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Knackerman


I am the Knackerman. Most of my writing deals with horror, suspense, and tragedy. And yes, there will be gore.

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Apple Bloom thought it was just a game at first. That was what Sweetie Belle had said anyways. It was just something to bring out at sleep overs to scare each other silly before going to bed.

But then Apple Bloom started playing with the Ouija board by herself... or so she thought. At first she’s thrilled when her parents contact her. It gives her a connection with them she always wanted but never had. But as time goes on, the things they say sound less and less like what a parent would say to a child. The things they ask her to do become more and more unthinkable.

When she decides to throw away the board game, she thinks that will be the end of it. Unfortunately, she might be done playing with it, but it isn’t done playing with her.

- Inspired by a series of artworks by xxmarkingxx

Chapters (10)
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Comments ( 39 )

You now have my attention :twilightsmile:

the picture's style looks like braeburned, who's the artist please? :eeyup:

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xxmarkingxx
I linked to his gallery in the story description.

I searched for that pic in his/her gallery before asking you but maybe I was unattentive... though his/her big mac really looks like braeburned's.

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The link in my previous comment will take you straight to them. Or you can just type ‘Ouija’ into the search bar in his gallery.

Nice to see you writing again, dude.

Knackerman, you've done it again. A great story! Can't wait until you start really getting into your groove, if you catch my drift (i.e. creepy stuff :pinkiecrazy:) :raritywink:.

I actually know the pictures your talking about on Deviantart and I've even thought once or twice about making a one-shot series based on them; looks like you beat me to the punch with "Ouija," :twilightblush:, but maybe I can do some others. Who knows?

Good luck with the next chapter (as I said, can't wait for things to start getting freaky; that's when things get good in your stories.)

It's more like “breaking all the rules when playing Ouija board" to me...:facehoof:

Bad things happen, like, REALLY BAD.

“Are you moving it!?”

Called it! Freaking “Playing Ouija Board and asking everyone if they're moving it"-cliché:rainbowlaugh:

Man, I really love how it started.
Actually, I've been waiting for someone making a fic about Ouija Board since FOREVER and FINALLY it's HERE:rainbowkiss:

You know what? I was actually planning on writing a fic like this myself. And guess what, it also happens to be revolving around the Apple Family. But instead of Applebloom, it's Twilight and Spike holding a seance with Applejack.:twilightsheepish::moustache::ajsleepy:

I'd really appreciate it if you could keep this up. Looking forward to more updates!:twilightsmile:

- Inspired by a series of artworks by xxmarkingxx

So... It's NOT based off of the movie?

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This story? Nah.

The artwork might be.

It was wonderful seeing this story updated, keep the good work up mate!

So glad to see a new chapter. A happy ending :pinkiesmile:... or is it :pinkiecrazy:?

This is a fantastic take on an old idea (Apple Bloom contacting her parents through dark means, only to have it turn out completely wrong :twilightsheepish:.) Can't wait for the next chapter (don't take too long, though :raritywink:.)

Two new chapters, back to back. I must say, Knack, I'm impressed :pinkiehappy:. I knew the story was far from over. Can't wait to see how this turns out. Will it be like "SStB?" Or end a little happier?

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I haven’t decided yet. But you can expect things to get worse before they get better.

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Can't wait. I just love your horror stories :pinkiecrazy:. There's a reason why so many are in my Crème de la Crème folder.

Can't wait to read what it was that moved into their farm.

Well. THAT just happened :applejackconfused:! I SO did not expect that to happen. Hopefully Applebloom's okay. Good job at getting back in the game. :raritywink: Can't wait for mooo-oooore :pinkiecrazy:.

Interesting story. Have a upvote sir!

There we go. Thanks for the story sir! It was a good reading creepy read!

Good ending. I was honestly expecting a bad ending like "SStB," and you didn't disappoint. Great job on ending.

Well, that was depressing...

That good sir was a delightfully traumatizing read! Have a mustache! :moustache:

This is one of my favorite scary stories now, from start to finish this story was very well written! And it honestly kinda spooked me. Keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

I like how you don't ignore Sleepless in Ponyville and have Scoots actually be scared of ghost stories.

Too bad the CMC aren't genre-savvy, or else they would know not to trip the obvious horror/supernatural flag. Of course, it's kind of a little weird for them to be accusing one another of moving the board when the board is spelling out phrases word-by-word or words letter-by-letter instead of just pointing to one word :trollestia:

I'm mildly surprised Apple Bloom didn't point out the whole Babs Seed episode where AJ was pretty blind to the bullying going on, but, well. Still, it's moderately refreshing to see the adults actually notice something's going on, though in this case it's pretty blatant with Apple Bloom. Applejack attacking Apple Bloom's performance from even before Abby's personality change though is going to be something she can never walk back.

So, dream, hallucination, or supernatural forces from the great beyond now encroaching on reality and at least tainting Apple Bloom's perception? So far, it's a nice, slower burn that's building up.

Hmm. That kind of takes some of the fun out of the story. I guess I'm kind of in-between between 'the adults should actually listen and take things seriously' and 'the ouija board setting off the Cutie Mark map just makes it too obvious to Twilight and Starlight something's up and that it's not just some mass hysteria'.

I wonder if Sweetie Belle got into anything she wasn't supposed to, since she was the one who originally had the ouija board.

Well. That went from sort of slow-burning creepy in-the-corner-of-your-eyes horror to straight up gorn pretty quick :applejackconfused:. I can't imagine what Apple Bloom was thinking when she said yes to the dark entity taking her to her parents. Dead ponies and meeting them again never goes well in this kind of fic!

And so Twilight's 'adults are idiots' trope slipped in at the end by not making sure Apple Bloom was alright then :trollestia:

Well, that didn't really define any new boundaries for pony horrorfics or anything, but that was still a fun read

0-1000000 real quick I was expecting something completely different but I really like this.

All this trouble to save her and she just gets casually abducted?

How unfortunate.

So is that an alternate AB in the last chapter or did they.... Skin her and wear her skin?:pinkiesick:

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Which do you prefer?

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Then it is that one.

Creepypasta survival guide.
Rule 46
Burn ouija boards, but be sure to have one of those car fresheners handy. The real reason why spirits get pissed off is because of that foul aroma that it produces when burned.

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