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Melon Hunter


Heartbroken after being rejected yet again, Pinkie resigns herself to a life of loneliness.

However, love has a way of sneaking up on you, and a chance meeting leads to Pinkie finding a pony who’s just perfect for her. A pony who may just be a little too perfect for her...

With her newly blossoming love life causing friction between her and her friends, will Pinkie really find happiness with her special somepony?

Or will Surprise turn out to be more than she could dream of?

A collaborative story with HighOctaneWildebeest

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 256 )

Melon Hunter fic.


Reading now.

Pretty much that.

Very good start here, though I'll note I was editing in my head the whole time…

I have not heard about Melon Hunter, but you have my favorite... and my reads on your other fics, and my watch:pinkiehappy:

I'm loving this so far! I need more! :pinkiehappy:

Pinkie x Surprise, I haven't read before, but it seems so adorable.

Pinkie x Surprise? I'm in. :pinkiehappy:

I've been waiting on this to come out since I saw the artwork over on Scramjet747's DA page. I'm enjoying it so far, so keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

Well now Pinkie meets Surprise well I do say you have my full attention!:pinkiehappy:

Lookin' interesting!

Will be following this one, yes :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

All the Pinkie faces, all of them.

I liked it, until I came to the last few hundred words, in which you ramp up the problems between them in a rather unrealistic way.

Still, not bad, not bad at all.

I can tell this is going to be an *awesome* fic. :pinkiehappy:
+ 600 internets for using surprise as a character :twilightsmile:

Now see....I'm not usually one for Pinkie Pie ships....not after cupcakes....but I think this one will be good! Although.....I think it would be better if you had the first part of it with Surprise and then towards the end RD and Pinkie get together realizing they ARE perfect for each other. But hey that's just me. You do what you want :pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy::pinkiesad2::pinkiesick::pinkiesmile::heart::moustache::twilightsmile:

...wait. Surprise works at the weather factory?
No, don't think these things! There's cookies and punch by the door!

Suprise sounds perfect for Pinkie! ...Almost too perfect... :applejackunsure:

Uh oh. Something tells me that this will end up like a second "Perfect on Paper"... :fluttershysad:

Way to make me cry before the first scene is over. Bravo.
Criticism: I think Pinkie would be wiser than to admit to her friends that she replaced Dash so quick. And maybe give more time in between Cup Cake's talk and meeting Surprise. Looks like a good start though.
I just realized something: I beg of you NOT to make Pinkie crazy. :fluttercry: Let some other ponies see Surprise and talk about her later.
I won't be able to take another insane Pinkie Pie story. :fluttercry:

...Dang... MOAR! :flutterrage:

It's pretty obvious that Pinkie had a mental breakdown. Peaty, I was hoping that Surprise would be a interesting addition to the story aside from being a Pinkie Pie clone. It's still early in the fic so I will give the next chapters a chance

Ahah, oh dear, Pinkie Pie.. :pinkiecrazy::rainbowderp:

Oh, we are going this route then. Darn, I was hoping for Surprise x Pinkie. Still :pinkiecrazy:

2257605>>2257635>>2257956 I'm not going to spoil anything, but ask yourself this: You've spotted an 'obvious' plot twist in Chapter 2 of a planned 9 chapter fic. Are you absolutely sure I'm going to show all my cards this early on into the game? :twilightsheepish:

2257993 Hhhmmm. Where could this go? WHY did she meet Surprise? Is she a Changeling by any chance? Invisible? A ghost or entity of love? I am very interested now. Do continue. And I look forward to more plot (not THAT one) :twistnerd:.

I am loving the promise that this story has. Although the not too subtle clues that Surprise is just in Pinkie's head makes me feel a bit sad.:fluttercry:
Some possible Pinkie/Dash elements perhaps? Hard to say. Well here's hoping to a happy end if possible, I'm still very interested to see the route this story takes.

So long as Pinkie and Surprise don't start up a boxing club under a bar or anything I'm happy to see where this goes. : )

It definitely looks like Surprise is in Pinkie's head, but you did say you have other thoughts on the 'twist' to this whole story, so that will keep me wondering.

I can't help but feel that Suprise is not real but then again a double trick to the audience is also welcome hehe. MOAR! :flutterrage:

ooh the waiter is blind in one eye :derpyderp1:
Surprise flew to fast for big mac to see clearly :derpytongue2:
and Surprise was sitting behind something so Rainbow could not see her :rainbowderp:
cus Surprise has to be real it would be cruel on Pinkie :pinkiesad2:
great story :pinkiehappy:

2258039 You may have underestimated me just a tad, then!

Or maybe I'm just saying this to try and throw you off the scent. Who knows? :scootangel:

There are several ways you could go with this. Just make sure the way you choose is done as well as the previous chapters! I can't wait for more! :twilightsmile::moustache:

I felt really bad for Pinkie in the first chapter, that kinda thing is rough.
As for the second chapter, I am pretty sure Pinkie is either having some sort of breakdown, or something with the Mirror Pool.

Aw man, Pinkie's insane!
Poor Pinkie. . . Or perhaps something more then? :duck::pinkiegasp:

After the other stories i read about insane!pinkie i say this one makes more sense. i mean she suffered someone not returning her love and we all know how pinkie deals with rejection.:pinkiehappy:

Im guessing surprise isn't real and pinkie has gone insane. Anypony else thinking the same thing?




TWILIGHT IS SATAN :twilightoops:

There we go. I figured out your master plot!

holy shit pinkie/surprise jdfhghfhjsjsjsjdes must read now

oh shiiii

I think I know where this is going.


Rainbow saw Surprise. She's not the result of a mental breakdown.

I'm thinking changeling, or (based on the cover pic) something related to the mirror pool.

2218093 yes cookies and punch! were totally not going to grind you into rainbows and sing you a Mexican style song that would explain why your being ground into rainbows :moustache:

I would say Pinkie is imagining Surprise, but that's too obvious so early in the story. What kind of trap are you setting here author? :unsuresweetie:

2422666 Well if I remember correctly, it never says that Rainbow saw Surprise, it says that she sees Pinkie after she parts with Surprise. It doesn't help that the waiters on the restaurant never interacted with Surprise and their reactions indicates that Pinkie is alone.
So yeaaah I'm sticking with Pinkie snaped theory :pinkiecrazy:

The clues say that Surprise isn't real (or visible), but RD last line makes me think that's not the case; hallucinating isn't something you 'get yourself into.'

Well, most definitely watching this one.

Hehe, reminds me so much of "Party of One". This scenario is actually legit, from my point of view. Something like this could happen.

Though hopefully, Rainbow Dash wasn't actually replaced by a bucket of turnips XD. If that is "Surprise" though, I'm gonna laugh.

At any rate, this is enjoyable. Keep up the good work author!

Hoo boy, you're giving us lots of little bits that could be interpreted either way, aren't you? :twilightangry2::derpytongue2:

im guessing pinkie's gone crazy

WHY ARE YOU TORTURING ME?! :raritycry: Too many signs point to too many variables! She could be made up and in her imagination or it could be a ploy with Fluttershy and Dash to hate Surprise for dating Pinkie or something much, much worse! MOAR! :flutterrage: Please?

That's far too obvious. Surprise is probably the CMCs in a pony costume.


Curses, you have foiled our nefarious plan to ship Pinkie with all three of the CMC. :derpytongue2:

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