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TheOneAndOnlyRhyanSparks


Who, me? No-one special really. I like to write. That's it. xD

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To make a long backstory short, I died. Kinda. It's hard to describe. But at least my friend came along with me.

You know that dreadful feeling when you know you're dying, or are about to? ... Well, that happened for me. It was on a dark road at night during a snow-stormy school trip, when it happened. We were halfway through being hit by the front of a heavy goods truck after losing our footing in the snow.

Instead of dying, I'm blinded by a weird silvery yet rainbow coloured flash of light before appearing in another forest. I'm not sure where I am, but one thing's for sure; this isn't any forest I knew of, let alone the animals around me. That's when a strange, living pile of sticks and logs notices my unconscious friend nearby, something strange happens and I lose consciousness all in one go.

I feel trapped and tired, until I'm vaguely aware of an unusually very soft-spoken, female voice over the top of some other voices as my hearing returns.

" --irls? I think I found somthing you should look at."
"Sweet Celestia! Who... or what are they?!"
"Oh dear, they're not looking so go--"
And that's where our story begins, arriving in a foreign world, barely conscious to a group of girls who have saved us. And that's not the only surprise in stock either.

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 53 )

Good beginning can't wait for the next chapter

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Thanks! If you've got any questions or concerns, feel free to comment away!
10393906
I hope it'll be good enough as an anthroponic* story - it's my first anthro! πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚

[* = anthro ponies in a different type of use]

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new update coming real soon! 😁 keep an eye out! πŸ˜‰πŸ˜„

10463488
Thanks! I'm half-way through the next chapter right now 😜

I’m really liking this so far

Shame we were often called nerds and geeks for our innate ability to talk in terms nobody else knew.

i know that feel bro

10494644
I'm glad you enjoyed it! 😁
Let me know what you think will happen next πŸ˜‰

10494938
transformation into ponies slowly? i really dont know

Can't wait for the next chapter

10671715
Glad to hear it! 😁I hope you're looking forward to the next few chapters!πŸ˜‰

I shall try my best to get out at most two chapters in the next few weeks or so! πŸ˜„Forgive me if I fail this deadline by march πŸ˜‚

Rushing through the boring parts of my life and the time I was in hospital after a not-so-severe but very painful ski trip accident, my life was fairly okay, if not for constant family bickering that always seems to end up being aimed at me.

Setting up a Chekhov's Gun in the first chapter? Let's hope it goes somewhere!

The strength behind the stare was incredible and I was left partially stunned by it. I couldn’t help but wonder how she’s so shy and timid, yet is able to give me a stare that nobody back on Earth could ever replicate. It’s like the stare bound chains to my limbs and strong tape across my mouth, and yet I only felt like this was just part of the strength behind it.

I typically hate the overpowered stare but here just makes me scratch my head to why she did it. I just don't see how she would know he was curious to use it and even if she did I doubt she would just to shut him up. Seems like an excuse to avoid a discussion on magic which could come up later anyway, which will make it completely meaningless. Sorry I just can't help but dwell on it a bit.

10749137
the next chapter will reveal why. keep your eyes peeled for him asking about it ;)

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Hope you don't mind me asking, but what's a Chekov's Gun? πŸ€”
And I'm glad you're looking forward to it! :twilightsmile:

If you have any questions, comments, or you spot any errors, feel free to leave as many of them to your heart's content! :pinkiehappy:

10749394
It's a trope that states every element in a story must be important and any unimportant ones must be removed.

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The thing about the stare that rubs me the wrong way is how I hate the idea of someone taking another's free will away. I hope when it's explained you also call her out on doing so. It's fine if it's during dangerous situations, but that scene at the hospital is just unjustifiable to me. I will read and see the reason but I am sure I will still hate how she just did it..

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https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chekhov%27s_gun

Basically, if the ski injury won't be important later, then the story wouldn't draw attention to it.

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let's just say that I might be covering most of the things that seem uncovered or forgotten in the following chapter ... including the link the injury has to our protagonists. :raritywink:

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Don't you fret! If you're looking for the reason why, the answers miiiiiiight be coming sooner than you think! :raritywink: :pinkiesmile:

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I think I'm just gonna cover this question in this comment as I come up with a way to explain their situation: Fluttershy thinks of Cal and Rue as animals. After all, they're an unknown species in the world and because Cal and Rue haven't talked until they let the ... "hospital" ... she assumes they're hairless animals in clothes.

