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After one of Sweetie Belle's clumsy mistakes ends up destroying one of her sister's entire fashion lines, Rarity is finally sent over the edge. But after a terrible accident lays Sweetie Belle at the foot of death's door, Rarity is faced not only with losing her sister, but also with the reality that she may never be able to apologize for what she did.

Rated T for safety.

Sequel! Hoof Covers Bruise

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Chapters (6)
Comments ( 202 )

Dayuum, man. 3 Chapters to start? I'll take it.

Amazing. Bucking amazing. Increadable. Inconceivable! UNFATHOMABLE! HOLY SWEET SAUCY AND SEXY CELESTIA THIS IS AMAZING!

Rarity needs to stop being such a fucking drama queen!

I just want to know when you are scheduled to continue!

I remember this story from Fanfiction.net. I'm thoroughly enjoying this. Hope you bring a new chapter up soon. :pinkiesmile:

Wow. Rarity went nuts!

Still. Not bad so far.

~Skeeter The Lurker

All my feels went into this story.:applecry::fluttercry::pinkiesad2::raritycry::raritydespair::ajsleepy:

So intense, I can literally picture all this in my head while reading. Simply amazing :twilightsmile:

luv this story so far, very emotional.:raritydespair::fluttercry::pinkiesad2:

oh boy favorite part so far was Scootaloo in this chapter cant wait for Ch. 4

when scoot got punched ....i fuckin hate you bitch:flutterrage:

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Love you, too.

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Dang. That's quite a compliment. :derpyderp2:
Glad to know you liked it so much!

2925833 I just say it how it is. Keep up the great work!

You've really got something here.

Your grammar and spelling are excellent, your writing is fluid, and you've got quite a good plot. There are a few contrivances, and it's a little obvious at points, but at the same time, it's definitely worth a read. Fav'd and liked.

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Thanks! Yeah, I agree that certain things come across as a bit contrived (Rarity's yelling fiasco cough cough), but I'm still kind of proud of what I've written thus far. Hopefully I'll have this thing updated by tomorrow, if all goes well.

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Okay, I lied. Maybe not BY tomorrow, but probably sometime tomorrow. Sorry, heheh.

No decline that I noticed, great as usual.
Hope you feel better!

I don't think you had to worry about this chapter being uneventful. If anything it's too eventful. :pinkiehappy:

I totally thought AB and Scoots were gonna charge into Sweetie's room and accidently kill her by screwing up the medical equipment:twilightoops:

Looks good. I hope you finish this soon.

I love this story, great job!

She her hoof away from Applebloom’s chin.

:rainbowhuh:

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:rainbowlaugh:

Fixed it. Thanks for pointing that out!

JBL

and punching her playfully on the arm

ponies have arms?

JBL

Huh, I feel as though I've read this story already......

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Oopsie poopsie. Fixing it now...

Thanks!

JBL

Run fat boy, run! Wait.... I guess that should be drake...

JBL

I'm just hoping Sweetie Belle survives.... :applecry:

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You may have. It's also posted on fanfiction.net.

3001048 Guess you'll have to just wait and see. :ajsmug:

Just one thing:

antivenom

It's actually called antivenin, though most call it antivenom.

I'm liking it so far, however:

cutting off the circulation to her leg in an effort to prevent any more of the venom from spreading

Tourniquets are useless against most snake bites, as the venom would have spread throughout the body within moments of the bite occurring. It can even be detrimental because if it is too tight it can shut off circulation and lead to gangrene.

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Tourniquets are useless against most snake bites, as the venom would have spread throughout the body within moments of the bite occurring. It can even be detrimental because if it is too tight it can shut off circulation and lead to gangrene.

Oh, I know that.

But Applejack doesn't.

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Thank you so much! Glad to know you liked it!

JBL

3001152 Ah that's probably it, I started off reading MLP fanfics there before switching to fimfiction.

JBL

“Is Rarity okay?” Spike whispered in Twilight’s ear. Twilight looked down at her assistant, who was staring at the scene before him in slack-jawed worry.

Jeez Spike you've got what I would think are two functioning eyes and a brain, what do you think? :ajbemused:

Anyway, heartstrings were pulled and feels were had. That's what you wanted, huh? HUH?! You filthy bastard!

If this was cheesy, then give me all of it, until my arteries are clogged and I get a heart attack and die....... um, I mean, This was an excellent chapter, very well written.

All is normal in this fic. And by normal I mean more heartstrings being pulled.

“But they still don’t know, Applejack! Something could go wrong and… she’ll die thinking her I hate her. Me, her own sister…”

I have a feeling something is wrong in this sentence

Nice going, A.B. and Scoot... :facehoof:
Poor Sweetie Belle... She's just a tiny puppy! :fluttercry:

I just got done reading "Silence", which was another story about Sweetie Belle, and after reading this, I'd say Sweetie Belle and Rarity are having a rough day.

Also, I didn't find this chapter cheesy at all

I never thought that Sweetie Belle could break Scoot's nose... or at least make it bleed.
Rarity, what have you done?
Somehow, I knew this chapter would have something to do with a snake!
How could a thing like this happen to a cute little filly like Sweetie Belle?!? :fluttershysad::pinkiesad2::raritydespair::applecry:

Phew. Just in time.
Please be okay, Sweetie Belle! :pinkiesad2:
You know, it's nice to see comic relief with A.J. and Rarity's collision and Spike's physique problems. :rainbowlaugh:
Twilight's always so busy, isn't she? :raritywink:

Man... Everypony's in a state of worry and panic. I don't blame them. Rarity really exhausted herself too much, huh? :derpyderp1:
Applejack sure was thirsty. :rainbowlaugh:

Poor Scoot and A.B... I'm glad to see that Twilight's there to wash the guilt away from their faces. :twilightsmile:
I have never seen Rarity this distraught before. I mean, at least she wasn't overreacting or being melodramatic. :rainbowhuh:
I'll wager that if Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon heard about Sweetie Belle's condition... they wouldn't be laughing.
Please let her survive in the next chapter! SHE'S TOO CUTE TO DIE!!! :pinkiesad2::fluttercry::raritycry:

I think it is OK the way it is. Just get it finished.:twilightsmile:

Amazing job on this chapter! I loved ever minute of (reading) It! Keep up the great work!

Oh...this one got me. This is one of the few fictions that actually got me to tear up :fluttershyouch:
It's just so...kejofhioehfr. I need to know what happens, I can't wait to read more!
:pinkiesad2: :pinkiesad2:

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