"...what did I just even read." - Wintermist || "Pour la beauté du geste" || ooo || π
I wasn't worried. I wasn't worried about anything specifically, I certainly wasn't worried about this. But it's okay. Accidents happen. Things can be fixed. Just wait. No matter how wrong it feels. No matter what's happening. Everything will be okay. Stay calm. It's all under control.
An entry into the 2nd A Thousand Words contest, under the "Horror" category.
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that is terrifyingly descriptive, love the element of repetition
Thus, the egg hatched and began the alien invasion.
Wonderful horror.
Yeah this fucking rocks, good work
Admittedly, this might be a reach, but it just occurred to me that the title could kinda-sorta be a double entrende: Twilight got a compound fracture… after the compound fractured.
Nicely done with this!
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Ding-ding, that was indeed intentional. Good catch!
Whelp looks like carnage ended up in Equestria and decided that Twilight is the best host
As someone who’s had a compound fracture, this story hits the nail on the head on what it feels like.
Did... Did Twilight blow herself up with a chunk of dynamite of indeterminate origin and end up stuck to the ceiling?
that is true!
oof, that certainly sounds like a little more than shock. or maybe really, really bad shock
ooh that is unpleasant to imagine
ah, the nitrogen would make it seem that way, huh…
ooh. the way it’s written so far feels like trying to make a red herring out of mysterious compounds and unseen creatures, when all that happened was an explosion and a horrific, mortal wound. the “it”, not being blood, but something else that is pooling from Twilight’s wound, leaves few candidates but none of them good for Twilight’s prospects of surviving this (poor Twilight!). visceral and horrifying, thank you for writing!
Fascinating study in Twilight’s mindset in extreme duress, doubling down on cold analysis to quiet the panic threatening to overtake her. The object causing all of this comes off as kind of vague given how few words you had left by the time of the reveal, but this is still a well-crafted bit of atmospheric horror. Thank you for it and congrats on the silver.
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It's kind of vague, but to me, it can either be read as Twilight set off dynamite (or something similar) and it blew up, somehow sticking her to the ceiling (magical response?) and the things she's feeling are hallucinations from things like stress or blood loss or it isn't dynamite, but some sort of monster/magic/actual thing, with regards to implications of Twilight feeling things crawling near her mouth, lungs, etc.
Also, OP, this is a very good depiction of shock and adrenaline in response to trauma or a sudden event. I was in a car wreck last year bad enough to total my car (whole front end crushed), and my thought process was similar enough.
Hello! Here's your courtesy note for my review of this. A little vague perhaps, but in a sense that works for the situation. Twilight is certainly very Twilighty in the way she reacts, even in the circumstances. Liked and faved.