I will cover this in more detail as soon as I can for you! :D

10817241
Um I don't see how that answers my question. I mean they talked before the stare so I don't know what you are on about.
Edit: Double checked and Cal did speak before the stare happened

10817244
True. But I was aiming for the fact that she still saw him as a hairless ape and didn't want him to talk as they brought him out of the "hospital". Plus, I did say I'll cover it properly soon. ;)

10817263
no offense but you shouldn't have told me that much because you only made me more confused. hope the next chapter isn't too long.

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But I was aiming for the fact that she still saw him as a hairless ape

I think you failed in the execution of that to be honest. When she became shy when he first talked it seemed to me that she realized he was more than an animal and nothing convinced me otherwise. So you telling me so just makes me confused. No offense, but I also find that idea completely idiotic. He clearly demonstrated he was sapient, so unless she was delusional, I don't see how she could believe that.

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Sorry about that ... I guess it's been a while since I've written the last chapter that I forgot to read it over at least once or twice πŸ˜…

If you'd like to offer an alternative edit, please feel free to DM it to me so I can put it in!

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No thank you it's your story. I am just going to give my honest thoughts on it and whether or not there are changes is entirely up to you. You don't have to make any changes on my account if you don't want to.

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I want to make the story flow properly, so if something doesn't match up with what's happened previously, I'm always open for re-edits. After all, I don't want to have continuity errors or plot-holes like most fanfictions I'm finding at the minute.

10819955
I can respect that but it's you that will ultimately have to make those changes. I don't feel comfortable rewriting portions of another's story, so you will have to do it yourself.

10819964
true. But all will be explained towards the end of the next chapter, so there's no need to worry - sorry for the confusion!! πŸ˜…πŸ€£

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Hope you're looking forward to the conversation though - sorry in advance for the first part being a little lengthy in the next chapter, but it rides up to Cal and Rue conversing with Twilight and Cal asks about it. Please let me know if you're enjoying the story though! Would be nice to know if the pace is okay too πŸ˜… :twilightsmile:

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Yeah the pace is fine so far. No need to apologize for a lengthy chapter I actually prefer those over short and quick chapters. Can't wait to get the full context here.

I guess I can buy her being used to having to use it on troublesome creatures. I just have to ask what did Cal do to make her trigger it though he didn't really do anything to warrant it though.

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The force of habit thing I'll expand on in the next chapter. When they've calmed their emotions down a little from what I'd like to call "emotional bickering".

It'll explore the reasons and excuses a bit more, then I'll let the story just trail along normally from that point onwards. You may even get a surprise in the next two chapters, if I can't figure out any filler content, that could make the story a bit more interesting! πŸ˜‰ :twilightsmile:

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Lmk if I made any typo's or have any unfinished sentences and I can fix them before the next chapter goes live :raritywink:

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Alright then I'll wait. So do Twilight and the gang still view Cal and Rue as only animals because I think they proved that they aren't. If they do I hope they make it clear they aren't in the next chapter. I just hope the force of habit thing isn't because she uses it on every creature she helps with because they don't deserve that unless they truly are a hand full.

Comment posted by TheOneAndOnlyRhyanSparks deleted May 23rd

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Everyone except Twilight know Cal and Rue as "pony-like animals" or something along those lines.

Knowing Twilight's habits, as she hasn't seen their kind before, she's inclined to find out what they are so she has the hopes of learning something new. Hope this make sense! :raritywink: :twilightsmile:

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Wow that's actually kind of funny. Ok these two creatures we haven't seen before they can talk and seem as smart as ponies and other sapient creatures, so they're not ordinary animals, but we can't consider them on the same level as us for reasons. I can tell the next chapter or few will be fun when the humans and ponies clash over this.

kind of disappointed there wasn't a bit of a heated talk with the humans over the ponies not considering them sapient beings, but still nice to see another update I guess.

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That'll take place in the next chapter. Don't worry, I wanted to add it to the end yet idk why, but starting the next chapter with it seemed and felt better... So I just wanna say sorry about that! :twilightblush: :twilightsheepish:

10900349
That's fine. I hope the next chapter isn't too long. I forgot about this fic and managed to catch it was updated on the main page.

10900691
No I mean on the updates section. It wasn't featured or anything. Sorry about the confusion.

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