The Bike of Aging

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Celestia discovers she is eight thousand years older than Luna. Both of the sisters go down to the basement to see if they can discover the cause, and they find something even better.

Cute pictures.

Gift for Otterwa.

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Bicyclette

Bicyclette #1 · Sep 5th, 2021 · 17 · ·

its me im the bike that makes you old

Plonys are Great

Plonys are Great #2 · Sep 5th, 2021 · 4 · ·

A celly fic :>

ThePinkedWonder

ThePinkedWonder #3 · Sep 5th, 2021 · 5 · ·

Celestia flipped open the picture book to a picture of Twilight dozing in a mound of books that resembled a castle. “Aw, isn’t she just the most precious thing?”

I totally believe her. Twilight as a mare sleeping in a castle of books is adorable, but filly Twilight doing it has to be adorable+!

“Worth it,” Luna agreed. “Look at this one. I still remember the day you found out about cake. You wouldn’t stop stuffing yourself with them-”

Cakestia is best Celestia.

In all,10/cuteness.

Meowofy

Meowofy #4 · Sep 5th, 2021 · 5 · ·

“Right, right. But how can you resist cute Twilight memories? Aren’t you dating her?”

Twilunaaaaa~!

This was a fun read, I’d totally get distracted if there were baby pictures of Twily too XD

Dewdrops on the Grass

Dewdrops on the Grass #5 · Sep 6th, 2021 · · ·

Well that was silly. And funny. Nice little ditty here, Sin.

BleuBlooms

BleuBlooms #6 · Sep 6th, 2021 · · ·

I liked this. Though, bit's of silence and a variation in tone just slightly would have made the humour stick a hair more.(for me, mind) Mostly because at times it was confusing rather them random. (Mostly in the dialogue and the odd shift's in conversation. Which could have been tempered by more fluctating tone and describing different bit's and focusing more on random bit's in the environment. (Only by say 3%)

B_Munro

B_Munro #7 · Sep 6th, 2021 · · ·

It's probably a circus bike.

The Iguana Man

The Iguana Man #8 · Sep 7th, 2021 · · ·

Wow... that opening hit me with a bizarre kind of deja vu - one of my own stories deals with a very similar matter of age differences and how Luna aged or didn't on the moon and even includes some TwilightxLuna stuff, though where it goes with it is... quite different.

Not that I'm suggesting a connection between the two stories - it's a pretty natural idea and I'm surprised more people haven't done stuff with it - just wanted to note it gave me a really weird-but-cool feeling.

Anyway, fun story. My only major criticism is that I felt there could have be more done with Luna's relationship with Twilight. Not that it should have been a full-on shipfic or anything, it's just that I'm of the opinion that one should only include a ship if you're going to really do something with it. And, while I think this story does somewhat - using it to colour and contextualize Luna's viewing of the photos, I do think it's a touch close to the borderline and could have had more done.

That... may not have made sense entirely, but hopefully you can parse it at least a little. In any case, good job.

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