this is that Twilight some how manages to recover enough that same night to kill Celestia, it seems to quick for me. Other then that not bad, I give it a thumbs up.
Okay...not as messed up as the last one, but I like it a LOT better.
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For anyone who read this far, here's a little secret......
IT ANI'T NO SECRET I BUCKING HATE CELESTIA.
Ohmigosh I loved that.
Perfect for Halloween.
Gold ol' heart thumping horror, gotta love it :)
That....was the one of the most messed up things i've ever read.
And it was a great read. Most excellent.
History repeats itself?
Oh Twilight, I'm so disappointed...
I like this. There's no other way I can think of to put how much I enjoy this into words. Alas, I cannot find an image that does so either.
Well, that was disturbing. A great Halloween fic, too, as everyone else in the comments has said.
Not bad.
Hehe, that would actually be quite an experience, dying and being brought back, both negative and positive-wise
I mean, I would never dream of me doing the deed. But I do know someone out there might
Seems a bit gratuitous to me...
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LOL HOW AWESOMELY CROOKED LOL THAT WAS AWESOME!
That ending is horrible. Celestia's crimes being deliberately perpetuated, inflicting a cycle of abuser becoming the abused until the end of time. Nasty stuff.
Considering the fact Celestia has done far worst in other well known fanfics, I'd say she got off easy.
lot less weaker
That part isn't correct :P
And to be fair I don't think Twilight would snap after one time. Yes she would after a few times but I think this was way to fast.
Goddammit, it only took me forever to get that song out of my head, and now you put it back in. Oh, well - this fic looks interesting. I shall read this.
Implying that Celestia's magic is weaker when she's awake. I think you meant "Your magic is a lot weaker in your dreams." Other than that, good story.
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It's "eyes".
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It's "there".
a lot less weaker
So it's stronger in her dreams?
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It's "any way".
Despite all of this, and your desperate need for an editor, I really enjoyed this story. However, I feel like the "snap" should have been in more detail.
I don't take it that Celestia was an antagonist here actually. From what I've read she probably had a motive behind in that Twilight didn't understand. Who's to say Celestia or Cadance did not go through the same thing?
That awkward moment when you realize that the person who made this also made an amazing romance/comedy story...
This was dark and horrifying...
I loved it!
The most horrifying idea is that this vicious cycle could continue indefinitely.
Liked and faved, so I can revisit the emotional trauma of reading this!
Fantastic Grimdark one-shot. <3
Boy, dem chickens came home to roost QUICK didn't they? Rofl. Good for you, Twilight. Good for you.
Bitchlestia at her finest.
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Hours of torture and death, with no end in sight because she promised to do it again tomorrow. Speak for yourself. Its arguably self-defense.
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co-sign on the implied vicious cycle adding a whole 'nother layer of horror. There's a metaphor for child/sexual abuse in there somewhere, given what we know about the perpetrators of those crimes.
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Yeah, I coulda used more death types. I hear drowning is a pretty shitty way to go.
3973614 I meant going immediatly to murder. She could just as easily go to Luna, Cadanence, Shining armor, The royal guard :P.
It says that Starlight is a "unicorn" when she should be an alicorn at that point. Also if you somehow didn't get the memo, it's just a lot weaker, not a lot "less" weaker. Other than that I thought the story was nice ^^
The worst part of it is, Celestia didn't seem to realize why Twilight was upset at all (of course, that was a lot more than just "upset", but she didn't realize that there is a problem with what she did at all).
But Celestia accomplished her purpose. Twilight learned how to do what she needed to when confronted with a threat that needs to be removed.
Twilight was actually pretty gentle about murdering her, considering what she could have done. The worst punishment would have been letting Celestia live, and then use her magic to show Luna all of what she did to Twilight. It might break Luna, though.
That Twilight picked up that piece of Celestia's legacy i horrifying, though. I didn't put her as the "snap, then do exactly what psycho did to me" type. And it doesn't look like poor Starlight is an alicorn at all. I wonder how she'll justify what she does to her?
As only a unicorn, I doubt Starlight would be able to defeat her in dreams... particularly when Twilight's already lived through that scenario. And as an alicorn, Twilight had earth pony stamina, which has got to be the reason she could... well, even stand up after what she went through. A unicorn won't have that well of strength. What will she think when she pushes Starlight to the point that all bringing him back to life does is make his body fail under the strain and die again? What does she do when Starlight tries and fails to kill her, pushed by the same need she was--or even madder, until she's just a gibbering psychopath that can't even form words. Or when Starlight is pushed past the brink and all that's left is an empty shell that doesn't react or respond to anything. Celestia managed to excuse the near-comatose Twilight as nothing when she could actually hear the death-like moaning, but what does Twilight do when every scrap of Starlight dies and there is just a living corpse that breathes?
Thinking about it, and Twilight's comparison of herself to Celestia... would Twilight actually try to protect herself from Starlight at all? A death wish over a thousand years of regret isn't that hard to imagine.
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The feeling that I got from the story was that it was cyclical. Celestia was ready to pass on her mantle and that's how she did it. Because, realistically, that hardened Twilight. She wouldn't second guess herself or compare herself to Celestia after that. I got the feeling, though it's not stated directly, that Celestia's mentor did the same to her.
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Was sent here from this blog. All in all, it was a pretty decent fic.
I think Twilight just got crazy is all.
Maybe Celestia too.
Ok, so, fuck Tia, and Twi's crazy. I still want more, though!
What if celestia wanted twilight to kill her? Think about this. What if celestia is tired of ruling equestria and wants to pass on, but if she commits suicide no one gains her responsibilities and she still cares about equestria enough to not do that
so she needs twilight to kill her so twilight gets them and this is the only way celestia believes she can get twilight to kill her
“Just remember, the trials you go through are for the betterment of you, and to help you grow mentally and physically as a princess.”
To build immunity from the suffering that you will go through.”
She just lied on the ground, taking in the extreme measures of Celestia without so much of a peep.
6901321 Funny enough, I was going through this story thinking that very thing, if Celestia was trying to goad Twilight into killing her.
Would have been a better reason than... what it turned out to be.
This was painful to read in a way mostly because it was just sad. Your writing isn't poor or anything. The story is just sad.