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Weeping Angel


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Princess Twilight Sparkle has done something unheard of: she's found a changeling right outside Canterlot borders! But much to his surprise, Twilight doesn't kill him or turn him in as the law requires. Instead, she saves his life.
And when life gives you lemons, you will feed.


*Featured 5/19/14—5/21/14! Thank you so much, guys! I love you all! *Proof*
Set before "Twilight's Kingdom". Twilight has been princess approximately six months. Not sure if AU tag is necessary.

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Comments ( 249 )

You know what's so funny? This story, named feed, popped up in the feed. :raritywink:

4409876 :rainbowlaugh: I was thinking more of an inside joke, but sure. Let's go with that.

4409871
Baduum tsss!

4409876
I totally did that on purpose. :moustache:

4409879 angel is working for knightys secret service and trying to hint at us that the feed will be back soon

Is this is changeling x Twi story?
And is the changeling a colt or Twi's age?
Thank you!^.^

4409979
Twi's age. :twilightsmile:
I would certainly not do foalcon. Ever. No. :pinkiesick:

No, he just looks small, and it confused her.

hehe... anyway... il be keeping an Eye on this one.

It seems a little time skip-ish but otherwise its pretty good. I give it 7.465/10 so far.

4410203
Cool, I'll go with that. :heart: Thank you!

4410372
I deleted a line in there that compared Mimic to a child, and I think some people got confused and thought it was foalcon. But no, I would never do that.

Interesting? I think so.

Glad you like it so far!:rainbowkiss:

4409992 okay!Thanks for making that clearer.And so it is a Twi x Changeling story?^.~

Oooo I am interested. Will put on my read later list:twilightsmile:

Hmmm, interesting.
Some things:

Twilight has him in his custody already.

:rainbowlaugh:

though she couldn’t not immediately tell why.

You may want to fix that double negative.

She watched as he glance off into the horizon.

Missing "d" is missing!

written in scrawly hoofwriting

Since he used his magic, shouldn't that be referred to as "hornwriting"?

Anyhow, this feels new to me. There probably are stories with a similar premise, but I can't recall any.
Keep up the good work!:twilightsmile:

MAKE MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy:

4410885
Thank you for pointing those out to me. :twilightsmile: Hopefully they're fixed, and I'm glad you enjoyed. The idea was mostly inspired by the artwork, but it wasn't supposed to be dark until I got to it. :rainbowlaugh:

Hey, this was great start I think this could be added upon to make a sad story. I would love to give you idea's if you get writers block, this is something I wish I had made. If I could take this I probably would. You are great at your craft, if your good at drama do drama. I wish you luck in all your future endeavors. Be Bold. Be Free.

4411494
Thank you so much!:rainbowkiss:
I'm so glad you enjoyed this. :heart: I honestly thought it wouldn't be too good...
It will be sad as it builds up on the story, and it will get dark as well. I think drama is my best feature in writing, so I will stick with that. Not too good with comedy. :rainbowlaugh:

Thank you again!

Hey,there's no need to thank for the truth. You are an artist who knows what their doing. I might "Borrow" some of you stuff if you don't mind, I'm kind of jealous. Anyways though you might have thought you fell through on this one, I think that this is something that can develop to the point of being a novel or novelette instead of a story.

4411569
Jealous of me? Trust me, there's nothing to be jealous about. I had lots of help.:rainbowwild::heart:

I don't mind if you borrow some of the aspects from the story or any of mine. As long as you don't plagiarize, who am I to deprive someone of writing? :pinkiehappy:

But thank you again. I think you just made my day. :twilightsmile::rainbowkiss::heart:

There is no shame in getting help, anyways that does not take away from the writing of yours. And by the way, you have chosen easy topics and molded them beautifully. I, on the other hand have to work harder for I create characters, story, history, setting, and emotions. I start from scratch, with every blade of grass to the moon that belongs of a princess god. I wish I had somebody to edit and revise my story, it would allow somebody to make sure it makes sense without clouding the original story I made. I'll follow you and I will make sure to continue reading your (and editors) works.

Don't like the story? Please tell me why in the comments.

This makes you sound a liiiiittle defensive, mate. Especially since its the first thing I see after reading the title. I'd take that bit out if I were you. :twilightsheepish:

4412052
Oh, I wasn't trying to sound defensive. :twilightblush: Just trying to see what I could improve on in the story itself.
I'll do that, thank you. :twilightblush::heart:

this story is very good bring me MOAR:rainbowkiss:

My editor revised the story a bit.
Hope you guys like!

“I just wanted to warn you,” she continued, “that this is a dangerous place for changelings,” she said, panting.

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If I was Mimic, I would have facehoofed at that.

Life? Lemons?.. Heh, reminds me this:

It could still benefit from a proofreader. I’m picking out a fair number of mechanical errors just from a look over.

It isn’t quite grabbing my attention, but I’m picky about changeling focus stories, so odds are almost certain that I’m the problem here. That said, the masses have spoken; the story has been featured.

4409992 Anyone notice how he never answered the relationship question?

Mimic is safe as long as she doesn't betray Twilight's kindness. It is well within Twilight's authority to grant special dispensation for an enemy of the state to be present within Equestria, and attempting to improve relations with a hostile people is directly within Twilights purview as Princess of Friendship.

As long as Mimic stays in the presence and good graces of Twilight, anypony short of the diarchs themselves attempting to harm Mimic would be committing an act of treason. This will never occur to Twilight, as she doesn't think like an authority figure.

The greatest irony here is that if Mimic asked for help finding a way to feed the changelings without having to victimize ponies, then Twilight would bring her full resources to bear in solving that problem. Mimic's refusal to admit the nature of her mission for the sake of protecting the mission is, in fact, ruining her mission by preventing her from being able to complete it.

4414079
Erm, I must have to agree with you on that, except for one thing:
I am a girl.
:rainbowlaugh:

Who knows? Maybe we'll have some Twilestia goin' on. I don't know.:trollestia:

4414328
All of those points are very true. Except that Mimic is a boy. But Mimic, of course, couldn't know that. In his eyes, Twilight is still an enemy and can't be trusted.

I like it. I like it a lot. :twilightsmile:

4414435
Yay! Glad you like it!
Changelings... Changelings everywhere...:pinkiecrazy:
(P.S. I'm gonna work on the next chapter of Be Brave today... it'll hopefully be out soon)

When life gives you lemons..


YOU MAKE APPLE PIE!

When life gives you lemons, dont make lemonade. Get mad! I dont want your damned lemons! What am i supposted to do with these? Demand to see life's manager. Make life rue the day it thought it could give me lemons.

4414385 Can I make a spoilers guess, or... no, and I do apologize.:rainbowwild:

4414574
Sure, why not?
And no problem. Happens all the time, we are on the internet after all. :twilightsmile:

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